The Changelings, the shape-shifting beings that attacked Equestria's capitol city, appear savage and ruthless; their queen even more so.
But there is always another side to every story...
Inside the memories of the seemingly wicked race's leader lie a tale as hidden as the species itself. Within her mind, she has written out her history; her beginnings, her life, and her struggles... and what came after that fateful day in Canterlot.
These are the memories of Chrysalis, fifth queen of the High Swarm.
Also, thanks again to minjask6572, Shotoman, and Mattatatta for proofreading for me, and to Penstroke for giving me a good idea for the second chapter. ^_^
Chapters (4)
d'aaaaaaaaaaw
I like it. Makes me feel empathy for chrysalis.
This is too awesome.
Faved, liked, unfaved, disliked, and then faved and liked again!
Hello, I'm your reviewer on the Training Grounds thread. Just letting you know that I have completed my review of Chapter One, and will start on Chapter Two this evening. I'm not sure how long it will take me to post the full review on the thread, but I hope I'll be done before the weekend is over.
Let me just take the time to say that I really like how this story has started off. I'm hoping that you write another chapter, because I am quite eager to learn what happens next.
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Hi. Good to hear from you. Thanks for going over it, and don't worry I plan on writing more. I'm just waiting for feedback from everyone who I've asked to me out with this before going on.
Any suggestions grammar-wise so far?
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I'll be specifying grammar issues I found when I post my review. Though I've been mostly spotting punctuation errors and overuse of certain words, and other general mistakes. There are some flubs with grammar, but nowhere near as much as I expected.
It's great that this fanfic has started again.
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College, life, and other things had kept me away from it, but I'm still working on it. ^^
A good chapter. I like the progress the story is making.
For errors, you've skipped a word or two here and there, you used the non-word "alright" instead of "all right", and I remember "continued" missing the last letter somewhere in the chapter - throwing the tense off.
The writing itself was pretty good, though I keep getting this nagging feeling that Chrysalis started to repeat herself a bit too often when describing the feelings she was having. Especially since it wasn't really new information to add, and the descriptions were still lengthy each time. I'd suggest making shorter "reminders" if you want Chrysalis to comment on how she's still feeling an emotion she's already made a description of; you can also focus on new details she hasn't mentioned yet, or spread information among action so it's not one long paragraph listing things.
I finally got around to reading it, and it's not finished. Ah well, one of mine is in the same boat, so I guess I understand. I do hope you finish this.