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    • Twilight's Curse
      The will to help her friends and those around her and the power to do so. Bad luck always seems to find those who need it the least, doesn't it? As does darkness, but darkness can be tamed, or can it? Can you tame your own darkness?

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    Twilight Sparkle trotted down the spiraling staircase. Who knew Hell could be so pretty? The cavern she was in was actually quite nice, minerals sparkled and glistened in the reddish light that seemed to permeate everything. The staircase she was on was in the middle of the cave. Casting a glance around, Twilight gave a sigh of contentment. She felt... like she actually belonged. Since becoming a vampire, or alleged demon of the dark, she'd felt unrestful. Always needing to move. Always needing to hunt.

    Denying the urges that were part of her nature wasn't what one would call comfortable. It hurt. Hopefully seeing Thanatos would help. After all, the demon queen was who had created vampires, or the disease. Rumor had it that Thanatos was a bipolar mess. She was the queen of the damned, and though she had started out caring and helpful, having to cast souls to torment for eternity probably wasn't easy on morality. If she's really a bipolar mess, we'll fit right in together. Twilight thought. Reaching the final landing on the stairs, Twilight stopped and pondered what direction she should take.

    Many tunnels filled with red light branched off from the cave. If she listened closely, she could hear tortured screams. Twilight shivered. She was in the right place for certain.

    A low growl made her whip her head around. A large wolf, covered in armor, was staring at her like she was a meal. Not today, pal. "I am here to seek audience with Thanatos," she stated coolly. The wolf laughed, a sound between barking and talking.

    "You're here to talk to the queen? Not just anyone can see her, you know."

    "I assure you, I am not just anyone. I am a demon too."

    The wolf seemed taken back. "A demon? Well, what kind?" He grinned.

    "A vampire."

    The wolf howled and more guards stepped out from the shadows. They were smaller than their leader, but still bigger than her. "Take her to the Queen. It seems a wayward servant has found her way back." He paused, and then cackled. "Be nice! If the queen doesn't like her, we don't want dinner bruised." Twilight gulped. "Have fun," he whispered.

    The guards roughly shoved her towards one of the tunnels. No light came from this one, and it sloped downwards. As they passed the threshold into the darkness, even Twilight's vampire eyes couldn't see anything. "No magic," one of her escorts growled, seemingly knowing what she was thinking. Continuing on, the tunnel dipped low into a ditch, and her hoof touched something wet. Bringing her foreleg to her face, she inspected it with her other senses. It smelled familiar. Blood... She stuck her tongue out and licked it. Pony blood...

    One of the wolves barked at her. "Yes, yes, I'm coming,"

    "So, little demon, what brings you here?" the smaller of the guards asked. His armor was gold, and contrasted nicely with his black coat. His lips pulled back to reveal a fangs much like Twilight's own.

    "I couldn't control myself," she said stiffly.

    "Hey, didn't we see a soul like that a few days ago?" the other, reddish wolf teased. "She was blue, and had puncture holes on her neck," the wolf grinned.

    "I don't want to talk about it," Twilight said, even stiffer than before.

    "Oh, no. Poor little vampy pony couldn't control herself? Accidentally sent a pony to Thanatos?"

    "Stop it," she growled. "You have no idea of the power I wield," even as the words came out of Twilight's mouth, she was surprised. Insanity is getting to me. Instead of meeting me head on, she's being passive aggressive. "Sorry," she said quietly.

    The black wolf looked her over. "You won't survive long with that attitude, kid. Everyone here is a demon too, and most are worst than us. You still have equinity." His red companion snorted.

    "Her Majesty's palace approaches!" the red wolf howled. Twilight looked ahead; she could see now. More guard-wolves lined the walls of the castle. Black spires, crafted of obsidian, joined with the cavern roof. the blocks from which it was constructed were translucent, letting her see into the building. Fuzzy shapes moved beyond the wall. A pair of great gates blocked her from entering.

    The black wolf barked, "A servant of Thanatos seeks audience with her!" Two wolves, of the same size as the first one that she met, jumped down.

    "Name!"

    "Nox, Captain!"

    "You may pass," one of the wolves grunted.

    Twilight sheepishly followed the wolves. Even though she was on equal or higher terms power-wise, she still felt skittish around them. Her prey instincts as an herbivore still lurked. Trotting behind the wolves, they continued into the castle.

    It was grand, she'd give it that. But in a macabre way. Skulls of many large animals decorated the walls, while bloody weapons hung underneath them. Her hooves made a racket on the ground, contrasted to the nearly silent padding of the wolves. She noticed that their ruffs were bristling. Glancing around, she found the source of their aggression. Another demon, though this one was a griffin, approached them.

    "Well, look at you two! Finally got something interesting to do!" she said, ruffling her feathers. Twilight noticed that her claws and talons were bloody.

