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    Fullmetal Pony's Stories (9)

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    I'll tell you a story. It's a tale about a unicorn with wings. I'll tell you about the Princess that kept her alive, the filly that taught her to care, and the stallion she loved. This is her story... it's my story.

    First Published
    29th May 2012
    Last Modified
    20th Mar 2013

    Comments ( 26 )

    #1 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    Gah, right in the feels :raritycry: A very moving chapter FMP

    #2 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 2d ago · · ·
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    :fluttercry:

    That is all.

    #3 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Mental note:   Suggest creation of "Extra Sad" tag to mods.  (As soon as I get a bit less weepy, that is.)

    #5 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Not a very good idea to read this at work... Self control at its finest.

    The original chapters were very sad already, but you stepped it up a notch over here. Congratulations, beautiful yet so, so sad :fluttercry:

    #6 · Chapter 2 · 29w, 1d ago · · ·
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    NOOOO... But what About the chocolate Pickles?

    #7 · Chapter 1 · 28w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I like your writing style! :twilightsheepish:

    #8 · Chapter 2 · 28w, 4d ago · 3 · ·
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    God dammit. :fluttercry:

    #9 · Chapter 2 · 14w, 22h ago · · ·
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    >>1557739

    My thoughts exactly.

    Awesome idea for a story here.

    #10 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 15h ago · · ·
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    congrats on the Feature. :ajbemused:

    #11 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 14h ago · 2 · ·
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    Hmmm, the description gave me goosebumps... My "Must read this now" -sense is tingling :pinkiecrazy:

    #12 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 14h ago · · ·
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    I have a feeling that this will make me love Cadence's character even more.

    #13 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 14h ago · · ·
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    This update was worth the weight... um, wait :pinkiehappy:

    #14 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 11h ago · 1 · ·
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    >>2117799

    Wait, are you serious?

    #15 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 11h ago · · ·
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    Please Refrain from spam-posting a single story to all the folders in a single group.

    #16 · Chapter 3 · 14w, 7h ago · 1 · ·
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    >>2118864 I think someone specific is going around and doing it. Given that it's been happening with other fics around the same time...

    #17 · Chapter 3 · 13w, 6d ago · · ·
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    SPOILER ALERT!!!


    In lieu of accuracy, the moon lacked its signature visage of a shadowy mare and was instead pure white.

    -THIS is what made my eyes mist up. A promise for the future.

    Next thing I knew, I teleported right into the Princess’s bath.” Mystic turned a little whiter. “I thought I’d lose my head. Turned out I’d been the first unicorn to successfully teleport since Dusk Glint.”

    -Seems a bit too much of a match for Twilight's exam, unless you will later be intentionally invoking it as being Fate/Divine Provenience.

    I’d take on a hundred supercells compared to this.

    -Great metaphor... I shall assume he has studied such things in case of renegade pegasi, or weather that would only come in from places like the Everfree Forest.

    She is the first pony in over a thousand years to be born like this, but that does not make her a princess.

    -She will earn that title? Perhaps when her cutie-mark appears, and for some reason it is a CRYSTAL heart?

    “Would things change if I were blue?”

    -Oh my...

    “What if I were shorter?”

    -I wonder if she is leading up to "And what if one day I refused to let the sun rise?", or maybe she is just making a point about how much respect is connected to her body-type, as much as she might wish otherwise, and as much as Mystic Rune might be right about the ORIGINAL cause of her taking the throne?

    “What if I appeared elderly?”

    -Hinting that Cadance will age more quickly than her? Or are you having it that Cadance merely matured quickly, and may reach old age as slowly as Celestia herself (including never)?

    “If I was younger?”

    -Or was she just providing a bit of set up for this with her previous question? Or is she muddying the waters a bit so that she won't let the cat out of the bag in too obvious of a way, thus meaning Willow won't result in increased panic on the second dark day, nor increased distrust of Luna before the people really get to know her.

