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TardisTraveler


I'm just a spooky alien here to observe you humans and your stories of horses, don't mind me.

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Fluttershy was outside her cottage when she saw something, something different, something she had never seen before. Imagine her surprise when, eventually, this "something" starts speaking to her! Of course, she is shy at first, but soon, she realises that this new friend is alone, not only now, but their whole life, with no one who truly understands them. Behind their rough exterior layer is someone who needs a friend, and Fluttershy decides she must be it, and she eventually finds that not only does she understand him better than anypony else, but he understands her as well. He's sweet, sensitive, and even shy, but instead of hiding, he chases away anyone who comes by. Can Fluttershy pull back this course, outer layer and find the softer, beautiful layer underneath? What will everypony else think? Will their friendship survive? Who is this "something" I keep talking about without much detail? read to find out!

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Comments ( 7 )

What exactly is this a crossover of?

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It's a surprise, but feel free to guess.

i think i might have an idea what this is crossover with...could be wrong...any who reads great so ill fav it:pinkiehappy:

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What do you think it is? I'd like to hear.

Anyway, thanks for the feedback! I should be done the next chapter fairly soon.

Have to complement you on your tactic of leaving us readers hanging :twilightsmile:
I will certainly continue to read to see where you are going with this.:pinkiehappy:

I like it! Although, there are a few grammar mistakes here and there & there are some revisions you could make. Example:

She pulled, but it wouldn't come out, she tugged, it didn't move, she gave it 110%, it didn't budge, She tried flapping her wings for extra force, not an inch.

Could be changed to...

She pulled and tugged and flapped her wings for extra force, but the fungus didn't move an inch.

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Thanks for the feedback! That part sounds funny on purpose, but looking back on it, I might change it a bit anyway.

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