With a magic exam coming up, Twilight has been staying up way too late and stressing herself too much. As a result, she starts casting spells in her sleep, causing all sorts of chaos. Spike, tired of being turned into random items and worried about his friend, tries to do something to help. Unfortunately, his attempts to help Twilight may end up causing more harm than good.
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Well, that was fun to write. Though I did have a spot of trouble copying it from the word processor to the web site. Had to redo the indentation and all the line spacing. Urgh.
Oh, and before anybody says anything, no, I do not support or encourage people secretly drugging their friends or anybody else, regardless of intention.
Anyway, feel free to leave a comment and let me know what you thought! Thanks for reading!
Well, this is one like I'm not going to regret giving.
Despite the occasional spelling mistake, which is to be expected, this was a rather enjoyable story. The humour was funny, the characters were in character and the plot was well written and show worthy (well, besides the drugs, I'm not sure on Hasbro's stance on those.). Good job regardless. Keep up the good work.
One thumbs up
Nazkan
This was rather well written, and I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the good work!
Awesome story! Loved reading it and could tell you enjoyed writing it. It had awesome humor and seemed to play out sort of like an episode. Can't wait to see more from you
648619
What this guy said.
Love the flow of the story. The humor may need tweaking in some parts because I kind of felt rushed at some instances. But all in all it is awesome!
This was exactly as good as the description promised.
It's really seldom to read an episode-fitting fic. and thumbs up from me too.
LOVED IT! Look out for some spelling errors though. I saw the word 'main" instead of "mane."
I would've called it sleep-casting... Now to read it.
"Why, you should probably be the one testing people…”
Shouldn't that be ponies instead? Other than that and a couple of spelling mistakes, this is a pretty good story. Although, instead of Spike giving her sleeping pills, perhaps he could have given her a sleeping potion that he got from Zecora.
Oh wow! I had no idea this story would get so much attention!
Thank you all so much for the good reviews and feedback!
I'm glad to know (almost) all of you enjoyed it. I seriously didn't expect to be getting so much feedback, especially so much positive feedback. This really is a nice surprise...
648610 Yeah, Hasbro probably wouldn't approve of Spike's strategic medicine. Though, they did make that one joke about the punch being "Spiked" in one episode.
648764 That's good... right?
648878 Yeah, I've read through it at least twice, but still missed a few errors. Thankfully, I think I've caught almost all of them now. Though I still need to find this mane/main mix up you speak of...
648950 Yes, but Sleep-Spelling has alliteration, whereas Sleep-Casting does not. I was tempted to title it that instead, though. And who knows, I may go back and change the name later on anyway...
648951 Hah! You're too late, I already fixed that one!
And yes, Spike could have gotten a sleeping potion from Zecora, but that seemed just as questionable and underhanded as the sleeping pills, if not more-so. I considered several options, actually, and each one had its glaring moral or plot flaws. Finally just had to go with the lesser evil, really... 
Great story! I really enjoyed it :D! A bit too simple, though.
Hey, nobrony's perfect. I started out VERY bad , but I slowly got better.
Loved the story. You kept with the spirit of the show very well. I could see this as an episode in the show easily.
SPOILER ALERT!!!
Fluttershy had personally ensured he had the proper dosage,
-Quite a feat given that she had to guess how big a sip Twilight was going to take.
or I’ve had coffee,
-Good one...
You’re more than welcome to attend,”
-I THINK you need to replace this comma with a period.
Everything had been arranged and organized perfectly. No items or furniture seemed out of place. What had everyone’s attention was the ceiling.
From wall to wall, a beautiful mural had somehow materialized across the ceiling. It portrayed a variety of scenes – Princess Celestia gloriously reigning on her throne, Twilight smiling while studying, her and her friends laughing and smiling after the Grand Galloping Gala, and images from some of their greatest adventures and lessons.
