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Rainbow Dash has finally been accepted into the Wonderbolts. But something's amiss... perhaps it is the fact that the Wonderbolts are falling from fame, or perhaps it's something deeper that is causing them to act so strange.

What isn't Spitfire telling her?

And how is Fluttershy taking this?

A DashFire fic, with a bit of FlutterDash. Art (with permission) By: JENIAC

First Published
26th May 2012
Last Modified
22nd Jun 2012
#1 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

>>649126 No worries :pinkiehappy: Only 'cuz we're friends :trixieshiftright:

Thanks for the words :twilightsmile:

#3 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

3rd motha fuckers

#4 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

well, I'm intrigued as to what the story line will lead to. So far well write, following the character profiles well. I've got it on my watch list to follow the progress. Good luck, can't wait for more.

#5 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

[Looking for an editor for this piece. I need someone who's good with grammar and spelling. I just need one. Of course, I almost always listen to the comments, so your thoughts are highly welcomed. Thanks.]

I VOLUNTEER AS TRIBUTE!:pinkiehappy:

#6 · 134w, 2d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

Well, I think you have a fairly unique and interesting start here, and I look forward to seeing where it goes.  Even if the following phrase never leaves my head when reading this story:  "What could possibly go wrong?" :moustache:

#7 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

Dashie saves the Wonderbolts... this is what I expected to happen, really. :rainbowlaugh:

I'm afraid to read it until you finish it, though. :fluttercry:

#8 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

>>650456 You are just so hardcore :trollestia:

>>650618 Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

>>650648 Actually someone already volunteered. Thank you though, I appreciate it :twilightsmile:

>>650703 I was aiming for unique. :yay: Thanks!

>>652115 So you haven't read it? :trixieshiftright: Hah, if you did I think you'd notice that your comment's a bit off course :derpytongue2:

#9 · 133w, 5d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

I feel as if this can only end in tears.

'Course I was reading the latest of "Tales of Harmony" and the mood wasn't able to switch (probably because the seem to share the ominous feeling)

Can't wait to see where this goes.

#10 · 133w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

>>650456 Do I ever escape you?

And I shall message feedback as requested!

#11 · 133w, 2d ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

>mentions that Rainbow saved their lives

>decides to crush her dreams to save their own

:rainbowderp:

This is where I'd put the "scumbag hat" if I had one handy.

#12 · 132w, 15h ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

>>683015 Flash poll!

What are you feelings on the Wonderbolts?

#13 · 132w, 7h ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

Spitfire doesn't give a buck who she steps on to accomplish her dreams. I hope she changes by the end of this story. Excellent start keep them coming. :twilightsmile:

#14 · 132w, 7h ago · · · Cloud 1 ·

Awesome, just awesome. Can't wait for more!:pinkiehappy:

#15 · 132w, 7h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

Can someone explain to me what's going on with the rating on EqD :unsuresweetie:

#16 · 132w, 7h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

permission to squee in your prescence, your royal awesomeness? :rainbowkiss:

#17 · 132w, 7h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

What day is it? Noon.   Wait what? Other than you confused me to hell with that, nice chapter :pinkiehappy:

#18 · 132w, 7h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

I think I got the joke with the chapter names 7 chapters early.

Very clever! :twilightsmile:

#19 · 132w, 6h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

Gonna read this solely for the FlutterDash tag

#20 · 132w, 6h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

So cloud 9 will either be the happy ending, or the thing that happens right before Dash hears the words "Your fired.". Either way it should be fun.

#21 · 132w, 6h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

More than likely haters on the dashabuse setup. people do as they do. other than that probably star bombing trolls.  sure its a little dark and set up for disaster but its different and i love different. although you may want to reread through this chapter again towards the end i saw a few

spail fells

#22 · 132w, 4h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

I think my heart skipped a beat when I saw there was a new chapter. :rainbowlaugh: *bro hoof*

#23 · 132w, 3h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

i feel so bad for Dashie right now :raritydespair: but can't wait to read more :rainbowwild:

#24 · 132w, 1h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

This looks promising. I am going to put this in my favorites (as opposed to read-it-later), becuase this looks really good

#25 · 132w, 1h ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

cant wait for more  seriously ... this is one of the best fics ive read mainly because the wonderbolts are being mean which is totally not them

#27 · 132w, 9m ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

YOU ! YOUR THE ONE WHO WROTE DIARY OF MORNING AND DUSK!!!!!!!!!!  i really like your stories... your what i hope to be when i write fic... thank you kind sir or madam for being one of my heros

#28 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

I can't say that I like seeing the Wonderbolts, or Spitfire for that matter, do something like this to Rainbow Dash.  However, it sounds like they hate what they are forced to do.  And if this story is going where I think it is, things are going to get interesting when Spitfire has to destroy the dreams of the mare she loves.  I eagerly await more.

