One quick question... Does she have her cutie mark in this chapter?

>>653487653487 You haz made Fluttershy happy.

All that happiness! Makes me wonder why there's a sad tag. Guess we'll have to wait for the rest of the story to find out ey

But a well started story nevertheless, can't wait for the rest

>>655903655903

OMG thank you!

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WTF WHY DID THE JUMP?

Nice story so far. Like this chapter a lot. I'm sure they had there reasons for running. Sadly still being young death wasn't on the mind. Hope Scoots figures that out. Like that Rainbow and Flutter adopted her. Its really sweet. Will be watching out for the next chapter.

>>657569657569

The police were at the train station waiting for them, iddn't you read that part?

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(clap clap clap clap clap) Five claps for the great story! It's even a Scootaloo story!

>>664811664811 Darn you custom emoticons!

>>664905664905 ... Quick I need my troll face repellent!

>>666314666314 This sounds noobish but how do you post pictures? I'm new to this part of the internets.

>>666356666356

It's a fimfiction enhancement pack, its by iloveportalz0r here's the link to the blog post about it,

LINK:

>>666399666399 Sorry I meant pictures like the multiple "Please go on" pics I can't seem to find the URL of.

>>666429666429 Some are on it like these

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>>666469666469 I'm-a try something.http://dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_YouDontSay2.png If it doesn't work it'll look like letters and numbers.

EDIT: It didn't work.

>>666474666474 NEW IDEA!

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EDIT: YES

I suppose if my oc is going to be in this, i need to read it xD

I SHALL BE FIRST!

loved the chapter btw

If there was one thing that is the most . . . prominent of your mistakes, it would be your capitalization issues.

That's constructive criticism. Otherwise for that, I see nothing that is outwardly wrong with it.

I feel like there's something else, but I can't put my finger on it . . .

>>682354682354

My editing stuff isn't quite working because I'm not at home at the moment, so yeah....

constructive criticism:

Capitalization and run-on sentences.

That is all.

I like how you managed to squeeze in the MLP Pilot episode into your plot.

Constructive criticism:

Capitalization

Run-on sentences

Wayy too rushed.

That is all.

guess who's first? First again? Subtles first, SO EAT A DICK! jk guise,

Anyways, serious comment time. This is probably the best chapter of any of your fics that I'VE edited, and it was fun to read. PM your cell number, that'll make it so much easier to plan editing sessions. I'm going to need you to edit my fic's new chapter too

I personally enjoyed this chapter, happy Scoots is happy now. Patiently waiting for more

Also, thanks for making me nearly burst out laughing at work from your very final statement

You are gaining steam with this. I'm keen to see where this one goes...

waiting patiently for next chapter

LOVE THE STORY!!! I'm definately following the story!

>>786518786518

Two things

1. Thank you very much!

2. I LOVE YOUR PROFILE NAME AND PIC!

STAR!!!!!!! Poor scootaloo..

BRAVO, BRAVO!!!

Oh Fluttershy.

Nice. That was just beautiful.

yay! new update! keep up the good work and I can't wait how flutters and dashie are gonna meet scoots next time!

I am just going to go out on a limb and guess that star probably isn't dead that is just what I was thinking anyway

>>786639786639 Hey now, other ponies are going to meet scoots as well. I do get some benefits, being the editor and all xD so I know the plot:3

>>786630786630 This author writes VERY heart wrenching material, doesn't he?

>>787430787430 Yup.

Awesome! Next chapter will be awesome.

AWW.

>>805339805339 Proud to say I edited this. Though not as well as I usually do...

I smiled right when you said it was smile inducing.

GAH! I hate you for giving me d'awiabetus

keep up the good work!

>>806736806736 Thanks....!

Scootaloo likes all kinds of music. good chapter!

Lovin the story! Have a Spike

>>653485653485  yes, she does

FIRST MOTHERBUCKERS!

MOAR!!!

This is getting to emotional for my heart to take!

Aww this is sweet! I'm loving this story. Great chapter.

Great chapter mate.

