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Saiyan of the North Star


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Through time and space, warriors who had the star shape birthmark fought against powerful enemies, who wanted nothing but victory and conquest. In this tale, six heroes defeated their own mighty foes and then were able to enjoy some peace until death. Their deaths came either by sacrificing themselves for others or naturally. Now, as their stories come to an end there are six new teen boys that bear the star shape birthmark. These six boys will go on bizarre adventures to Canterlot High where they will learn from each other, make new friends, find love, and push pass the limits of the darkest of evils as the six Jojo's roar to battle.

Rartiy x Jonathan Joestar, Pinkie Pie x Joseph, Sunset Shimmer x Jotaro Kujo, Rainbow Dash x Josuke Higashikata, Fluttershy x Giorno Giovanna, Applejack x Johnny Joestar, Twilight Sparkle x Timber Spruce, and Flash Sentry x Derpy Hooves.

I changed the tag a bit.

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Comments ( 196 )

Ko this is my first so hope like it and if there's any question you like to ask, I'll answer them the best I can and try to be a great story writer like you guys.

Comment posted by Saiyan of the North Star deleted Aug 26th, 2015

This seems like an interesting story. BTW, it's supposed to be Principal Celestia not Principle.

Ko sorry should have check better but rest assured that work happen again and you'll more what happen next.

You need a pre-reader and an editor to fix your grammar, it's a little hard to read as is. Otherwise, you have an interesting idea here.

Ko I know don't worry I'm getting some help so I'll be fine.

KO I made one or two changes to the first chapter hope it's a little better.:twilightsheepish:

Why does this have a gore tag, but not a dark tag? You respond to comments by moving your mouse over to the right hand side of the comment that you want to respond to and then clicking on the >> that appears.

6390207 KO well I read that gore means some blood shed and violates so I thought why not make this story a little of that.

KO so what do you think about my third chapter.:pinkiehappy:

6390207 KO hope you check out my other chapters I work really hard on them.:pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

6480452 KO thank you checking out my story it's my very first one so stay tune for the 4th chapter is coming soon, also I heard that they did the English dub of Jojo series in ITunes and hope you favorite as well.:pinkiehappy: :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

6481067 True ones watch VOST Saiyan boy ! I myself got the seasons 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6 and 7 on my bookshelf !
I'll favorite your fic when I'll see Luna developing a stand !! 8D

6481117 KO well I'm not sure this story is gonna just the boys without their stands but got their powers like Jotaro can be super fast and stop time and Johnny with his spin energy and super strength something like that. Maybe in a new story.

6481153 If you have any question about the Jojoverse, it'll be a pleasure ton answer you with precision. Don't hesitate ton MP me Saiyan-boy.

6481156 KO thanks and in this story just the Jojo's with all their powers from both the anime and manga series but without their stands awesome am I right.:ajsmug::rainbowdetermined2:

6481216 KO well the 4th chapter is coming soon so stay tune to read more.

"The Hamon is similar to the sun's ripples !" says Will Anthonio Zeppeli.
Celestia will be soooo proud ! 8D

6490091 KO thanks thought really hard on this chapter and don't worry Jonathan and Joseph powers won't be the only thing that Celestia will be proud of so stay tune. :pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

6493143 KO dude check the intro to see the love interest like it said Rarity x Jonathan.

6493522 KO worry the generosity of Rarity and the gentle Jonathan do sound like the perfect couple.

Yaaaaaaay !! Giorno is in the place !!
I want a slow-mo punch in the face ! ♪

6574668 KO there totally will be and hope you tell your friends about this story, also there will be more action of beyond awesomeness. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

There's a problem with tensing in the first chapter. In some parts its past tense, but when you get to Luna it suddenly shifts to present tense, then back to past when going back to Celestia. Just stick to one tense.

trouble of breathing

Take out the 'of'
You're in need of commas in several places. Try reading out loud and pay attention to when you breathe. That's the signal for a comma.

anybody’s hope and dreams

hopes

Few seconds later the

A few

Tears began to fill in Celestia eyes

Celestia's

Standing there Celestia was at a lost

loss

they noticed names tags

name

As the babies laid there, something else caught their eye. A mark in the shape of a star on the lower part of their neck.

As the babies laid there, something else caught Celestia's eye. A mark in the shape of a star on the lower part of the infant's neck.

Turning towards Luna, Celestia said

"We have to look after them."

6618398 KO I get it but I promise I have help to check my writing so why don't you check other chapters to see what I mean. :rainbowdetermined2:

6618398 KO at least your friend Ghost Rider like my story hopefully you'll come around too and we can become great friends. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

6676934 KO let's hope not cause one wrong move and she could end up in the nurses office.
Jotaro: Well maybe more like a hospital *grin*
KO come on Jotaro be nice and you'll have to wait for the chapter to find out. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

Joseph/Pinkie. The perfect match to blow some minds up ! 8D

I still want the Gold Experience's slow mo' punch in the face ! :flutterrage:

6829755 KO thanks and don't worry you'll see it soon. Also think you could spread the word about my stories to other like your friends, that would be great. And yes I made a second story. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2: It's a RWBY/Equestria Girls crossover. :ajsmug::derpytongue2:

Wait giorno then johnny. You skipped part 6. What happened to jolyne?

7103430 KO well I wanted to do six boys of the Jojo's since their are six girls of the Equestria Girls and Sci-Twilight and Flash are already the idea couple in the story, so their won't be much pairing for part 6. Also I try to make things even. :rainbowdetermined2:

If you need an editor or pre-reader to fix up your writing, I'll offer my services if that's okay.

7201726 KO thanks for the offer but did you think of the story?

7201790 KO just uploaded a new chapter. Hope you enjoy a rainbow vs a star. :rainbowdetermined2:

Neat !
I hope to see Luna in some action now !

7297153 KO your welcome and I'm sure to think of something for Luna to her into the fray. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:
Hope you enjoy the new chapter.

Jolyne + Rainbow Dash = best ship ever :coolphoto:

7297212 KO well if you do a story like that I'll check out and be sure to tell your friends about my story and what did you think of the chapter and Blueblood getting beaten up like hell.

Holy shit!! JOJO!!!!! YES!! I needed something like this! I will read on my friend! Also If there is no Dio... I'll still read on.

7332766 KO thanks hope you enjoy reading it and tell what's your favorite chapter and favorite part you like. Don't forget give it a thumbs up for liking it. Wait for what I got in store for this story. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2:

7332766 KO also tell your friends about it if their a Jojo's Bizarre Adventure fan as well. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::raritywink:

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