• Member Since 3rd Jun, 2015
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Hazel Bell


A true friend is the one who see's the pain in your eyes, while others believe your smile.

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Meet Sapphire Swirl, A strict shop owner who has quite a temper. She is very skilled. Running a bakery for the upper-class ponies requires it.

Now meet Hazel Bell, a pony who doesn't Really belong anywhere. A stubborn, Fiery Filly, an outcast.

They don't sound like a very likely team, but as the city is crumbling around them, they need to find a connection.

Yes, I'm aware that i have put an oc in my story. If she turns into a Mary sue, please do not get mad. Also, i may add tags as i go along, because I'm not exactly sure how this will turn out.
Also, any Mean comments (A.K.A Criticism) is not welcome. You see, here at Hazel Bell studios it is a peaceful environment. Just kidding. DO NOT TAKE IT SERIOUSLY.
enjoy!!

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 43 )

That's pretty dope. Good job.

6499509 I'll try to get it out by maybe next week?

I'm here to criticize, anyway. What you gonna do about that?

Seriously, properly capitalize your words. Capitalization, capitalization, capitalization. The way you're doing it right now is burning my brain from the inside.

6499631 sorry:twilightsheepish: its a habit of mine. I'll have to go through and check it I guess.

Aside from the grammatical errors did you like it?

6499740 *struggles through impending grammar-induced mental collapse* I like it. The miscapitalization wasn't even that bad after a few paragraphs. You should add an Alternate-Universe tag though.

6506538 yep!:pinkiehappy:



6506539 thanks!! excited to see your character?

Wait wait wait a minute

Fallouts oc is here but not mine

I'm offended

JK LOL :)

6507319 not everyones, but a bunch of them.

6507406 whenever I get around to it. Probably tommorrow. Maybe.

Probably not but we'll see. I'm a procrastinator. A bad one at that.

I'll try my best for tomorrow.

6507465 I was actually leaning towards one, but then I thought you might not like it.

But ok I ship it.

6507496 yeah, sapphire swirl and fallout

Also, any Mean comments (A.K.A Criticism) is not welcome. You see, here at Hazel Bell studios it is a peaceful environment.

No Criticism? You are obviously not the smartest person. To get better at writing, YOU NEED CRITICISM. Congratulations! You've damned yourself as an author and I haven't even read the story yet.

P.S. Deleting this comment will just make you look like you can't take criticism, which is the worst thing an author can have as a trait.

6516964 it was a joke. i put jk there for a reason. critisizm is wanted. its a quote from a youtuber.

if you cant see that its your problem not mine

6516969 I didn't notice that. It's honestly best if you take it all out because that's something that catches people's eyes very quickly and the JK... it's 2 letters. It's very easy to miss. I'm glad to see you don't actually consider criticism to be a bad thing, but I still recommend taking both of those bits out. It's ultimately up to you, though.

6517028 ill edit it, but not taske it down altogerther.

I'll read this as soon as I get back from church. Knowing you, I'm probably going to love it!

I love it! I knew I would, sis! I never once doubted you! Keep on writing, and I'll keep on reading! Speaking of writing... Do you want to be in my story?

6615565 Great! I already told you the details, so I won't again unless you forgot. How's your story coming along? I'm still awaiting the next chapter. Who cares what the rest say about self-insertion? I'd say that's the only way you can even explain your OC to the crowds! And explaining OCs is the best way (in my opinon) to share personalities in a story! Here's my favourite Chameleon Circuit song, Teenage Rebel. It's exactly what I am: a man with so many different personalites, running to and from all sorts of danger!

6624932 im a procrastinator. be patient

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