Spellbound and Shade are two unique ponies. Spellbound may look innocent, but she has a special power, and Shade lurks in the shadows, unseen. These two friends share on thing in common- they both think Earth Ponies are useless and that Celestia is an old fool. With a plan in their heart, they go to Ponyville in the hope of using the Summer Sun Celebration to their advantage.
This was mostly an experiment, I wanted to try something I never had before- writing from the antagonist's point of view. I give all credit on Shade's character to my older sister, who designed her and came up with her personality.
I need help, I can't decide what categories to put this in. Until someone suggests a category, this will remain in random.
Notes: ALL images in this story were made with General Zoi's Pony Creator(actually only the ponies were. Backgrounds were by me). It can be found here(I don't have the dA link):http://www.dolldivine.com/mlp-fim-pony-creator.php
You get my thumb, it's written well. But something you should be aware of. After a sentence ending with something like. 'She said' end the previous dialogue with a comma. [example]
"blah blah blaboby dashie," she said. Anf with a comma and don't capitalize. if there is a '!' or '?'. just treat it as a comma such as
"Blah bluh blebedee storyting!" she exlaimed
Ooooh this is interesting...
So their racist evil doers.
I LOVE IT!!!
If it's an antagonists point of view, make it dark
Hmm...
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also, the misspelling of "mannequin" is annoying me, and its distracting.
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People in different places do that differently. I've always been taught to do it that way, so instead of assuming every teacher I've had is wrong, I'd guess that some people just do it differently.
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fixed. Sorry, my 'Auto-complete' in my phone is a jerk
Yes, I wrote the first bit of this on my phone. I was reeally bored when we were on a, like, four hour drive, so I started writing this fanfic in my 'notes'.
"They say they can grow food and interact with nature- anypony could do that. "
I would like to argue that last statement Ms. Shade...