    "Somnum, go away!" Nox snarled.

    The black griffin paused, and then continued, "Fine, but you still report to me." Swishing her lion-tail in their faces, she walked away.

    "She's an ass," the red wolf snarled.

    "Cruor, shut up! She's got good hearing, you know," Nox quickly yipped.

    Generally ignoring the wolves, Twilight continued to inspect the castle. Her ears told her that down one of the hallways, creatures were eating, and it didn't sound like they were eating grass. Her nose told her that many inhabited the castle. Still leading her, the wolves continued to bicker.

    Until, that is, they came to a set of doors emblazoned with thorns.

    The black wolf, Nox, came up to her and said, "If you wish to continue breathing, bow as soon as you reach the end of the carpet. Don't look her in the eyes unless asked. And by any means, don't make any snarky comments about anything. She won't care if it's a joke," his yellow eyes burned with the intensity of his warning. "Good luck, kid."

    Swallowing her fear down, she stepped into the throne room. The rug she was on was red, and detailed with thorns along the sides. She kept her eyes down, feeling the great magical presence ahead. Walking slowly down, she ruffled her wings, adjusting the appendages that wanted to act upon her fight or flight instinct. Reaching the end of the rug, she prostrated herself before the Queen.

    "Rise," a cold voice said.

    Standing up, but not looking at the queen, Twilight said, "I have come to seek audience with you, my Queen."

    "So you have, but why?"

    "I accidentally killed a pony, Your Majesty," the purple pony answered shakily.

    "Oh, I know that. I passed judgement on her just hours before," the voice said, cold as winter. "She was most distressed." The Dark Queen laughed. "You gave her quite the scare," Thanatos paused, and then said, much kinder, "Look at me."

    Twilight raised her eyes to the Queen of Death, and her breath caught in her throat. She could see why Nox had warned her. The Queen's appearance kept shifting, from an alicorn more beautiful than Celestia, to something uglier than what Opalescence drags into Rarity's shop occasionally.

    "A vampire? I see, one of my children has made it back to me. You were not bitten by another vampony, but by the source of your blessing itself. And, you come seeking a way to redeem yourself," pausing at Twilight's shocked expression, Thanatos held an expression of amusement, "I keep up with the happenings of the world, you know."

    "Yes, my queen, I come seeking a way to redeem myself from the evil I have committed."

    "There is a way, but you won't like it," Thanatos grinned. "You can become a reaper of souls, one who heralds death."

    "You mean, killing ponies?!" Twilight backed up. "I can't do that!"

    "You're not just killing them, you're saving some of them from a worse demise than the one you gave Trixie."

    Twilight's knees shook. "I-I suppose I could," Her eyes closed, "If it meant helping ponies, I could."

    Thanatos clapped her hooves together and giggled, breaking her cold facade, "I guess Sleipnir gets his vacation after all!" She called forth Nox and Cruor, the wolf guards. "Take her to the Initiate Suite!"

    The wolves pushed her down one of the adjacent halls in the room, much gentler than before. "Good job," Nox whispered in her ear.They swiftly trotted through the maze of hallways until arriving at the aforementioned room.

    "Here you go, hope you don't get a pup on your first assignment!" barked Cruor.

    "Your training will begin soon, and I suggest getting some rest," Nox warned. "It won't be easy, and you'll need all your energy."

    Twilight stepped into the room and blinked with surprise. It was almost as big as her room in Canterlot! And filled with books too! Smiling, she walked over to the bed. Magically exhausted, she manually lifted the sheet. Sleep... I fear you and I won't be seeing each other all that often soon. Dragging her pillow into a proper position, the purple alicorn promptly fell asleep.

    Comments ( 44 )

    #1 · 53w, 6d ago · · ·
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    Um, I'm a little confused here.  As far as I can tell, Twilight's Curse is still in progress.  Aren't you getting a little ahead of yourself here?  Or are the other chapters off-site?

    #2 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>709467

    took the words right out of my mouth

    #3 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710025 ya that's what I thought, but I think its more of the author just didn't switch it to Complete :facehoof:

    This seems to take place soon after the end of the final chapter.

    #4 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    nice and keep it up :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy:

    #5 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>709467 *Face palm* Give me five minutes.

    #6 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    So... will Twilight get eight legs as well? If it's truly Sleipnir that she's replacing.

    Faved, want to know what happens next :twilightsmile:

    #7 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I was pissed that Twilight's Curse had ended, but overjoyed when I saw this new story.

    #8 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Hmm.... Feels like it might be moving a bit fast, but it's not an issue I suppose.

    So Twilight... is going to become a grim reaper.

    #9 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710459 Blame someone on EQD, I think it was Cereal. They said on a drawfriend that they wanted to see a Twilight vampire/grim reaper fanfic. I used the image for inspiration, which for some reason is not showing up.

