If you haven't already, come on over to the Fallout: Equestria Side Stories Compilation Document here! You can post your story there, and people are always willing to be impromptu idea trampolines/proof-readers

Someone thumbed down, I thumbed up to counter. I'll read the story after I get home from school today because it looks good.

Also, I'm friends with the cover artist so he told me about it hehehe.

Welcome to the FoE sidefic herd

Thanks for helping me start off my fic, guys. I don't know who thumbed down, but I only hope they thumbed down because they actually read the story and didn't just decide to troll me.

Again, thanks!

Congratulations on the beginning of your story!  

And don't worry: the downvotes were probably trolls.  There are a small few anti-FOE boys here who tend to do that with every FOE sidefic.  If the voters actually read the story and didn't like it, they would have posted to say why.  I wouldn't give them a second thought.

Happy writing!

Oh, wow. Thanks Kkat! I'll admit, I was pretty upset with the dislikes, and no matter how I thought about it, it still made me uncomfortable.

Again, thanks! I hope that it'll be a good addition to the side-fic pantheon.

Dude, epic story. I'm hooked! Thumbs up, bitches!

(Footnote: FoE haters: MINUS ONE)

Oh and btw, I'm writing a sidefic of my own, and I would enjoy collaborating w/you. I like your style!

Thanks! I would like to collaborate with you as well; it provides more insight.

I'll see on how to contact you.

Thanks for the like!

cant wait for the next chapter this one was good

>>659554659554yeah kkat tell it like it is

Ok I would like to start by saying that this is looking like it will be an interesting read.

Just a bit of constructive criticism, each time a different character begins talking start a new paragraph, it makes things much easier to follow when you do that

definitely a good story you've got going on here, can't wait for more!

>>678054678054 Alright, I'll try implementing that.

>>678145678145 Thanks, I'm glad you like it!

And then the Courier appeared and killed half of what was still living in one day.

>>688371688371  Uhhh...

What does that mean?

>>689085689085 You don't play much Fallout, do you?

>>689167689167   Well, if you count fallout 3 and New Vegas...

But I think I get what you mean now.

cant wait for the next chapter this one was good

Holy Celestia's manure, I love everything big, especialy chapters. I love ch.development what you made.

>>742224742224

Thanks, although if you have any suggestions, I'll be glad to listen to them.

I am the one who is more interested in characters than the plot. I see some unicorn buck on main theme, so I think it's no time to suggest anything.

And as for the story as a whole, I like how you write now.

>>744979744979

Thanks again.

And, may I ask, have you been reading this story? The 'I like how you write now' suggests you have.

Lastly, you mean that unicorn buck on the cover art?

>>746035746035

Ayep. And I had read almost all FoE side stories what ever existed, so if I fucken say what your story well written when I fucken mean it.

>>746042746042 Okay, cool. Thanks!

wow, nearly 30,000 words in just over a week, that's like Somber levels of writing

I'm looking forwards to seeing where this goes, though the sentient APC does seem a little over-powered, so I'll bet it'll get blown up pretty soon, did some say heroic sacrifice?

one small error: it's not the Ministry of Magic (that's Harry Potter) it's the Ministry of Arcane Sciences, though the speaker being a zebra lets this kinda slip by

>>747882747882

Whoops. I guess I should try to correct that.

And, actually, due to the fact that most important events will take place indoors, the APC will have to stay outside. When I was thinking of this chapter, I was kind of hoping for a Shepard-EDI relationship, you know? Makes it more interesting. And, besides, he's going to need that extra power. He isn't like blackjack or littlepip in which he faces threats at few numbers at a time. Trust me.

>>748642748642 I've never played Mass Effect, so I have no clue what you're talking about there...

so he'll be facing 20+ foes at the same time? also I'm hoping for vehicle combat now

>>748680748680

Aw, that's too bad. Buy, yes, exactly.

And I do intend to place some sort of vehicle-oriented combat.

And, again, don't worry. As the story progresses, the APC won't seem overpowered anymore. At most, it'll just save their sorry flanks when they really need it.

OR NOT. DUN DUN DUN

yay APC with an AI I can see where this going to go

>>752905752905

Oh, really?

Haha, yes, well, considering the shit I'm going to get them into, their probably going to need a damned tank.

When I was writing that chapter, I wanted to create a sort of BOND between them and the vehicle, you know? Lil'pip and the Sky Bandit was fine, but it lacked... personality. Something like Shepard and EDI.

Hey bro! Awesome story!

>>794342794342

Thanks, I'm glad you like it!

Tod is the best part of his brain.

>>795446795446

Nope, I vote for Tom.

