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Wanderer D

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This story is a sequel to The Three Sisters

What if... After "The Three Sisters" Rarity managed to find Chrysalis and talk to her?

A definite sequel.

First Published
1st Aug 2012
Last Modified
1st Aug 2012

Comments ( 206 )

#1 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Oooooo ... sounds like a wonderful concept.  Must ... read ... now....

Yay. My first first post ever.  Someone call Pinkie its time to party! :pinkiehappy:

Well, with first comment, I guess there comes a responsibility of letting you know what I think. See seperate comment below...

#2 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

I read!

#3 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

When i read a title that makes no fucking sense but still pulls me in

I know its going to be a feat

#4 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Mind = blown.

Edit: I just couldn't let it slide.

“I really won’t look good on you!”

LOL

Cynewulf
Story Approver
#5 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Wow! I love this! It's great to see Chrysalis as was written in Three Sisters after the wedding!

#6 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

And headcanonized.

a3V
#7 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Noticed a typooooooo.

She’s mercyless

:derpytongue2:

#8 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

>>1008203

No editors, no double-checking, it’s as it was written.

#9 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

D'awwwwwww! :rainbowkiss:

Seriously good story! A few spelling and grammar mistakes, but for a unedited fic it was entirely readable.

I would actually like to see this continued! Find out how the family reunion went...

Bravo, good sir! :moustache:

#10 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

... Meanie Head. Writing this off-screen like that! *Huffs*

... But it was still good. Jerk.

#11 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Darn it D, ya keep making changelings look okay (creepy as hell sometimes but not pure abominations)

a3V
#12 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

>>1008217

I know. Just pointing it out so he can fix it later, if he wants to. :eeyup:

#13 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

This is now head canon.

More of this story line please.

#14 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Sequel. Get to work slave.

Wanderer D
Moderator
#15 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

>>1008203 >>1008173 heh, thanks :twilightblush: that's what happens when you don't send stuff to pre-readers and editors...

#16 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Neat little read.

#17 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

That was great. I loved The Three Sisters. I hope there is more stories set in this world. :twilightsmile:

#18 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

The first was wonderful. This is just as good. I do wholeheartedly suggest you continue using this as the start for a continuation. Granted, it may not run more than an additional chapter or two, and it could go quite a few ways, but the start is great in any case.

#19 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

I wish of a sequel! :moustache:

#20 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

:fluttercry: MORE:flutterrage:

#21 · 108w, 14h ago · · ·

Quite impressive. A few spelling issues, but it flowed so beautifully.

The Three Sisters was good, and this only makes it better, even if it isn't "canon" it does have emotion.

Just awesome.

#22 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

Interesting... I will watch this carefully.

#23 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

First time making it before a feature! And hole CRAP is this going to get featured! I loved it! Make it official! I was so engrossed with the idea of a reunion of the two sisters, that I didn't even see your errors. I might have to go over it again.

Also damn you. This is one of those things that I would LOVE to see continued, but feel that perhaps a continuation from here wouldn't necessarily be the right choice.  :twilightangry2:

Great job!

#24 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

"Purity" - what a peculiarly ironic name. A combination of Pupa and Rarity, that provides a reminder that she does not belong to either race, neither changelings nor ponies - that a "pure" creature is the one thing she cannot be.

How peculiar indeed...

Frostwyrm

#25 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

... You should have random ideas pop into your head more often. Three Sisters was amazing, and I'm glad to see it continued, even if it isn't strictly official. It would be interesting to see how Sweetie reacts to Rarity's explanation too. Anyway, great story.:twilightsmile:

#26 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

You just hit straight to my heart good sir! Bravo!

#27 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

>>1008149 I guess being the first commenter comes with some responsibilities...

"A/N: So... this popped into my head today and wouldn’t leave me alone. So I wrote it. No editors, no double-checking, it’s as it was written. So pardon the lesser quality XD"

Really??!! :pinkiegasp:  This is amazing.  Definately not lesser quality at all.  In fact, the only error that came to my notice while reading it was the following:   “I really won’t look good on you!” --> 'I' should be 'It.' The characters feel plausible, the flow is consistant, and the dialouge feels authentic. It definately was a wonderful inspiration that you got! Thank you for writing it down and sharing it with us! Its definately getting a thumbs up and a fav from me! I hope to see this in the Feature List soon and for an extented period of time.

