• Published 27th May 2012
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Fallout Equestria : New Roam - Delvius



The city of Roam is tortured by ambient and open hostility. Finally, a Praetorian arises to protect the city like the Legionnaires of old, and nothing will stop him. Nothing but himself, that is.

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PROSCRIPTIO! -- PUBLIC NOTICE!

PUBLIC NOTICE!

As most of you know, this story has undergone a rewrite. The NEW story can be found here, and is open to the public. It is named Fallout Equestria : New Roam Innovatus.

So, yes, this one is cancelled.

Have a nice day!

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PROSCRIPTIO!

Sicuti plerique vestrum sciunt, rescribo Hoc subiit. NOVA fabula, inveniri possint hie et patet dui. Nominatur Fallout: Equestria Novum Roama Innovatus.

Sic, sic, hoc tollitur.

Bonum habere diem!

Comments ( 43 )

So, what inspired the rewrite?

3202069 Quite a few things, really. Mostly the desire to improve the story and clean up a few inconsistencies.

Hey man, good to see that you've got the re-write going.
Do you still want people to keep the old version of this mighty (weighty) in their favorites? or do you wan't the unwashed masses to remove it, and replace it with the new version?

3202189 Ah, now that is a choice for the person to make! People will say 'replace the old with the new', yet we learn that sometimes the old has more merit than what is recent.

Still, I'd say just keep it in there if you want. :twilightsmile:

3202299 I am always open to suggestions, my friend. :pinkiesmile: Oh, and thanks for the fav on the new story!

Well, this is... sudden. Guess I'll have to check it out.

3202321 Well, not sudden at all! I posted many blogs on it.

3202374 Alright, I'll accept that GW perhaps didn't react in a socially believable manner. But that was because he was -- at least in the other story -- well-versed in philosophy and belief in ephemeral things, though he didn't believe in gods. Now he's a bit more plain-headed in the beginning and will develop along naturally.

3202324 Ah, looks like I didn't see those on account of not actually watching you. Easy to fix.

Your reasons to rewrite seem pretty sound, but I would have recommended finishing the original first.

Wait.... What? :derpyderp2:

3202482 Ah, but they did not even know of them! But they had hints and slight encounters, and they didn't react appropriately. One of the reason's I'm rewriting.

3202728 Yes... like I said, one of the reasons of the rewrite.

2113013 I'm sorry? Could you kindly elaborate?

Loving this story, great job! Best FoE side story I read since Project Horizons. Keep it up man.

I particularly like the romance can't say I didn't see it coming but it is certainly well written.

Can't wait for when the re-write catches up and goes forward, in a word MOAR:flutterrage:

3373821 Haha, thanks dude! You can help accelerate the process of me getting to that part of the story by providing feedback, just so you know. I take those very seriously in my attempts to improve.

I had read the first two chapters of this one before taking a break to get through some other reading. Is it recommended that I go through this version of New Roam first, or that I start instead with Innovatus?

3424837 Oh, for simply knowing the story and characters, definitely the new version. But! If you have that kind of humor that makes you laugh when you see references and such, then I'd suggest reading the first version as well.

But really, just the new version.

3424854 Okie doki loki!

Alright so I'm re-reading this right now, and the one real gripe I have so far is when predator joins the party the rest of them are a alot more accepting of it than I think they would be. They're like
"You tried to kill us on multiple occasions"
"I was under mind control"
"Oh ok you're cool"

of course thats overly simplified but gets the point across. GOldwreath, maybe woudl be this accepting, but the rest of them I just don't see it. Still love this jsut as much as the first time though, can't wait for more of the re-write

3484183 Heheh, well, it's a flaw, yes. One of the reasons why I'm undergoing the rewrite in the first place; if you could provide some feedback for Innovatus in its infancy, I'm sure it would benefit for it in its adolescence.

3501629 I'll be damned... I didn't know people had pictures about my character! :pinkiegasp:

Are you just going to stop writing for this story? If so, I'm really going to miss this story.

3505587 Well, it's undergoing a rewrite under the name New Roam Innovatus. Same story, different events, new characters, removed characters. Generally, I hope to make the new one better than this one.

Thanks Del. I just came back to reading this, and got a wonderful rape scene. Well, my mind is completely black now. Considering I read this story. Alot of it. I also see your rewriting this story. Good luck, I look forward to reading it. (If you remove Myst or replace her, YOU WILL DIE.) Thanks again for this story of mind changing experiences.

3508377 Hehe, well, I didn't want the rape scene to be 'wonderful', but alright then. :twilightsheepish: Anyways, I hope to see you soon and know what you have to say about Innovatus!

3677218 Many thanks for clearing that up for me, good sir. :twilightsmile:

Hey man great writting storyline, buuuuut I just can't take the storys of Legionaries :ajsleepy: great work though.

3705896 Ahah, thank you. I do hope you'll give the new rendition of the story a read; I sure would appreciate it. :twilightsmile:

And since you've apparently read at least part of this one, could you tell me what you think? I'm actually salvaging a bit of what I've got here for the new version. Thanks in advance.

Yeah great story I'm atucally been read more but yeah the storyline perfect ( in my eyes ) along with the setting and da characters. They're well explained and acted. But Good Luck :rainbowkiss:

3716804 Aw, thanks dude. :twilightsmile: That's nice to hear. Just so you know, though, this story is undergoing a rewrite here on my page. It's called New Roam Innovatus, for your knowledge.

Okay thanks man good luck :rainbowkiss: . And Happy New Years Everypony!.:rainbowlaugh::yay:

Change the thing from Incomplete to Cancelled

Delvius this is a wonderful story you are writing and I hope to see more from you this is one of the best ones ive read so far and iv read many

4345873 Why thank you. :pinkiehappy: Sadly, this rendition of the New Roam mythos is cancelled -- New Roam Innovatus is taking over in regards to telling the story as it should be.

What language is the other explanation in?

5185841 It's in latin.

6457825 Hah, alright then. Have fun

why are the ones that look good always cancelled

7106744 Well, it has been rebooted. If you're still interested, there's that.

7107096 idk what you mean?

7107222 It's been rewritten as New Roam: Innovatus. Right here on my profile.

7108218 oh i just thought it was a sequel ok then

7304984 Oh believe me, it wasn't meant to be subtle :P

Btw if you're reading this you may as well read the remake. It's the one I actually tend to finish. It's right here, on my page.

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