Yay for a Spike-centric story!

I have a lot of free time at the moment so...what better way to spend it by doing something creative! Hopefully this idea hasn't been done already but if it already has...

I'm sorry and I'll give credit to whoever thought up of the idea first!

Just thought I'd put that there because it seems polite

Anyway, hopefully you'll enjoying reading this! Comments and constructive criticism are always appreciated!

Thanks for reading!

FIRST besides the writer o course great story

>>646505646505 Even if someone has used the idea before, (which i don't recall anyone doing so yet) the stories could both still be massively different!  

Personally, i sort of enjoy when i find a story that has the same base-idea as one of mine. Its fun to see which direction they take it.

Anyways...your idea seems like a good one, wish ya the best of luck.

Lookin good so far, meng.

Seems like this story has potential. Be careful what you wish for Spike.

You are now on the "popular story" list on the side, and moving up it quickly. Shoot for featured!

good start to a good story but what spike is saying is true  

At the end, it says "What. What?!" is it supposed to be that? "Wait. What?!" would sound better if it was.

I agree.

...what.

I like the idea, but I have serious gripes about this first part. It's a whole lot of nothing, to be honest. The premise of the story is that Spike supposedly trades places of power with Twilight, but this idea isn't even mentioned until near the end, and doesn't HAPPEN until the actual end of the first chapter. While it is important to set up premise and the idea of his mundane days of jealousy for his mistress, it took ages to come to the conclusion of the story's main idea. As readers, we don't care to slog through paragraphs of Spike getting up and going through his normal routine. Even movies use cross-fades for this. It could be explained in a single sentence. Perhaps a paragraph or two of exposition would have done better for the opening, and we could've hopped to the waking up scene and discovered more early on.

Is Spike in one of his larger incarnations now? You never say he looked down at the filly, but if the horseshoe fits-- Spike might be in one of his more adolescent growth phases to suite the idea of the story. If he's going to explore being in a position of power, it serves as good symbolism that he literally looks down at Twilight now. Just food for thought.

I'll be watching, and hoping for improvement now that we've set the stage and have the pieces moving.

~Aegis

>>651816651816

It can be either since they both work, a double "What" dosn't sound that bad.

Very nice story idea, can't wait for the next chapter!

. . . .There IS going to be a next chapter, right?. . . . . .THIS ISNT A ONE-SHOT, RIGHT?!?!?!? D:

>>651961651961

Hey, my mind was rented out by datdamnface. Don't expect me to have the knowledge of literature I used to.

>>652144652144

Can I use it to store memes?!

>>652239652239

Image: http://memeorama.com/wp-content/uploads/2012/01/Okay_guy.jpg

I'm likeing where this is going.

ooooooo i'm verry interested plz write more

Great premise, I've always thought Twilight takes Spike for granted.Looking forward to the continuation.

I agree with the previous comment about how Spike should be described as 'looking down' on filly Twilight. A little detail that goes a long way in setting the tone.

Phew, this certainly was a challenging chapter to write but also a very enjoyable experience too!

Word of warning: Don't expect updates to be this often (I do have other stories to work on) but I just had to update this after the response I got from the first chapter!

If the characterization of any of the characters seems off, tell me A.S.A.P and I'll do my best to fix it!

Comments and constructive criticisms are welcome as always; I love to gobble them up!

Hope you all enjoy it! Thanks for reading!

Twilight....

*Hugginates like the almighty voice of Luna.*

Herkkk,...... filly Twilight,... IMAGE TOO CUTE TO COMPREHEND!!!!!!:twilight oops:

*brain breaks*

APPLEJACK!

Here's to hoping Spike dosen't go insane with power (a little lording over while he's still new at this would be acceptable) and can actually make everyone's life better, seeing as he now knows how both sides in his relationship feel.

SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO MUCH WIN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I'm finding that I'm gradually becoming a better writer through this. Hopefully I am anyway!

As always, comments and constructive criticisms are very welcome!

Enjoy!