-Did she just get lucky, or did she subconsciously "tidy up" because she heard the examiner? I don't think he was talking that loudly, but I don't know if a stimulus has to be major to influence a dream.
And you have shown that you have more talent and ability than some of our graduate students!
-Undergrads don't usually get given independent study. I guess Celestia could be bending things that far, especially since she probably was pretty self-directed regardless of what level she was working at and to say that Celestia's time is valuable would be a gross understatement.
Pinkie promptly began to tell her everything that had happened, babbling at the speed of Pinkie.
-Because there is no other adequate term than "the speed of Pinkie"... I approve!
Apparently she had recognized that since it was an illusion spell, it would eventually fade sooner or later.
-Oh, good idea... I hope she is a good enough photographer to do it justice. I suppose since pictures preserve happy memories, and she is all about "happy" that she might be very good at it.
“I suppose, if I deprived myself of sleep for a few-“
-So she can learn other unicorn's spells and follow directions from a book really well, but she can't recreate something just by studying it until it fades? I suppose the artistry might be something where her conscious mind would tend to get in the way.
648610
(well, besides the drugs, I'm not sure on Hasbro's stance on those.).
Well, between the Love Poison and the (Faux) Cutie-Pox Potion I think we can safely say that there is a strong message against children messing around with medications. OTOH (On The Other Hoof) we have the memory spell from Return of Harmony Part 2, Twilight puppeting Fluttershy in "Green isn't Your Color", and Cadence stealthy compressing a 30 minute marriage counseling session into one spell without prior consent. On the third hoof we have the parasprites being reprogrammed into eating buildings, clothing, etc and the Want It, Need It spell.
I think the message I am getting at the deeper level is "be careful, and leave the serious meds to the professionals, but professionals have to be able to override consent when the patient appears to be off their rocker". So high on the "professionals only" and low on the "informed consent".
Lol. Just Lol. Sleep-casting Twilight, however dangerous she may be while Sleep-casting, is best Twilight.
649061 The simplicity or complexity of a literary work should not be seen as a reflection of the author's artistic prowess...
Plus, I didn't want to do anything complex this time around. It is, after all, intended to be just a silly little one shot. I save my more intricate ideas for larger works...
649162 ...
*cracks knuckles*
Let us dance.
"-Quite a feat given that she had to guess how big a sip Twilight was going to take."
(Citation: Feeling Pinkie Keen.)
Comedic effect > science.
-Good one...
Thanks!
-I THINK you need to replace this comma with a period.
Sorry, but no. The comma is grammatically correct in that situation.
-Did she just get lucky, or did she subconsciously "tidy up" because she heard the examiner?
Both. She subconsciously tidied up because she naturally wants her library to be organized, and she just happened to get lucky. The whole "clean everything and ART" was the culmination of her sleep-spelling and her subconscious desire to excel and accomplish, heightened exponentially by her concern over the nigh-approaching test.
-Undergrads don't usually get given independent study. I guess Celestia could be bending things that far, especially since she probably was pretty self-directed regardless of what level she was working at and to say that Celestia's time is valuable would be a gross understatement.
Actually, I knew several people in my department (English Lit) who undertook independent studies. But I was not using that as an actual point of reference. For one thing, the college/teaching system in Equestria is probably at least a little different from ours, so there's wiggle room. Plus, you could probably say Twilight is already doing an independent study, what with the "magic of friendship" assignment. But to clarify, I wasn't saying Twilight is actually a grad student or anything along those lines, just that she showed a level of ability thereabout.
-Because there is no other adequate term than "the speed of Pinkie"... I approve!
Again, thank you.
-Oh, good idea... I hope she is a good enough photographer to do it justice. I suppose since pictures preserve happy memories, and she is all about "happy" that she might be very good at it.
Yet again, thanks. And yes, Pinkie can probably ensure that the mural is preserved, at least in the medium of photography. Seriously, she's Pinkie. She can typically do whatever the plot demands, and with adequate skill.