#29 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>731073

When you said something was up with the rating I thought that you were getting trolled like Mindblower, but then I went and looked at your comments on EqD, and you're getting star-bombed? Maybe you're getting some overflow from this, or maybe it is just because it's shipping like the other comments said. I understand that mindlessly rating stuff without giving it due process is bad, but I guess getting up-voted is better than getting down-voted, and so far your fic is completely deserving of it anyway :pinkiesmile:

#30 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>733791

Shipping always, ALWAYS gets star-bombed.  No one cares.  All that matters is that rating up top here and if people say they enjoyed it.

And speaking for myself, so far I do.  Looking forward to seeing how awful this can get, and then how good it can resolve.  If it resolves...

God, let it resolve...

#31 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>734078

Yeah, but it's still annoying, especially since there hasn't even been any shipping yet :ajbemused:

But I get what your saying, and I agree.

Random anonymous ratings don't change my opinion of the story, and my opinion is that it's good :ajsmug:

#32 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>731073

Haters gonna hate. You laugh cuz they fake. They mad cuz you do somethin' that they cain't.

Seriously though. Like half the fandom has a stick up its collective plothole for Dash, so since the plan is to treat her poorly and use her to get what they want, they immediately downvote. Then throw in shipping, more downvotes.

Childish, really. Ignore it, keep writing. Your target audience is eating this up. Dashfire OTP, woot.

#33 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>731695 Yeah! *Bro Hoof*

>>731952 Same here :raritydespair: Thanks!

>>733589 Thank. You. That is exactly the feeling I've been trying to get across to people, and I can't describe how good it feels to know that I've accomplished it. :pinkiehappy:

#34 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>733791 I quite possibly am. I despise people that do this :pinkiecrazy: Thanks though! :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>733224 Best. Comment. I've ever received. Thank you so much for that! :pinkiehappy:

#36 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

Excellent writing. I feel like I'll either really like this story or eventually want to destroy you =D hopefully dash will show the wonderbolts that she is exactly what they need by the end. Honestly, why would they immediately assume that she wouldn't work out on the team? I feel like there must be some reason, as they know that she's an excellent flyer. Also, rather shortsighted to come up with a plan that hinges on betraying the ELEMENT of LOYALTY. Visions of psychodash sonic rainnuking their headquarters soar through my mind :rainbowlaugh:

Anyway, although I've been lurking on FiM for quite a while here, I actually felt compelled to make an account so I could comment on your work. You have unleashed a terrible force on the unsuspecting citizens of FiM :scootangel:

Now I just need to figure out all these fancy doohickeys like watch lists and ratings. I feel I need to do my part to help you recover from these pesky starbombers :ajbemused:

#37 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

I like the slow story development, you take a lot of time in making the characters seem real. You're dialog flows smoothly and seems realistic. :twilightsmile: Anyhow.... Oh noes! Spitfire don't admit you like her, you'll get attached and then how will you "put her down?" :twilightoops:

#38 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

Hmmmmm I like it, a lot. Can't wait for the next chapter 5/5 :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#39 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>735699

Old Yeller says hi

#40 · 131w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

Okay, some good stuff so far, but I'm still confused. Why does Spitfire not want to keep Dash on the team? They've given several reasons why recruiting her would be good for them, but no reasons why it would be bad. Why exactly do they not want her?

#42 · 130w, 6d ago · · · Cloud 2 ·

>>738188 I'll explain later down the line :pinkiesmile:

#43 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

Some people don't come down this far, so I wanted to add that snippet in the story itself. Sorry for any detraction.

For those of you who have come down this far and intend to leave a nice savory comment for my eyes to feast upon (Please?) I just want to say that there may be minor rewrites, but the story will ultimately stay the same. Just narration fixes and the like.

Thanks for reading! :rainbowwild:

#44 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

Hey you shouldnt doubt yourself so much. it flowed really well and there were not any blatant glareing erroes. i am really enjoying this story and for one glad to see an update. keep up the good work! also if your other story is anything like this il enjoy the hay out of it

#45 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

Hey don't be an quick to doubt your writing skills, that was still a great chapter!  Same as cory486 I thought the story flowed nicely and there weren't any major errors.  All I can say is that this chapter was great, and I can't wait for the next one to be released.  You have earned another track and like.

Cheers,

jangledorf

#46 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

I noticed "chronically" when I think you meant "chronology".  Other than that, though, yeah, pretty tight.

Also, LunaTavia? :rainbowhuh: Not sure if want.

#47 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

I'm really happy to see another Firedash story.  There aren't too many of them, and I find them to be one of the better Rainbow Dash pairings.  This one in particular is good because it goes a lot more into how the Wonderbolts function.  It's something that usually isn't gone into detail.  keep up the good work!

#48 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

Well, here I am, having read all three chapters.

I'm severely interested in where this is going to go, especially with the 'Bolts obvious reluctance.

#49 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

Looking to Fluttershy,she took in a deep breath and smiled. "You still have this thing?"

The mare turned around to see the object in question. As soon as her pink eyes…

Fluttershy has teal eyes, only real mistake i saw. I dont like the wonderbolts anymore

#50 · 130w, 3d ago · · · Cloud 3 ·

Loved the chapter, even though its tough to see the bolts self-destructing. Keep em coming please. :twilightsmile:

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