I'm liking this story, but as far as plot goes, it felt like nothing significant happened this chapter.  Twilight herself dismissed her own use of magic, making it seem pointless and boring. Speed it up.

Well, I now have an insatiable urge to off a certain dragon for being an insensitive prick. Joy and rapture...

Meh, I keed. What was that meme again??? Oh yah.

Image: http://kelfen.files.wordpress.com/2010/03/moar.jpg

Spike don't be a jerk and hypocrite. Help Twilight out or I WILL DESTROY YOU.

>>672098672098

Well, this was originally going to be in Chapter 2 but I felt that having two vastly different emotional tones in just one chapter would be too jarring for readers.

That said, I have taken your advice on board. Thanks for the comment!

>>672116672116

You want it? It's yours my friend, as long as you have enough rupees!

Nah just kidding, you'll get it for free of course!

>>672143672143 tsk tsk.... Terrible business policy you have there, bru... thoughicantreallytalkw8wut

Something tells me people are going to start noticing spike's memory problems and behavioral quirks.

Wait if twilight went all said and crying what about Spike when he was back in his role.

I still feel bad for twilight really bad but know i feel i should know more about spike.

I hope you have a sweet moment with the two later on.  

Oh man, I knew something like this was going to happen in this chapter. Now I feel like I'm going to cry in my sleep!

But, now I wonder what Spike will do when he finds out about the day that Filly Twilight has been through.

Spike at least would get much stronger as he grows, but Twilight losing her magic, she is doomed to a life of disappointment unless everything goes back to normal. Though if things go back to normal and Twilight remembers this she may be alot more considerate to Spike and try to include him far more often.

Anyone else just wanna go give twilight a hug and then go get her some ice-cream all through the chapter? Oh, and a very nice piece of writing you've got going on here Gingerhooves

I liked this chapter. It let us get to know more about this universe's Twilight. It also showed some slight character growth for her.

I'm liking where this story is going so far. Keep up the good work!

Twilight Sparkle should join the CMC

As you can probably tell from this, Fluttershy will be in the next chapter! And her arrival will herald a new age of happiness to take a break from the sadness of recent chapters!

Regardless, enjoy this chapter and let me know what you think.

Thanks for reading and have fun!

haha! I love it!

Good on spike. Because if he didn't try to take responsibility for this I was going to punt him to the moon. I eagerly wait for the next chapter.

Is there gonna be a chapter were it shows the other spike?

you know, like when he made the wish, it didnt change the world, but he switched places with the spike from that world who didnt know about the wish, it be funny to see the other spike freak out about him being the assistant!

>>691986691986

An interesting idea but no I'm afraid!

Simply put, the whole world changed around Spike. He's the same (except for his appearance) but everything else has changed.

Moar.

this is so sad and fantastically written. i wish i could write half as well as some people on this website

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Can someone please give Twi a hug? Like, right now? Before my heart breaks?

Now this, I like. :D Spike is taking responsibility for his actions, and wants to be there to Twilight. That was just very sweet of him to be there for her, to help her in this tough time she's having within this dimension. He's not just in charge of her as a role reversal, but also to help her grow, to find her place in the world and feel better about her life and herself. I like that! I like how this has taken a bit of a serious and relateable turn that just really works and isn't at all out of place. What's also interesting, as we saw in the previous chapter, is that we see things from the new Twilight's perspective! It isn't just Spike himself seeing this new world, we actually get a sense of this new world through the eyes of somepony who thinks that this is reality, from their eyes! That was a very nice turn to take this story to give it something interesting, and to also give Spike a whole new lease on what this is. None of it was out of place, and flowed beautifully.

I'm really enjoying this, I can't wait to see what's to come along the way! Well done!

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Gentlemen?

Okay, NOW this is getting awesome!

I wonder if Spike will get his wings in this new world.

>>JJ GingerHooves while i am deeply saddened there wont be a switcheroo which involves screaming, belief of insanity, and/or journeys into ones inner phsyche i am wondering if the friends he has in mind are the dreaded CMC!. Are they?

Yes! I was looking for a good slice-of-life. I've been reading too much adventure and dark lately and not that they were getting stale, I just needed a brake.

