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    Twilight Sparkle is the most organized pony in Equestria, and sometimes she makes checklists.  And sometimes those checklists get a little out of hand.

    First Published
    4th Jun 2012
    Last Modified
    4th Jun 2012

    Comments ( 24 )

    #1 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    "Worth it."

    All checklists in the show and in everyday life should include these elements :raritywink:

    #2 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    "16: Destroy Everything" Check.

    "Worth it"

    o.O Twilight scares me sometimes. . .

    #3 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I'm wondering if when she found the pillow, it has something to do with another story I read, where twilight destroys ponyville, by creating the biggest pillow fight war in equestria, in which ponyville is basically destroyed, in the process. Is it in any relation to this???

    #4 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    "29  If there was no adventure and you just went home just went home" you repeat "just went home"

    "The sunlight shined into" I think it's shone

    Nonetheless, very good story. It got my head into somewhat a mess, but it was definitely fun to read. Also, am I to understand Twilight did destroy everything at the end? One can only wonder where that pillow was stashed

    #5 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    beware!! us book worms are crazy at times. :twilightsmile: muhahahahahahaha (p.s good story. i liked it. im watching you >=) )

    #6 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Let me guess Twilight started a pillow fight that destroyed pretty much all of Equestria.:twilightsheepish:

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    wot.:rainbowhuh:

    #8 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    why does it look like she 'wants' the scroll.

    #9 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    That was fun! Nice little one-shot gag. The sheer degree to which the cross-referencing developed had me laughing out loud, and I I loved how a single joke in 4 became a multi-point cross-referencing epic.

    Negatives! Though the end line was great, I think the short passage of not-checklist hurt the thing as a whole. Abandoning your conceit is pretty much the worst thing you can do in comedy, especially in a one-shot.

    But, overall, I'd call this a positive. I laughed. Cleverer than I thought it was going to be, too. I kept going back and checking the list, and I found myself thinking "Man, this is really taking me out of the story, checking this li-OOOH, YOU DOG, YOU"

    EDIT: Also, calling featured.

    EDITEDIT: WAIT A MINUTE. I seriously reviewed a Troll fic again.

    Why do I keep doing that?

    #10 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hmm :moustache:

    #11 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I knew it. All the friendship is ripping away at her sanity, slowly but surely. :pinkiecrazy:

    Also, like others, I've noticed a connection to another story where Twilight creates the most deadly Pillow fight in the universe. :applejackunsure:

    Problem is, at the end of that story, turns out Celestia had it. Twilight got it back here... :twilightoops:

    What'd Twilight do to Princess Bitchy Mcprincess bitch pants Celestia! :flutterrage:

    #12 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I was amused and that's what matters to me.

    Greatly entertaining. Kudos. :moustache:

    #14 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

    "Princess Celestia is a bitch"

    Never saw that coming :rainbowlaugh:

    #15 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    did you just finish "the only's" story for him?

    Cause the ending to this fits in way to perfectly

    #16 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >If there was no adventure and you just went home just went home

    Crazy Twilight is at it again!

    Is this stuff a reference to that other story...?

    Find lost pillow

    Twilight trotted into the library carrying her pillow in her mouth.  She tossed the pillow onto her bed, checking off box number thirty-two, and then looking over the entire list.

    She looked at the pillow and then checked off box number sixteen.

    "Worth it."

    If so, I salute you, good sir

    If not, I salute you anyway

    >>692641>>692726

    >>692646 Pony Pillow Fight 2012. Never forget

    #17 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    This is EXACTLY why I knew that watching you was an excellent idea. I was amused.

    Riz
    #18 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh.My.God.  The check-list make me go :derpyderp2: :derpytongue2: :derpyderp1: :rainbowhuh: :applejackconfused: and :rainbowderp: also :twilightoops::unsuresweetie:

    #19 · Chapter 1 · 50w, 21h ago · · ·
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    What did I just read and why is it SO BUCKING GOOD?!!

    #20 · Chapter 1 · 49w, 1d ago · · ·
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    which book did twilight burn?

    #21 · Chapter 1 · 48w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>731305

    Read it again and you'll find out.

    #22 · Chapter 1 · 42w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    I enjoyed this story. There is a clear itinerary at the beginning, so I know exactly what should happen, and every item on the checklist was completed by the end. Excellent work.

    #23 · Chapter 1 · 42w, 1d ago · · ·
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    The checklist alone was positively golden. Great for a laugh.

    #24 · Chapter 1 · 42w, 21h ago · · ·
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    What story is this about pillow fight destroying Equestria? :rainbowhuh:

    In relation to topic, this story is :rainbowkiss:

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