Scootaloo is coming along so sweetly    I hope her friends forgive her for lying to them

As a background thought... I'm wondering when Fluttershy and RD will get together and then be her foster mothers. I can't wait for you to continue this (as long as you keep up the really high quality of work). This story really seems to be getting excellent.

I'm loving this story

I've noticed a few grammar errors, but those were just you forgetting to capitalize the names in some sentences - other than that nothing jumped me. But then again, English isn't my primary language. Still however, written without making my eyes bleed, so that's good

Can't wait for more!

The end felt a little rushed... aside form that its nice to see the story receiving another update. Makes me wonder how RD and Shy got together though as they don't seem close like that at all right now.

Anyway I'll keep watching with great intrest as I still really really want to see where this goes. Plus Scootaloo is cool and engaging.

Scootaloo running away now from the cottage, Fluttershy realizing how much of an idiot she's been, Scootaloo seeing a vision of Star to go back to Fluttershy, reconciliations between Scoots and Fluttershy, to be continued

>>844492844492

Nope, I've planned all the way to chapter 110 or so....

>>844847844847

One hundred and ten!

And why is it on Hiatus!?

>>844856844856  

i'm really busy with painitng adn then i've got a fair to go to, adn then i've been typing a lot, you'll see soon :D

this will probably end badly scoots will probably run again

Good chapter.

dunno rainbow seemed a little off, i mean i can't see her agreeing to it even if it was for the best. seems to me fluttershy should have consulted a wiser scource, a rhyming zebra, a magenta pony? or the wisdom of pinkey?

poor scoots... or flutters would simply ignore both applejack and RD...

keep up the good work!

P.S. wthay is wrong with the site? or is it just me that I keep getting bad gateway errors?

>>845445845445

I got about nine earlier

I believe theres only one more chapter....UNTIL WHAT IVE BEEN WAITING FOR WOOT

>>850676850676 Three-four more....

Fluttershy seemed kind of on edge, even for her I mean.

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I don't really have to worry about the sad cliff hanger here since there's already been a glimpse of the near future with Scootaloo having a happy family.

Hiatus...

DUDE U LEFT IN MY TROLL PART LOOK FRCAPS

reds jealously cannot be contained

Bravo, Brava Bravissimo!

'Twas very well done.

Ok... Nice. After the last chapter I was left slightly put out that everypony wanted Scoots to go back to the orphanage. But I like how you fixed the issue.

I wonder what RD will be like when she joins in the family? I can't wait to see it happen.

Its so sweet how this scene played out. Scoots is awesome and deserves a good home. She will most certainly liven up her new 'mum's life... I can't wait for the next chapter.   This story flows so well, Its hard to believed its chapter 10 already.

Scoots getting kissed and liking it is this a hint at something?

"THEN SHE REALIZED THAT WASN’T THE ONLY THING OF HIS THAT WAS BIG FOR HIS AGE!"

If you know what I mean.

So what, Fluttershy was just purposely keeping Scoots in suspense?

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THEN SHE REALIZED THAT WASN’T THE ONLY THING OF HIS THAT WAS BIG FOR HIS AGE!

that was kinda uncalled for... I don't really think it fits the story...

good chapter anyhow.

>>880534880534

WHAT THE BLUEBERRY FUCK DUDE!

yay star is alive I had a feeling he would be and now scoots has a reason to go back to the orphanage she will constantly be thinking about that kiss as well as him thinking about why he kissed her

Flutter-Mom!

>>883058883058

Yay

>>882802882802 I SWEAR BY THE SWEET LOVE OF WOONA THAT I TOLD YOU!!!

>>882986882986 hey now, there are other colts in the sea xD

>>881981881981 that was me, his editor, putting in a little humorous line, then thinking he'd see it and take it out my apologies

>>883717883717 no worries

it was is a great story anyway

>>884000884000 Sorry for throwing you off with it. And it IS a great story, I'm proud to be editing it:D

Who will end up adopting Star? Place your bets; 10 bits maximum!

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Now Shooting Star makes me cry like a baby.

I love this story!

>>884643884643

Imagine Twilight adopting

>>884643884643>>888628888628

Actually, that gives me an idea...even though I'm already 1,500 words into the chapter

>>888742888742

DO IT BRONY!

You know, if that's what you want.