    #10 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710544I'm not saying it's a bad thing, just a bit odd.

    #11 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710603 I don't mind, in fact I'm just happy the fic is getting attention. Twilight's Curse was my first fic and this is my second.

    #12 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    a sequel yay cant wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

    #13 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710618 Right, I came here from the first. It's just... unexpected I suppose.

    #14 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710623 It was something I hadn't seen yet. And because the fandom is now so, so large, it's hard to think of something even remotely original.

    #15 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Look's good by now. I like the idea of a pony becoming a grim reaper. Still Death from Discworld is best grim reaper.

    #16 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710682Bleh, Originality is just taking what's been done before and presenting it differently. Still, you have me interested. This is by no means criticism. Just an opinion.

    #17 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710544 been there done that. It's called crimson night. And it was awesome. However,  I'd love to see your rendition. Watching.

    #18 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710903 Really? *scoots out from rock* Cool!

    #19 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710927 but yeah, I have never been favorable to... Other. Renditions of the vampire mythos unless they're not called vampires. Haven't even started on your yet.  We'll see... I'm a thusly in progress on a review for said story. Srsly good. Give it a read, assuming you have a day or two to spare. 3 hours if you read like I do...

    #20 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Oh hell yeah. Heh, puns.

    #21 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    *Sees the name 'Sleipnir'*

    YES! THANK YOU for making that reference and tying 2 great fanfics together. This just made my day - I give my most gracious thanks to your person DovahKaaz. I expect to see your continued genius in the subsequent chapters soon.

    #22 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    So Twi is becoming the gentle grim reaper eh? Meh the future of death in equestria be gentle and long. Twilight may suffer her curse, but at least some good can come out of it in this case.

    #23 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    It's nice to find a good Vampire fic or story nowadays, it seems that zombies have become the most popular dark creatures...

    Also, Twi is awesome :twilightsmile:

    #24 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I wonder: will the whole Draw-power-from-the-stars-and-gain-some-shiny-star-wings-incident become important to the story/gain a background, or will it continue to float around lazily? I kinda expected an explanation for it in Twilight's Curse, as it appeared as strange/not normal to me, even for a vampony.:twilightoops:

    #25 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>710903 Indeed Crimson night is an awesome fic,as is Crimson Dawn,however while Twi was a vampony in that she was'nt a/the Grim reaper. She simply chose a scythe as a weapon. It was Hecarim that was the grim reaper,the only metion of it was when Twilight wore her armor,and Hecarim mentions her old nickname,and that it was fitting that her student reminded her of a younger her.

    #26 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>711848 true enough, but she/they were damn near equivalent to the grim reaper. just... cmon, the cover pic? so grim reaper, and you know it...

    #27 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>711888 the pic is quite cool. :twilightsmile:

    #28 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    The first chapter is nice, but I would have liked some explenation as to how twilight knew about hell and how to get there, how she knew that she was a servent of the queen etc. There's a lot of exposition missing.

    #29 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    you should make this into a more serious 'Dead Like Me', oh how I miss that show...:pinkiesad2:

    #30 · 53w, 5d ago · · ·
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    >>713557 In good time, my most exalted sir!

    #31 · 53w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>713557

    In the episode where Twilight goes into the past and freaks herself out causing a paradoxical loop, she takes a three headed dog back to Tartarus at some point.  I can't remember the name of the episode though!  But she does know of it in canon and was able to take it's guard dog back, I wonder if that will be mentioned here.

    #32 · 53w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I just want to know when the next chapter will be up this is SOO good so far. Dark but not to dark Grim but not to grim. Its just right.

    #33 · 53w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Hey, I really enjoyed Twilight's Curse, but the "chapters" were all very short. Can you make these chapters longer pretty please?

    #34 · 53w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>734837 I'll try, but it will take longer. I imagine I'll start out small and grow bigger with the chapter length.

    #35 · 53w, 1d ago · · ·
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    #36 · 52w, 4d ago · · ·
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    Wait... The Thanatos from Kid Icarus: Uprising?

    #37 · 52w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>753692 Nope, Thanatos is the Greek god of death. Hades was the Underworld, but Thanatos was death.

    #38 · 52w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>753703 Ah! Thank you for clearing that up for me.

    #39 · 52w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>753924 No problem. Also, I'm working on the next chapter, it should be up within the next few days.

    #40 · 52w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>753975 Yessss!:pinkiehappy:

    #41 · 50w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Where is next chapter?!

    #42 · 50w, 5h ago · · ·
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    ok, now I can't wait to see trixie in this one, their meeting should be quite interesting.

    But it looks like it hasn't been updated in a while.

    #43 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    This is in the featured box as though it had been updated...

    Looks like we've got a mystery on our hands, gang.

    #44 · 47w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>944922 I added a note.

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