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What if... After "The Three Sisters" Rarity managed to find Chrysalis and talk to her?
A definite sequel.
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Oooooo ... sounds like a wonderful concept. Must ... read ... now....
Yay. My first first post ever. Someone call Pinkie its time to party!
Well, with first comment, I guess there comes a responsibility of letting you know what I think. See seperate comment below...
When i read a title that makes no fucking sense but still pulls me in
I know its going to be a feat
Mind = blown.
Edit: I just couldn't let it slide.
“I really won’t look good on you!”
Wow! I love this! It's great to see Chrysalis as was written in Three Sisters after the wedding!
Noticed a typooooooo.
No editors, no double-checking, it’s as it was written.
Seriously good story! A few spelling and grammar mistakes, but for a unedited fic it was entirely readable.
I would actually like to see this continued! Find out how the family reunion went...
Bravo, good sir!
... Meanie Head. Writing this off-screen like that! *Huffs*
... But it was still good. Jerk.
Darn it D, ya keep making changelings look okay (creepy as hell sometimes but not pure abominations)
I know. Just pointing it out so he can fix it later, if he wants to.
This is now head canon.
More of this story line please.
Sequel. Get to work slave.
>>10082031008203 >>10081731008173 heh, thanks that's what happens when you don't send stuff to pre-readers and editors...
Neat little read.
That was great. I loved The Three Sisters. I hope there is more stories set in this world.
The first was wonderful. This is just as good. I do wholeheartedly suggest you continue using this as the start for a continuation. Granted, it may not run more than an additional chapter or two, and it could go quite a few ways, but the start is great in any case.
I wish of a sequel!
Quite impressive. A few spelling issues, but it flowed so beautifully.
The Three Sisters was good, and this only makes it better, even if it isn't "canon" it does have emotion.
Interesting... I will watch this carefully.
First time making it before a feature! And hole CRAP is this going to get featured! I loved it! Make it official! I was so engrossed with the idea of a reunion of the two sisters, that I didn't even see your errors. I might have to go over it again.
Also damn you. This is one of those things that I would LOVE to see continued, but feel that perhaps a continuation from here wouldn't necessarily be the right choice.
"Purity" - what a peculiarly ironic name. A combination of Pupa and Rarity, that provides a reminder that she does not belong to either race, neither changelings nor ponies - that a "pure" creature is the one thing she cannot be.
How peculiar indeed...
... You should have random ideas pop into your head more often. Three Sisters was amazing, and I'm glad to see it continued, even if it isn't strictly official. It would be interesting to see how Sweetie reacts to Rarity's explanation too. Anyway, great story.
You just hit straight to my heart good sir! Bravo!
>>10081491008149 I guess being the first commenter comes with some responsibilities...
"A/N: So... this popped into my head today and wouldn’t leave me alone. So I wrote it. No editors, no double-checking, it’s as it was written. So pardon the lesser quality XD"
Really??!! This is amazing. Definately not lesser quality at all. In fact, the only error that came to my notice while reading it was the following: “I really won’t look good on you!” --> 'I' should be 'It.' The characters feel plausible, the flow is consistant, and the dialouge feels authentic. It definately was a wonderful inspiration that you got! Thank you for writing it down and sharing it with us! Its definately getting a thumbs up and a fav from me! I hope to see this in the Feature List soon and for an extented period of time.
The story was great and I think it makes a wonderful continuation to your "Three Sisters" story-arch, if you ever choose to make it official. A sequel to this story would probably require Sweetie Bell to be told the truth, and that could get a bit messy and complicated, though it would be interesting to see what effect Purity had on her sister and how things changed in the Hive.
The only question I have is whether Purity intentionally sought out Chrysalis in the forest, whether she simply stumbled upon Chrysalis, or whether that was simply a 'Deus ex Machina'/'plot device' to get the story started. I, personally, think that after having revealed to her friends her secret, and having seen her sister after so many years, that there would have been a desire on Purity's part to seek out, help, and reconnect with her sister after she got defeated inCanterlot. By the way, I love the name Purity for your character. I can't recall if you used it in your previous story or whether that was something that got created in the ensuing comments to that story.
I also like the added depth you gave to Chrysalis in both this, and the previous story; making her more than a stock villain. I don't like purely evil monsters ... I like the complex, deep, realistic, believable ones. Those are the interesting ones.
Anyways, great job with the story! It was a pleasant surprise to see that you made an (un)offical sequal to "The Three Sisters." Keep up the great work!
I would love to see a small series of chapters about this. maybe 5 or so IF that. just something that has them meet and everything.
i want to sleep, but Wanderer D have a new story = no sleep
yo queria dormir, pero Wanderer D tiene una nueva historia = no duerno
Rarity --- a crown made of jade --- Jade
> “Sweetie Belle,” Rarity rolled her eyes and sighed as she followed her sister down. “Didn’t I ask you to tell anypony that came over that I was busy today and to leave a message?”
I see what you're trying to do, but the comma doesn't seem to belong. A period wouldn't work either. I dunno - but I'd reword that.
Now for a threequel
Purity as a nickname. Nice use of irony there WD. I really liked it.
Sweetie said in awe. “I really won’t look good on you!” the "I" should be an "It"
Wanderer, why do you insist on making me look bad? ;_;
XD realmente bella la historia XD.... le dara un infarto a bell al saber la verdadd e su hermana
Wunderbar! That was brilliant! Would love to read more of this sorta stuff, sequel maybe?
don't suppose chrysalis would consider sending her youngest to live with her aunt.
What do you know! I just saw the story in the Feature List! Congrades! Yay!
One word, threequel.
damn we need the family party please?
Today I spit out my drink and read a good book.
Continuation. This is what this story needs. Now have a like, fav, and a stache.
I'm gonna go ahead and favorite, in case you decide to write more.
Wanderer, why do you insist on making me look bad? ;_;
Why do the both of you insist on making ME look bad?
Personally, I would love to see more of this.
Aaaand now I want to know what would happens when the family reunites. I bet the less serious daughters would love to spend time with their aunt and cousin. I smell a spinoff series!!!
WHY YOU END ONE-SHOT WITH CLIFF HANGER?!! HOW SHE EXPLAIN LETTER TO SWEETIE?!!!!!
>>10085911008591 Noooo, Sweetie Belle really won't look good on Rarity. I mean really, who looks good wearing their little sister?
EDIT: I give you like anyway.
okay, now that i've calmed down a bit. I must say that this is a truly interesting concept here. I'd probly give all my bits for more Changeling Rarity fics.
Good Work Wanderer D!