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Screwball and Mothball's marriage is great! But life is gonna change after they find out about their new foal. Mothball and Screwball are new in this situation. Not only them will have bumps in the road, but their children too. Join them through their adventures and problems. This is my first story I really hope you like it!
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Special thanks to: Mystic in Shadows for editing ^^
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Hello I hope you like this! Any thoughts or changes you want? Feel free to comment!
Btw, I know I have errors but I don't know where so plz tell me.
Plz upload more i love it and its a sequel
Plz upload more i love it and its a sequel
It still hurt. Hurted is not a word.
Also what song is Screwball singing or it is made up?
a pleasant read and is disneyfanataic23 aware of this?
Okay, this looks promising, I haven't read this yet. But did DisneyFanatic give you her permission?
huh, DF okay with this?
I was going to give you a list of all your errors but then I decided: what the heck? Ill be nice today.
also I'm lazy
You need to brush up on the diologue a bit, but pretty good.
What's with the random capitalization? Just completely random words are capitalized all over.
Okay peoplr first of all, The random capitalization is something like: When they try to say something louder, or it is just an error, ok? And Thx for telling me that hurted is not a word. I live in Puerto Rico which is a spanish place. Even if I'm good with english I'm still working on it. Another of all of the complains is if DF is okay with this, honeslty Idk, I asked her but she didn't answer, I told her if she wasn't okay with this I would just delete this. You can check in her profile, I talked with her. Thanks Very much. And I'm getting kinda pissed of with that. I just want a: Great Job! I hope DF let's you! But all I get is complains..
6628922 Thank you really, but tell me it is ok. And remember maybe it's error because I'm not perfect or errors because english is not my main language.
6630120 Read what I said earlier.
6628834 Thanks, And for that question read my earlier coment
6628569 Thanks!
But remember, if Disney Fanatic is not okay with this, I will have to delete it.
6628569 Hello, thx for your support. And I'm afraid I cant continue this until DF tells me if she is okay with this or not
6630423 Mate, I'm just letting you know. For emphasis, you might want to capitalize the WHOLE word. And even then, the preferred method for emphasis is to italicize anything you want emphasized. The only things that should be capitalized are proper nouns and the starts of sentences.
6630601 Thank you. And don't worry I'm not angry at you, it's just that I have been going through a lot. And really Thank you for the advice
Hello People!!!! For people asking if DF is okay with this, she is. And plz enjoy
6630432 Which one?
6630707 Lol I know i talked a lot
But to answer your question, she did let me.
6630423 Well, while I like what's I've seen so far, you writing could use some sprucing up
6628649 Thx, and its made up.
6630871 Yes I know, thank you
6630871 Oh and, Do you want to help me with it? Like I said, I live in Puerto Rico which is a spanish place. I'm good at english but I still need to work on it
6631060 Sure...Hey... you know, if you need an editor or proofreader for the current chapters I could try to help, if you wanted me too.
Of Course! Just how can I let you edit it? Lol I'm kinda new at this writing thing.
6631068 Oh and, I just uploaded a new chapter, it is short but next one is gonna be a little bit longer, and about Screwy's pregnancy.
6628649 Can you tell me were that sentence is? Can't find it
6631078 Easy, I'll just copy down you're writing, then send it to you once I'm done editing.
Heh, no offense, but it kinda shows. I've been writing for years, so
6630652 DANKE SCHON, FOR HEEDING THE ADVICE OF DAS GRAMMAR NAZI!
SIEG HYPHEN!
6631188 Thank you, and non taken.
6631109
6632684 Thanks!
Yay The pregnancy is finally starting!
It is ok but why was this chapter short?
Some misspelling here and there but can forgive. But there are two things I'm confused about
So when Screw Ball went into the bathroom, She became a guy
?
And the other one is the Chapter is called 'I'm Pregnant?! Twins!?' yet they are now finding out about the pregnancy and have no clue if they have one child or two. Also you forgot the quotation mark in between I and M
Did you asked DisneyFanatic2346 to write this?
eh. I feel like screwball is out of character many times during this chapter. If you are doing Screwball from bride of discord, i think she wouldn't exactly 'freak out' about her dad being there. She would probably be annoyed a little bit and maybe roll her eyes. Also, Discord seems like he is still freaking out about his daughter being with someone even though they're married. If anything, you should make him supportive and maybe even give him and Fluttershy some moments. Another thing, if you want a character to freak out about something in a loud way, don't use too many exclamation points and question marks. All caps isn't the best idea either.
You would spell that awkward.
6634201 Thank you, and This chapter was so short Because I just wanted to do Screwball's pregnancy in there. And I HAD to go out with my family.
What you said:
In This scene we were already talking about Discord. But I Will Fix that. Also, about the title, if you read the chapter, they find out she is pregnant. And in the same chapter they find out she is having twins. So that is why the title says twins. If you Want me to change it just say it.
6635436 Lol Thanks, as I said before I don't speak english were I live.
6635434 Thank you for the idea. I Will Fix what Screwball said. But Discord at first was not so sure about his daughter marrying him, then he was. But he HAD a big smile in his face when he scared Mothball, so he is just being Discord. It is not really to spy. And I'm planning to give Fluttershy some scenes during Screwball's pregnancy. About Screwball's "anger" she doesnt like her dad spying on her. ( p.s.: it needs drama )
6634778
yes... She did
6634201 oh God! I know what happened here! I'm so so sorry ! I forgot to save the story when I uploaded it
so I have to write it again, so wait for This chapter again
6635436 HI! This chapter has Been removed, I Will do it longer Because I forgot to save it
Please stop using plz
6642691 Why?
6646796 sorry that was a little rude the way i said it, i just meant its a little annoying for me when someone dosent use a word or spell a word correctly but i do it to (i mean you can see them here) sooo i really dont know why it annoys me, but other than spelling errors the story is really good
Please update!!!
6653573 Thanks for the advice.