Kira x Conductor

Is there going to be clopping?

>>796267796267

You will find out.

ohhh new chapter and a good one again

>>799748799748

Thanks for the kind words! I know it isn't really much, but I'm going to make chapter 7 as long as possible, while still maintaining it's quality. (hopefully)

Hehe, it's not hard to make some secondary characters little more happy, and make story little more nice. Anyway, how i understand, we will not see RT a looong time.   I like character development chapters, usually that mean it will be blood soon.

>>801803801803

Oh, don't worry. When you read chapter 7, you will get but a mere taste of what Goldwreath and co. will be facing. Mwahahahaha

And, uh, what's RT?

>>801992801992

ofcouarse itsa Road Town

>>802110802110

Ah, ok. I was confused there for a moment.

Oh, don't worry, I'll be planning to do some nasty shit to them soon....

thatsa awesome chapta. I see some Red alert here. What can i say? FOR MOTHER RUSSIA!

MOAR

>>811654811654

Red Alert? Where?

I only finished chapter 3 so far but this is one of my fav side stories I've read so far I love the main character, the setting, and the legion

with this chapter you've gone from a standout FO:E author to one of the best, the action is very well done, and chapters where the darkness of the wasteland comes crashing down onto the 'heroes' are my favorites and you've done that in a extremely brutal way, yet completely reasonable, I'm guessing the next chapter will have a lot of soul searching, right?

and do I sense a recurring villain with this specter zebra? again watch the power levels

>>813316813316 I'm guessing the omni-tanks sound a lot like mammoth/Apocalypse tanks from the C&C series

would the omni-tanks look anything like this?:

Image: http://i1055.photobucket.com/albums/s513/stringtheory00/mammothtank.jpg

(this is the mammoth tank from C&C 3)

>>822009822009 Thanks for the words! Big praise to hear that, especially considering the greatness of the original FOE and Project Horizons

>>823036823036

First off, Thanks so much for that! I mean, I wouldn't consider myself THAT good (am I?), but thanks anyway. Also, where exactly did I do horrible, brutal stuff to them? And isn;t project horizons like... a lot more brutal? Sorry, I get kind of lost sometimes.

Secondly, the zebra dude will be...an important character. You'll see. Oh, and, uh, what power levels?  

Lastly: Did I really make the reference that clear? Damn.

Fantastic story !

I just finished chapter 2 and can't wait to read more.

This will keep me awake all night I just know it

>>824279824279 firstly, you're updating on a regular basis while most of the big FO:E fics on here have either died or gone 'On Hiatus' (Misfits, New Beginnings...), secondly you're doing the Zebra side of the war, which hasn't been explored yet, that wins you SO many points, third, the characters are awesome, fourth, you're doing the doing the Zebra side of the war (did I mention that one already?)

as for being brutal, you're not as brutal as Project Horizons, though it's been a while since I've re-read it

whether someone/something is 'overpowered', though you have a lot more leeway with villains/enemies, given they have to be smarter/stronger/faster etc. then the heroes in order for them to be a challenge, just be sure to not bend the laws of reality to their favor (for both sides) without sufficient explanation

as for the mammoth tank reference, I didn't get it while reading the story, because you didn't really describe the omni-tanks that much, but once regolit brought up Red Alert, it all became apparent

>>825063825063 Thanks! Good to know more people are reading!

>>826727826727http://subjectsigma77.deviantart.com/art/Goldwreath-311396313

I'm not the best artist but I hope you like

>>828589828589 That's good, especially the leg guard portions. Now, if only I could get more people to make art... Hmmmm.....

Eyup

>>825537825537

Well, I'm pretty sure you've noticed some of the dangers Roam has to offer. As I said in a previous comment, they're probably going to need a freakin' tank to survive. Considering what I have in store for them, I really don't think an APC with a 25mm autocannon is going to help much, aside from transport.

Yeah, I have always wondered why no one did a FOE sidefic that talked about the zebras. I guess it is pretty difficult, having to construct the world on my own instead of basing it off an existing one, but still.

>>829417829417 Thanks It's a good story at its beginning and if you keep at it people'll notice it

>>830755830755

Hopefully. That's really what I'm hoping for.

'Calm down' chapter. Myst sooo shy.... After she said what she can't talk with foals, I had wish he will say somethink like "what your gonna do when you have one". Heh, would be priceless.

Myst is like me in a way lol really shy and get embarrassed and what not like her but good chapter

>>844799844799 Thanks. I know that it perhaps doesn't have a lot of interesting stuff in it, but I'll make the next one better.

>>844331844331 Damn, I should have done that!

