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Mariacheat-Brony


Hey there, Mariacheat-Brony here, Belgian Brony writer. Favorite Ponies : Vinyl Scratch & Applejack \OCTASCRATCH FOR THE WIN/

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This story is a sequel to Tales of Apple Scratch: The Lieutenant Cloud Kicker


The news reached every outpost of the Royal Guard of Equestria: the Princesses finally started gathering the newest generation of their famous Council of Harmony. Now every unit of the Royal Guard must sent their representatives to swear their allegiance to the Princesses' new Council member. Even the small garnison of Ponyville must sent a delegation to Canterlot, composed of the garnison's leading officer and her three newest recruits, among them the recently-promoted Cloud Kicker who has a whole different reason to meet and swear her allegiance to the new Councilor.

Alternative ending/sequel of the story Tales of Apple Scratch : the Lieutenant Cloud Kicker
As it replaces the epilogue of said story, it's advised to read the prequel first, but it should be able to be readable on its own (at least I hope it is).

Written for Chengar Qordath's Cloud Kicker shipfic event (though I'm hope I'm not breaking the rules of it by inadvertently promoting the prequel.... Oh, well, at least I had fun writing it :p )

Apple Scratch Saga:
1: Apple Scratch toward the world
2: A summer at the farm
3: Onward to the Equestria games
Bonus/World Building : Tales of Apple Scratch

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Comments ( 21 )

Never change Cloude Kicker, never change

Ah, good old Cloud Kicker. She might be acting a bit more respectable, but she's still ... well, herself.

Love the cover art you've chosen. I know it's based off the "Winning Pony" series and that you based that personality into your own CK, but still, it fits pretty well.

Poor CK is going to have problems when she gets to the ceremony and finds out that not only did Sunset not win, but she has disappeared too.:applecry:

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In all honesty, I'm quite surprised how well you take people mirroring your version of Cloud Kicker. Would have assumed you'd be a bit more "Hey, that's my idea"-ish :derpytongue2:

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Well, go ahead, why don't you just say that I have no original idea of my own regarding CK's characterization?:derpytongue2:

You'd be very VERY close to the truth if you do, but that's not the point!

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Well, they do say that imitation is the sincerest form of flattery...

More seriously, every author brings something unique to their take on Cloud, even if they're still writing my version of her. After all, this Cloud has a different background, life experiences, and family situation compared to my Winning Pony.

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That's true... And yeah, imitation is considered the sincerest form of flattery and praise. :twilightsmile:

I can't help it...but I ship cloudXSunset soooo much!!!!!:moustache:

Yes! I was really hoping that Cloud would be able to find Sunset.

One thing that's been bugging me, she keeps getting called an officer, even though she's an NCO. In fact an SFC is just 2 ranks bellow 1Sgt, and the second is a lateral promotion, (its like getting promoted from Specialist to Corporal, your'e still and E4 and get paid the same, its just know you have some authority. And while I admit I dont know how Infantry E-7s (SFC) are placed, I know for mechanics they're considered a Company Motor Sargent (Its like a lower ranking 1Sgt that's only in charge of the motorpool) So in Truth she should actually have a lot of Authority and only really answers to the 1Sgt and Co. Not saaying it needs to change right now or in this story but just for future reference. Also if your interested here's a comand structure based of my unit's. Officers: Co(Cpt)-Xo(1stLt)-Platoon Leaders( 2dLt's)-Platoons / Enlisted 1Sgt-Platoon Sgt's(SSgt)-Squad Leaders(Sgt)-Team leaders(Cpl) (or in HQ's case Section leaders which can be Sgt's or Cpl's) -E4(SPC) and bellow. Now granted it gets a bit more complex higher up the chain but this is the simplified version of it. And you could also use this to make you're own take on a chain of command but really this was just for my OCD

Really Sunset? Throwing a bunch of snakes into the bathroom of a ophidiophob? I know you're upset, but that's low.

And Cloud, if Twilight ever finds out you were there, and helped her tormentor escape, it will so bite you in the plot.

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That comes from me not knowing much of military ranks and having simplified it a lot for the sake of simplicity.

But I'll try to make it more accurate in the main saga.

6690497 I figured something like that was the case. I know at times it can be a bit confusing figuring out how rank structure works.

velvet here reveals herself to be the worst kind of teacher.

if twilight velvet attempts to cause trouble for sunset, have someone punch her in the face, repeatedly.

Ah, Velvet, good to see that you're still a knee-jerk nag ...

“No, you’re shouting at me, and we’re in a library,” Cloud reminded playfully, prompting Twilight into instantly covering her mouth with both hands as she realized where they were.

“...Still, you could have paid attention to where you were going,” Twilight whispered in a reproachful tone. “Some of those books are decades-old originals!”

“Well, If they’re so important why loading such large amount of them up in the hands of a child?” Cloud asked as she noticed the large stack of books in Twilight’s magic. “I don’t think he can see right before him when he’s carrying them…”

“Uh?” Twilight blinked in confusion before glancing between the stack of floating books and Spike. “Oh…” She gulped sheepishly when the stack was indeed as high as the youth’s upper body.

“That being said, why didn’t you use one of the carts I saw by the reception?” Cloud asked Spike.

“Well, we’re on the third floor,” Spike replied slowly.

“So?”

“So, how do you expect him to pull a cart up three flights of stairs?” Twilight asked in a defensive whisper.

Cloud simply raised her right eyebrow high up her forehead before dully pointing behind Twilight’s back. The young boy and the purple-haired Titanian looked at where she was pointing, seeing the stack of floating books behind them. Spike blinked in total shock before his palm met his forehead in a loud slapping noise while Twilight looked blankly at her levitating reservoirs of knowledge.

Good point Cloud Kicker.

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