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MetalBrony823


A brony that loves Heavy Metal, Africa, Rock, and Animals. Not to mention Ponies too. Fluttershy is best pony! \m/

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Luke Smith was living his normal life in Bend, Oregon. He didn't hate his home world, but he kind of find it boring sometimes, and wanted something exciting in his life. He was a very high functioning type of autistic person, and had a good heart. When he was unexpectedly transported to Equestria by wishing on a shooting star, it made his whole life different for him to endure.

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Comments ( 201 )

looks great! and glad to see a new chapter :) keep me posted if you need a second look on anything.

looking good. minor errors- but no worries, very small and few in number. doing great!

lol nice idea btw, walking through town alongside fluttershy. makes him a little more approachable if even fluttershy is ok with him.

liking the story man. :)

glad to see you still updating btw. and you have greatly improved from the first couple chapters

7119212 yeah, sorry if I was late. I was just updating older stories

7119212 And thanks for saying that I improved. It means alot.:yay:

7119457 you're welcome. lol

i always keep an eye out :)

sorry for the late read. lol just finished 'crystals wishes' and 'your music makes my heart beat'...

aanyways, great chapter, focuses on how he is getting along with fluttershy as his host.

although, a few minor errors have been noticed. one such is

You know, u have seen really beautiful night skies before,

by context clues i would assume you meant 'I have seen'? you also spelled twilight name wrong once. just a heads up :) otherwise, great job. im off to read the next chapter.

another great chapter, i like what you're doing. going from group setting to separate interactions.

a few small errors again. no biggie' though. just things like this

Twilight and Spike were a little cobfused.

which i assume you were in a speedy zone and mistyped.

i wonder how this will turn out like how his mother and friends will react if they learned he disappered

*sigh* oh boy bet they will find out that most humans are omnivores sooner rather then later

well this mlp fanfic reach in my top 3 favorites not only is it interesting but to shows kindness to the guy who has a disability

Yay, new chapter. Im gonna have to go listen to that song so I know what Luke will be singing next chapter. Keep it up :).

another (edited) lol figured it was you, when the 'unread' chapters did not match the ones on the list. no worries, i just go to your story and unselect 'track' and re-select it. fixes it instantly.

*keeps reading* This is awesome. I'm gonna keep reading the next chapt-Oh. That's it for right now. Welp, time to wait until this story gets updated. Lol

7119457 love the story, but phooey, i was about to name an autistic human oc in a fic of mine i am planning... He was going to replace Discord

7682266 The eland? Or what are you referring to?

7682395 the 'spoiled rich' card huh? can't wait to see how you wrote that. let me know once ur up to date on the edits i gave you. i'll post new ones to the doc tomorrow

LOL, get owned bitch!!! Good job, keep it up :)

Not bad, although i see some spelling mistake you might want to have a poof reader just to make sure everything is spell correct.

MMMMMM I feel like Spike is trolling with him. :moustache: :trollestia: either that or Luke now much take care a baby Spike haha.

great chapter my friend keep it up

Man twilight will be mad....i wonder if i have some spell's to help speed the recovery

Great chapter my friend can't wait for this story to upload more chapters I'll be waiting my friend and keep me posted on the story thanks

Great job, again. keep it up :).

Have a feeling we will be seeing those three annoying bullies who called Rainbow Dash "Rainbow Crash". Anyways, good chapter as always :).

Awesome chapter my friend and I can't wait for the next upload for this story I'll be waiting my friend and keep me posted on the story thanks

Awesome chapter, is there going to be a big bad villain in this story?

First off, write numbers properly please. Second off, the writing is pedantic to a degree far beyond what I can tolerate, to the point where I can only feel frustration and hate directed at your main character, whom I assume is some self-insert/wish-fulfillment/bullshit-nonsense. And third off, there are so many (simple to fix) spelling errors and mistakes involving commas that I am feeling the urge to put my fist through my monitor, and I am generally a controlled and collected person.

Sorry that I cannot get any farther, and good luck with your future endeavors.

~Crystalline Electrostatic~
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Love this idea, now we have some conflict to keep it interesting :twilightsmile:

Oh dear should we warn fluttershy of this

But still, I woukd consider Africa my top place to visit above anywhere else."

Would?

Have a feeling that certain ponies aren't going to be too accepting of his presence in the next chapter :applejackunsure:

8005657 You mean that snobbish couple from Sweet and Elite?

Ok so after reading I don't really like it. Not giving a thought m s down as it's not that bad.
But it just drags on and on. The start is not all that interesting and all the 1st few chapters hold be combined into one healthy chapter.

8008680 Thank you for being honest anyway. It is you're honest opinion. I might as well ask you, what can I do to make it better for you?

if your making a Part 2 of 'Capital of Equestria', i HOPE that the Royal Sisters, Rarity, Luke and maybe Cadence and Shining Armor can scold Blueblood, Jet Set and Upper Crust for being a bunch of nuisances! :pinkiecrazy:

Interesting, this version of Blueblood is different compared to the others I have seen. While he is still rude to the human character, he doesn't want to do anything bad to him, he just wants to ignore him and have him stay out of his way, unlike alot of other stories where he wants the human to be killed off completely right away. He also seems to have this fixation on Rarity and wants to be in a relationship with her(a fucked up one), while in many other stories he simply dislikes her and treats her like utter crap(he does this here to but in a different way). Good job with making him a more realistic kind of character and not the "psycho bratty child" I seem to see in many other stories. Keep it up :twilightsmile:

Can't wait for the next upload for this story I'll be waiting my friend and keep me posted on the story thanks

I'm loving this story can't wait for more uploads

Another good chapter as always

Loving this story can't wait for more.:heart:

Great chapter my friend I'll be waiting for the next upload for this story

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