Have some best pony for your efforts.

Spike needs to realize that he said that he would never forget twilight and meant it. He did love her, so if the same thing happens in the real world, than he should know better now.

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So I'm about to read and this is what popped into my head from reading the description.

Show some spike love!!!

YEAH!!!

He's in the top 10 least appreciated characters list!!!

It's about time he gets some respect!!!

Have a moustache good sir!

>>692257692257 That is legit! Me Gusta.

So....this is awesome.

Have an internet.

Brace yourselves, cuteness incoming. Seriously, the filly!Mane 6 are so adorable.

Also, a "cooker?" You mean like a stove or an oven? 'cause either word would work better in my opinion.

>>692293692293

Have you read "It Takes A Village?" 'cause it's pretty much one of the most awesome Spike-centered fics I've seen yet.

Glad to see that Spike is taking responsibility, even if he didn't intend for Twilight to be so sad.

>>692257692257 That would have also been awesome.

>>692257692257

Luna's Socks, that's cute!

>>692257692257

who drew that? it looks awesome

>>692997692997

dzetawmdunion

Good job redeeming yourself Spike

There we go, chapter 5!

Note that I have added Fluttershy as a main character to this story. As you can probably foresee, she will be a significant character in this story.

Also...bah, I hate to say this (makes me feel selfish) but it'd be lovely if anypony could whip up some fanart for this story to replace the boring image I use currently. I must stress that THIS IS NOT VITAL but would be very appreciated.

Regardless, enjoy the chapter! I had a good time writing it!

Edit: Is it just me or is this is the featured box AGAIN already for the second time?! Madness. But madness I gladly accept.

Lil Twi makes my heart meeeelt.

<<<<<this dragon... is a huge prick

Hopefully Spike will get back to his real home soon. I also hope when he gets back to his real home, he tells Twilight about how he felt and in turn Twilight feels rotten about everything she did to him in the past.

Interesting description... will save for later!

This story is sad in a solemn sort of way. And I love it.

Spike hatched Twilight from an egg and earned his draco mark.

...wait, what?

>>706771706771

Really enjoying the fic so far, keep up the good work.

And I'll see what I can do about some fanart for a cover, though it might take a day or so.

Twilight loves all books... some things will need change.

Okay Spike, remember showing a girl your good with kids is a sure fire way to score some points. Rarity will be impressed, ya know, until you return to the right world and all that progression goes down the drain.

Awesome story man, I particularly like how it shows how mature Spike is mentally. Different body same mind, and he still rises to the occasion.

Must ... hug ... filly ... Twilight.  Damn you forth wall.

It looks like you're having a hard time with showing vs. telling.  Here's an example of I what I mean:

"Fluttershy started to re-imagine memories that Spike never actually physically took part in. They were fake images conjured up by the magic of Spike’s wish."

You don't need to tell us this.  We know they're false.  What you can do, instead, is describe what's different and how it feels wrong to Fluttershy without stating it directly like you did.  It get's the reader more involved.  

I always wanted to write a story with this kind oof conflict for Spike since the moment I figured he wasn't at the birthday party of Twilight. Now I don't have to, here it is. Thanks, I'm enjoying this a lot.

"Spike and Peewee were both peering at the contents of a big book with a red cover that wrote in gold letters: The Complete Guide to Dragons. "

I thought ponies knew "Next to nothing about dragons". Then why is there a book on them?

Oh well, great chapter. I hope the next one includes some more Mane si- er- five.

You can't always get what you want...

No, you can't always get what you want...

But if you try sometimes, you just might find...

You get what you need.

I love this fic. It's a very fun story so far with just the right amount of HNNNNNNNNNNG to keep your heart melting.

WHY U NO UPDATE FASTER!?

Just over 20,000 words in total. Yerr.