The story was great and I think it makes a wonderful continuation to your "Three Sisters" story-arch, if you ever choose to make it official.  A sequel to this story would probably require Sweetie Bell to be told the truth, and that could get a bit messy and complicated, though it would be interesting to see what effect Purity had on her sister and how things changed in the Hive.

The only question I have is whether Purity intentionally sought out Chrysalis in the forest, whether she simply stumbled upon Chrysalis, or whether that was simply a 'Deus ex Machina'/'plot device' to get the story started.  I, personally, think that after having revealed to her friends her secret, and having seen her sister after so many years, that there would have been a desire on Purity's part to seek out, help, and reconnect with her sister after she got defeated inCanterlot. By the way, I love the name Purity for your character.  I can't recall if you used it in your previous story or whether that was something that got created in the ensuing comments to that story.

I also like the added depth you gave to Chrysalis in both this, and the previous story; making her more than a stock villain. I don't like purely evil monsters ... I like the complex, deep, realistic, believable ones. Those are the interesting ones.

Anyways, great job with the story! It was a pleasant surprise to see that you made an (un)offical sequal to "The Three Sisters." Keep up the great work! :twilightsmile:

#28 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

I would love to see a small series of chapters about this. maybe 5 or so IF that. just something that has them meet and everything.

#29 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

i want to sleep, but  Wanderer D have a new story = no sleep

yo queria dormir, pero Wanderer D tiene una nueva historia = no duerno

:fluttershysad:

Rarity --- a crown made of jade ---  Jade :derpyderp2:

#30 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

> “Sweetie Belle,” Rarity rolled her eyes and sighed as she followed her sister down. “Didn’t I ask you to tell anypony that came over that I was busy today and to leave a message?”

I see what you're trying to do, but the comma doesn't seem to belong. A period wouldn't work either. I dunno - but I'd reword that.

#31 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

Now for a threequel :raritystarry:

#32 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

Purity as a nickname. Nice use of irony there WD. I really liked it.

Also:

Sweetie said in awe. “I really won’t look good on you!”          the "I" should be an "It"

Obselescence
Moderator
#33 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

Wanderer, why do you insist on making me look bad? ;_;

#34 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

XD   :applecry:  realmente bella la historia XD.... le dara un infarto a bell al saber la verdadd e su hermana :derpytongue2:

#35 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

Wunderbar! That was brilliant! Would love to read more of this sorta stuff, sequel maybe? :duck:

#36 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

don't suppose chrysalis would consider sending her youngest to live with her aunt.

#37 · 108w, 13h ago · · ·

What do you know!  I just saw the story in the Feature List! Congrades! Yay! :yay:

#39 · 108w, 12h ago · · ·

One word, threequel.

#40 · 108w, 12h ago · · ·

damn we need the family party:raritystarry::pinkiehappy: please?:fluttercry:

#41 · 108w, 12h ago · · ·

Dear Diary,

Today I spit out my drink and read a good book.

#42 · 108w, 12h ago · · ·

Continuation. This is what this story needs. Now have a like, fav, and a stache. :moustache:

#44 · 108w, 12h ago · · ·

I'm gonna go ahead and favorite, in case you decide to write more.

:ajsmug:

#46 · 108w, 11h ago · · ·

>>1008608

Wanderer, why do you insist on making me look bad? ;_;

Why do the both of you insist on making ME look bad? :fluttercry:

#47 · 108w, 11h ago · · ·

Personally, I would love to see more of this.  

#48 · 108w, 11h ago · · ·

Aaaand now I want to know what would happens when the family reunites. I bet the less serious daughters would love to spend time with their aunt and cousin. I smell a spinoff series!!! :raritywink:

#49 · 108w, 11h ago · 1 · ·

:twilightangry2:WHY YOU END ONE-SHOT WITH CLIFF HANGER?!! :flutterrage: HOW SHE EXPLAIN LETTER TO SWEETIE?!!!!!

>>1008591 Noooo, Sweetie Belle really won't look good on Rarity. I mean really, who looks good wearing their little sister?


EDIT: I give you like anyway.

#50 · 108w, 11h ago · · ·

MOAR!!!!!

.......

okay, now that i've calmed down a bit. I must say that this is a truly interesting concept here. I'd probly give all my bits for more Changeling Rarity fics.:raritystarry:

Good Work Wanderer D!

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