>>849219849219

Not necessarily. He has to treat her as a good friend or sister. So do not make fun of it is very suitable. I just hope one day what some other stallion would say this, together with a clear hint. THAT would be really priceless.

AWESOME ART!!!! Zebra just

>>865724865724 Yup! And I have RoflPanzer to thank for it.

>>865745865745

Myst's flanks are HOT!!!

Y does the zebra at the background have a sock puppet?

Read the story, and you will find out. >>865765865765

>>865765865765

Dunno, Skyfire's facial expression (slightly derped eyes) get all my attention. And sock puppets is the best friends.

>>865884865884 The derped eyes must be a small error. As for the sock puppets....

I found a Saints Row reference in chapter 9 when Myst and Goldwreath were being tracked by the heat seeking missile and Goldwreath dropped Myst, just like the Boss dropped Shaundi when they were about to be killed by that plane headed for them  during the beginning.

Image: http://media1.gameinformer.com/images/site/pages/saintsrow/saints-row-hub-bkg.jpg?v=1

>>911686911686 Huh, now that you mention it...

But that was unintentional, really.

really good chapter

have I mentioned that this story is awesome yet? because it just keeps on getting more and more awesome

from the basterd Specter, the fight against the zombies in Pyro Kinetics, the weird ass dream, shooting down the missiles chasing them, and now ending up in the river paralyzed, this story is AWESOME, for me it's the #2 'pure drama' FO:E story right behind 'Murky Number Seven'

>>914355914355 Thanks! It took me a while to get out, so I was hoping people would like it.

>>914805914805 Thanks for the words!

I've never read murky number seven, so I don't really know just what you mean.

Again, thanks. I really hope I can put this on EqD soon.

>>914915914915 yes I love this chapter also love how you put so many words in and make it so long but its not so stretched out

>>914930914930 I've given up on trying to do summaries so have a link: Murky Number Seven

FO:E side stories that get sent to EQD get put into the compilation post, no pre-reading required just because of the sheer number of them, and I found your story in there, there are four FO:E stories that have their own post: the original (of course), Project Horizons, Pink eyes, and most recently (and by recently I'm mean like 2-3 months ago) Heroes, Heroes got its own post for being 177k+ words long at the time and possibly reaching a critical mass in popularity (it doesn't explicitly state this on its post), so you might want to check with EQD to find out what exactly qualifies a FO:E story for its own post

EDIT: word count theory is bullshit, Murky Number Seven has 311,092 words currently and doesn't have it's own post

>>915179915179

I think that the comparison with MNS inappropriate. In MNS protagonist is so constantly pathetic and weak, what, despite fact what story is very well-written, it often make me feel .

Goldwreath is not weak or pathetic, he made decisions and failed. It is remind me Silver Storm, she had failed on every step in the beginning. Hehe Goldwreath left behind half of a party, and went in some dangerous place on great distance in evening. Priceless decision, with expected consequences.  

>>915386915386 I wasn't comparing the actual content of the stories, I was comparing that both stories take themselves very seriously, with very few (from what I've seen) lamp-shaded references

I agree that in terms of content, the closest comparison to New Roam would be Heroes

>>914997914997 Thanks. I try to make my chapters as long and interesting as possible.

>>915179915179 Ah, ok.

>>915386915386 Yeah, well, I'm trying to make lots of bad stuff happen to characters so people can see what they're made of.

>>915451915451 I feel like that's important. Could you explain what you mean by 'lamp-shaded' references?

>>916032916032 sure, lampshade hanging is a trope (I'll let the trope page do all the explaining), I've seen you do it occasionally with tropes and story stuff, but not with references, wait...I really haven't seen any references either, so I guess I meant to say that you don't make obvious references

Meanwhile in Roam...

Image: http://thebloodofjesus.files.wordpress.com/2008/02/a-roman-soldier-giclee-print-c12350990.jpeg

>>975477975477

What the hell is this about...

Eh, you get a lot better in the later chapters. To be truthful, chapters one thru four are a bit shoddy. But it's still good.

>>984598984598

Yeah, I'll be editing those soon anyways. I never really felt like they were complete. Thanks for the feedback.

another good chapter really like this one

>>984701984701 Thanks! I know it took kinda long to put out, but it's kind of hard writing on an iPad.

I dont know how to describe this chapter.... Amount of awesome stuff is just abnormally big.

um, wow, you certainly understand the 'abuse your protagonist' part of FO:E

you slipped back into human terminology, using words like man and person, nothing too bad, though it did break my immersion

another awesome chapter, keep it up!

>>987737987737 Must edit that now.

>>986765986765 I... um... thanks?

>>986554986554 Thanks for the animation!