-So she can learn other unicorn's spells and follow directions from a book really well, but she can't recreate something just by studying it until it fades? I suppose the artistry might be something where her conscious mind would tend to get in the way.
Art is not her (conscious) field of expertise. I intended to imply that she would not be able to replicate the work, or anything similar, under typical circumstances. It was, in essence, a creation of her mind's eye and extreme sleep deprivation. So, yeah, her lucid mind would have trouble processing and replicating. Plus, you could probably argue she uses the side of the brain which isn't artsy, as magic probably falls in line with facts and logic and stuff, and that's the opposite side of the brain than art and creativity.
649199 Actually, if you read my original comment at the top, I outright stated that drugging your friends (or anyone, really) without their knowledge is bad.
Also, thanks for your comments and in-depth analysis. Its very nice to see somebody actually giving my stories proper literary analysis and scrutiny. It shows that people care enough to dissect it, and it keeps me on my toes!
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I got that you don't consider her a grad student. Was just saying that there might be some evidence that she IS, but I ended up the thought by saying it could be argued either way.
As for the ability to re-create, I think we are in agreement. Could probably do the type of illusion spell after studying the results, but not the level of quality of the work artistically.
649422
...just not while awake.
Nice.
I think my favorite line was ,“No, I’m Nightmare Moon, here to begin my reign of tyranny and naughtiness. I just turned myself into a tomato so nobody would suspect.”
649325 your intentions were crystal clear from the very beginning of the fanfiction...I just wanted to see how you would react to mild critisism
This is a cute piece with some good character work. The biggest red-flag for improvement I can see is the opening, which spends a full four paragraphs spelling out things that are either already covered in the existing text or could easily have been woven into the existing text without any serious restructuring. In doing this, you squander the excellent comedy opening of starting straight out with Spike's first line without prologue or preamble.
You seem to be a good writer; don't be afraid to open with a strong image or dialogue-fragment that's not immediately explained, and have faith that your audience will stick with you long enough that the picture will become clear.
Woah. Still getting lots of hits and favorites. Its so nice to see people really liking and enjoying my work. Thank you all so much!
Now if only my other story got this much attention...
649422 I lol'd.
650995 Thank you for your kind words and legitimate criticism. You make a pretty good point, and I will do my best to remember it in the future.
That was fun!
Also, those sleeping pills must have been magical to knock her out that fast.
That was really good and made me laugh for a solid ten minutes.
This story made me laugh and you built up the anticipation well. Have a "like."
Very cute. the ending was a bit galling however, It still came across that Spike and Fluttershy were the ones in the wrong when I'd say it's Twilight who was the one in the wrong. By depriving herself of sleep she had become a genuine danger to herself and others, but seems to have gotten off scot free on it.
1046673 Well, I can't exactly paint them in a favorable light for drugging their friend. I mean, wouldn't you feel bad if you tricked your friend like that?
wow a civil pony debate..
Ok maybe spike and Fluttershy were in the wrong.for knocking her out (MAYBE)
.. but so was twilight I mean if you are sleep zapping your assistant then MAYBE you have a problem 
other than that wow a great story
the plot is like DOH I should have thought of that
hahaha. I liked this story. The ending was very...how can i describe it..well that one cartoon last min fix plot thing...ehh close enough to what i was thinking.
badass
It probably had something to do with the massive amounts of caffeine already in her, it can make other drugs more potent.
This really would fit perfectly as a season 1 or 2 episode. I loved the bit about Twilight correcting Spike about the tomato, and he was like "Not important!"
Debatable
So.......Spike, um......"spiked" her drink, eh?
Get it? Spiked? And he's Spike.....?
.......yeah, ok, bad joke.......
ANYWAAAAYY......loved the story! Absolutely hilarious!! And I loved this part:
That was hilarious!!!!!
And yeah, tomatoes are a fruit.....not a veggie. Twilight is correct on that point.