A fan of ponies since the premiere of the 2nd season, a fan of TMNT for most of my life, and a writer with probably way too many ideas and not enough time to write them all down.
One lazy afternoon after finishing all of the chores are done, Apple Bloom and Applejack relax under a tree. During this quiet time, Apple Bloom wonders about the future and confides in her older sister about the possibilities that might come from it.
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It's pretty simple in concept and execution, but it does what it sets out to do.
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Thank you. I'll admit, I wrote this in less than a day but was spurred on by the concept. I didn't want anything too elaborate and lengthy for my first story on here. More stories will probably be a bit longer.
Not bad! A few minor grammar issues/wrong word usages, but heck I do that all the time myself. God story, you got the character's canon personalities down pat, and it conveys the feels! It feels like a slice from a larger story, but that's not a bad thing, it means that this could fit in to almost any story, including a canon Episode, and not feel out of place.
Oh, and Welcome to FiMFic!
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Thank you. I hadn't realized there were any grammatical or wrong word usage in the story. I was trying to fit some stuff to sound right based on the pair's speech patterns without trying to spell or write out a southern drawl. It can be exceedingly difficult to do. Still, I thank you for the critique.
6573884 I caught one in reading, meaning there's probably a few more. Specifically,
That should be wern't so shy. Because as it is, it makes it sound like Big Mac could get any mare he liked by becoming shy. Which I think we can all agree is the opposite of what you meant. Don't sweat it though i make FAR more errors than you do. (I tend to have a lot of overcapitalized letter I s >>) You can always edit the story after posting, so no worries. Once you get a little popular usually your readers will start leaving minor edits int he comments and if you get pretty good people will offer to edit for ya before you publish.
As for accent's and Drawl, you did that just fine :) I'll NEVER take issue with peopl trying to write like that, heck I have one character who speaks in German on occasion, and I actually write it in German. Stories feel better when elements like that are put into them. Keep it up!
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Thank you for pointing that out to me. I think I must of been a little hasty in putting this up and didn't give it as good an editorial read through as I normally do for my written stuff.
Hearthwarming and cute. Glad I read this