    “Then what would you say if I were pink?”

    -Right, so she is going to avoid mentioning her sister anything CLOSE to directly at all.

    I will not let a crown be adhered to her because of how she was born.

    -This underlines the mystery of how she will gain one then. I think she had one even as a foalsitter.

    Celestia’s lips seemed to form another word but she quickly shut her mouth.

    -Perhaps Luna's took her throne too early, and Celestia thinks it best that she should have come into it at her own time? She can't think that Luna would be best without a throne, or she wouldn't have been so quick to offer it back to her when she returned because "We were meant to rule together".

    Celestia’s eyes scanned over the room and glanced up at the ceiling.

    -And I just realized that this could be Luna's bedroom, or even a recreation of her foalhood bedroom.

    A gold crown rested on Cadenza’s head and wouldn’t disappear no matter how many times Willow blinked.

    -Her father's choice to remain in the palace chose her fate?

    He stumbled backwards in pain as the flames inched up his leg. “Cadenza!”

    -Bad dream I think... too bad the Pony in charge of dealing with those is currently in prison.

    All around him, the room began to melt and contort.

    -Yep, a dream...

    “Please Cadenza! Stop!”

    -Or maybe she is just coming into her powers the hard way, just as Twilight and Mystic Rune did, and much earlier because she has more power? If so, I wonder how easily you will have his burns heal? I still think there is a strong chance this is a dream.

    Celestia’s voice, dark and heavy, emanated from the foal. “That’s Princess, commoner.”

    -Right... a dream. Perhaps one influenced by Chrysalis, intentionally or unintentionally.

    You will not directly secure its love, whether disguised or undisguised. We will not be discovered.

    -Makes sense. I wonder if the couple she cast the love-spell on were changelings? Probably not. I think that that spell doesn't create love, just reminds of it... although it could be said to "fill them with love", which is somewhere in between, in that the first is, by analogy, installing a flashlight, the second is cleaning the contacts on a pre-existing flashlight, and the third is attaching a new battery and letting the current go to whatever circuits exist. As for the drones, it comes down to "how direct is direct"? Also, she said that Canterlot had the most love of any place, so I am guessing that they could already hunt lesser prey, without using love potions, but not well? Or maybe the potions were more like trying to stretch the existing kidnapped ponies further? In other words the couple could already have been in love when kidnapped, but not enough to sustain the hive over the time period it would take to find a replacement couple?

    #18 · Chapter 2 · 13w, 4d ago · 2 · ·
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    Fuck you you beautiful monster. I love you and I hate you all at the same time. Continue killing me with feels

    #19 · Chapter 4 · 9w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Ooooh can't wait! :raritywink:

    ~heehee saucy mane :trollestia: ~

    #20 · Chapter 4 · 9w, 1d ago · · ·
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    What's saucy?

    I bet the saucy mare is RD's mom.

    #21 · Chapter 1 · 9w, 1d ago · · ·
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    “I don’t believe I thank you drones enough. I’ve burnt you, crushed you, and broken you, and yet you still wish to go forth and serve me. You truly have been a wonderful child.” I light up my horn. “Thank you.”

    That was honestly heartwarming.:heart:

    #22 · Chapter 1 · 9w, 1d ago · 1 · ·
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    >>2291093 And then she "ate" her child.  SO HEARTWARMING :trollestia:

    #23 · Chapter 4 · 9w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh dear... this doesn't look like it's going to end well.

    Have to say though, I'm loving the story! :twilightsheepish:

    #24 · Chapter 4 · 9w, 18h ago · · ·
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    Please continue! I LOL'd at the saucy part :raritywink:

    #25 · Chapter 2 · 8w, 6d ago · · ·
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    My feels... you have all of them, :fluttercry::raritydespair::raritycry::fluttershysad::fluttershbad::fluttershyouch::applecry:

    #26 · Chapter 4 · 7w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Those of us that read the original chapters before the re-wrrite know what happens.

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