As you may of noticed, there's a new cover image! This wonderful piece of art was done by X9ss, give him a round of applause! *claps*

Check out his deviantart page here: http://x9ss.deviantart.com/

Now I'll answer a few questions you may (or may not) have:

1. Why have Vinyl Scratch here? Isn't that a bit random?

I wanted Spike to interact with somepony else in this chapter and I thought that as the time he was up, Vinyl Scratch was probably awake too due to her partying nature. I really enjoyed writing for her actually so she may make an appearance again. Wherever its suitable of course.

2. You're updating pretty quickly don't you think?

Yes, I am but there's a good reason for it. I'm currently on holiday so I have a TON of free time to write. In addition I go back to school on Monday, which may mean updates will become slower. So as compensation, I'm writing as much as I can right now.

With that said, enjoy the chapter!

To be fair to Spike man, Twilight was kind of a  bitch screwing him over with all the work in the library. At least Spike is taking care of Twi and doing right by her. I'm not sure I can say the same about the Twilight you described.

Excellent chapter. DJ-PON3 IN THE HOUSE!

: Why didn't you tell me about your problems Spike?!

: Let's see, um... you are never around to help me with anything. You always stack me with work, whilst you enjoy your time with friends. I'm always alone, and you don't care! Did I miss anything?

"cries in guilt"

I can't help but feel, this is going to end badly...

I get the feeling I'm gonna be crying alot eventually.

For some reason, I hear theme music playing.

This is really great.  I kind of feel bad for Spike, but he did mess up.

the only way i can describe this is, is "well looks like shit just hit the fan for poor spike"

Bawww. I has a sad.

Also, it'll be really interesting if Spike ever has to reveal to Filly Twilight about their mutual dreams.

Keep up the good work.

>>646505646505 Well, of course there are quite a few Spike-centric stories out there (I should know, I wrote one of them ). But I don't believe I've seen this particular premise before, and it's shaping up very nicely indeed. Keep up the good work.

Oh Celestia, that cover art. I think I'm gonna have nightmares.

Fun read so far, but this line caught my attention:  "Although he couldn’t ignore how stupid he had acted. Twilight had always loved and he just...he just had a slip up. The memories had helped him deal with his own mistakes and improved his mood considerably."   I hope you aren't going to pass off spikes feelings of being ignored as the story progresses.  As written it seemed like he had legitimate reasons to feel disillusioned, Twilight had taken him and his contribution for granted.  To me it looked like they were both to blame for the current state of affairs;  Twilight for not appreciating him and Spike for not speaking up when he felt unhappy.  Or is this just a conclusion he came to and Twilight still needs to learn her lesson in adult form?

Curse you Spike!

Art cover... its sooooooooooooooooooooo awesome

Spike forgets about Twilight really easily in this chapter, considering how close he usually is with her. Also, if he's smart enough to guess that this didn't just happen and things have now always been this way, I'm pretty disappointed in the way he treats this world's Twilight Sparkle. It's not as though she's ever done anything of the sort to him.

>>713070713070 You mean, apart from the canonically established fact that she didn't bother to invite her (formerly?) closest friend and quasi-brother to her birthday party? Sorry, but for discerning (read: over-analyzing) eyes, there are quite a few signs of Twilight taking Spike for granted. There are of course signs pointing in the other direction as well (watch her behaviour in "Secret of My Excess" or "Dragon Quest"), but if you look for it, the negative side is there.

As an anxiety sufferer, the passage describing Twilight's journey to Sugar Cube Corner really resonated with me. Jumping at the sight of others? Embarrassed over imagined missteps? Fearing that anyone you see might reprimand you for something you hadn't even noticed doing? Forcing yourself onward through something horribly uncomfortable? As we say on the Internet: I know that feel, pony.

She seemed to be the same in this world, apart from being a filly of course.

He realizes that he's in Twilight's place in the past, but never considers what it's like for her to be in his?

Spike, you're a moron.

“No, do you know why?” Twilight shook her head softly in response. “Because you’re my friend.” The words that Rarity had said to him earlier seemed perfect for this occasion, “Always and forever.”

He learns fast, though! Good on you, buddy.

Finally, some hope for the future of this fic... but it doesn't sound like it'll be easy to make things right. Which is good, of course- makes things more interesting.