Sabbath Bloody Sabbath - As Preformed By Godspeed featuring Bruce Dickinson

Alright, first chapter is up! Nice start, leaves just enough of curiosity for me to favorite it and wait for further updates. Eagerly awaiting for the continuation.

>>658626658626 Well, I'm an admittedly slow writer, but I'll see what I can do!

I am intrigued.  It's vague enough to leave one curious, yet specific enough to point in a general direction.  So far I like it, but I'll reserve further judgement when we get some more information.

On the technical side, I have to applaud.  It is very well written and flows seamlessly.

You've set up a high standard with this one, I'll expect you to stick with it.  No pressure though.

Only thing left to say is that I'll be waiting for more.

>>659852659852 No pressure right? It's not like I've written two fanfics before this that I never finished.

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Oh, in that case; have the pressure.  All of it.  Finish this thing, or I'll hunt you if you don't.  (Wee I'm helping!)

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love it! XD

>>663340663340 Success!

Awesome start!

>>704757704757 Thank you! I'll try to maintain the quality of the story as it goes, but do forgive me if something happens. As I've said before, this amounts to a firstfic for me.

Hmmm...I think I have a pretty good idea where this is going, and it's gotten my interest.. Congratluations, good sirrah, you've earned a favorite.

>>844261844261 oh do you now? I am interested. Try me. PMs if you please, so there are no spoilers for the rest of my meager audience. I need some kind of amusement to get me back into the swing of this thing.

Also, to everyone else, I AM in fact still working on this, but I have had some terrible writer's block and only just managed to acquire a job in sales, which taken together means it may be some time before I manage to pull the next chapter of this sucker. Do forgive the delay. I hate it as much as you do.

interesting... but there is barely any info here!!!

I WANT MORE!!!

come on... please...

anyhow, good start, im wondering how she will deal with this nightmare that is so unnerving, and enemy you cannot defeat... thats gotta suck...

>>920537920537 I swear I'm still working on this sucker. But the dialogue is proving to be a pain in the -- and I've been juggling this with work and a number of other projects. Thanks for the fav BTW.

Interesting so far.

But, one little tidbit...

Ponies have hooves, not feet.

Okay, so I spent WAY to much time on this chapter, but I think it came out rather well. As for my three preferred prereaders, I do apologize for not giving you the link to this sooner. I promise to do so with the next one, and to work harder on it, though considering I'll be getting a job soon and am working on another fic, in addition to all my other projects, still leaves this story pretty low on my priority list.

You know how to change that though. All I need is people interested in me working on it!

In other notes, yes this chapter was a pain to write. First time actually trying to get the girls' characters right. How do you think I did?

Also, before anyone asks, yes this is just the beginning. Twilight, why you so crazymad?

This may be one of the most explicit examples of extreme escalation of tension that I have read in fanfiction yet. I felt as if the combination of all of the scenes in this chapter really hit home in terms of driving emotion forward. The gradual ramping of stress on Twilight was well paced, and they all played very well of of one another in terms of reactions. I didn't see any glaring or even less obvious mistakes, but I do have a bit of a peeve - the paragraphs are not indented at all. That, and you had trouble with starting a new paragraph each time someone else speaks. Otherwise, it was very solid. The first chapter greatly interested me, but this chapter has ensured that I will eagerly await the next chapter. Don't worry about how long it takes you to post the chapter, though; good things take time.

>>10381151038115 I'm sure I said this before, but fixed.

>>12384731238473 Sorry about the paragraphs... I'll consider changing it if I get enough requests, but otherwise I don't see much of a point. Yes, I know I have issues with paragraph changing according to the speaker, and I'm working on that. As is, I THINK I got all of the issues with Chapter 2.

As for the next chapter, I'll try to do it in less time than the 3 months it took me for this one. It starts REALLY picking up in chapter 4.

......Don't take too long with the next one!!!! I NEED MOAR!!!!!

>>12393641239364 You really like this fic...

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>>12394681239468 What gave you that crazy idea?

Good work my friend. Some things I didn't expect from you, others I was surprised to see you do so well. I think this will turn out to be a really great first fan fic.

>>12437471243747 First? I would have thought you of all people would remember my previous attempts at fiction. Remember Nocturne of Shadow and Chaotic Universe?

>>12452171245217 But those aren't MLP are they? I was just talking about in the MLP universe.

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All that needs to be said....

REALLY GREAT SO FAR MAN! Cant wait to see how it progresses!

MOAR i say, MOAR!!

twilight snapped, then broke down, and is now falling apart... yeah this is going to be interesting. i loved the random "no silly, i didn't come through the door, i came through the bathtub." totally pinkie pie.

next chapter, i await you!!

>>12393641239364 I swear I'm still working on it. I swear! I've just been busy with other projects and work and stuff! You WILL get another chapter. On my honor as a Gold Member! (whatever the heck that is, and why ever I am one.)

>>23557972355797 I don't know why I am one eather, but needless to say GOLD TEAM RULES!!!

Oh and yay!

>>23576992357699 eh, it's April 1st. Answer acquired.

Now... I'm only at 3500 words for the next chapter, but it's starting to come along. Just give me some time and I'll get to the good stuff. I had no idea I could spend 3000 words doing nothing but talk and thought and still make a chapter plausible.