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  • E Her Weight in Affection

    While adapting to life after being banished from Equestria, Chrysalis learns that not everyone shuns her for her villainy.
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  • 2w, 4d
    Anywhere but Here Chapter 10 / Theme Compilation

    Aaaaa sorry for the delay

    Chapter 10 - Unsolicited Interview

    Music is super important to me. I write with music playing, I imagine scenes set to specific songs, and I have songs picked out for pretty much every character I write. Here's a bunch of them!

    Title Theme

    Main Characters

    Double Tap

    Paharita

    Leaf Marine

    unlocked in second arc

    unlocked in third arc

    unlocked in fourth arc

    Supporting Characters

    Glade Skimmer

    Cobra Juicy

    Palace Caravan

    Steppin' Razor

    Pestilence(I have to upload this one myself I guess?)

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  • 10w, 6d
    Anywhere but Here Chapter 9 / Theme Compilation

    Currently about 1/4th through chapter 10, making steady progress. Writing is hard tho :A

    Chapter 9 - Job Hunting

    Music is super important to me. I write with music playing, I imagine scenes set to specific songs, and I have songs picked out for pretty much every character I write. Here's a bunch of them!

    This is basically the title theme.

    A grizzled unicorn and a perky griffon sitting at the counter in a smoky bar.

    Main Characters

    Double Tap

    Paharita

    Leaf Marine

    unlocked in second arc

    unlocked in third arc

    unlocked in fourth arc

    Supporting Characters

    Glade Skimmer

    Cobra Juicy

    Palace Caravan

    Steppin' Razor

    Pestilence(I have to upload this one myself I guess?)

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  • 15w, 23h
    ',:3c

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  • 15w, 4d
    Stonershy's Big Ol' Bronycon 2014 Adventure - Day 3 & 4

    Saturday

    Stayed up 24 hours straight, partied, lived up to my namesake

    So I woke up really early on this particular day. Probably like, 11 or 12, maybe closer to 1, not really sure. Still, way earlier than I would normally, but that's okay I guess because I slept through the night like a moron. I got dressed, and Paris and I headed down to the vendor hall to pick up my commissions. Whoever was working the Arts and Farts table, jesus christ you guys are awesome. I love these drawings so much :3c So much that I commissioned them for two more sketches, and then Paris paid for some commissions of his own. And then we walked the earth, buying prints from whoever caught our fancy. We also hit up Chibi Jen Hen's table so that I could buy some stuff for my girlfriend, and also to hang out with Jen's really cool sister Steph who we had bumped into the day before. This is also where we met Key Light, a friend of Steph's, who will become important later. I think at some point, Full Stop or Peggly wanted to hook up and grab some food, so we returned to Quills and Sofas.

    While we were there, I started talking Anywhere but Here with Peggly and Paris, and that's when really, really cool conceptual shit started to happen. With their help, and Full Stop's occasional suggestions, we ended up with some amazing concept art for things that will show up much, much later in AbH. During this stretch of time, someone threw a pencil into a balloon and startled everyone. Bad vibes all around.

    This reminded us that we had yet to eat, however, so we decided to return to the Diamond Tavern, site of the previously mentioned Best Eggs Benedict in the World. It's pricey, but let me tell you; worth every goddamn penny. An interesting thing happened while we were there, also. We were a table of Bronies, and next to us was a table of Orioles fans, and next to them was a table PIKE brothers. Parties from all three major events of that weekend were literally lined up inside that restaurant for a brief moment of time. I couldn't make this shit up if I tried. Anyway, the food was absolutely immaculate, and I ate every last bite, as did Paris, Peggly, and Full Stop. After that amazing meal, we got up and moved back through the hotel. To our amazement, someone (potentially of Hindu faith) was having a wedding in the Hilton, which only added to the already dreamlike cross section of people already occupying the space; people in exotic, elaborate, and flowing formal wear, next to people wearing orange sports jerseys and jeans, next to people wearing button up polo shirts and shorts, next to people wearing shirts with pastel ponies, or in full cosplay.

    It is truly a beautiful time to be alive.

    So at this point, we returned to Quills and Sofas and talked with Sleepless Brony and Zyrian some more, while Paris continued to produce amazing concept art and Peggly played TSSSF. Not totally sure what Full Stop was up to at that point. I think drawing and giving us ideas for AbH concept art? Anyway, suddenly I realize I HAVEN'T HEARD FROM RED RIBBON. Pants are shat. I send her a text and we start wandering around when she gives us her location. After finding "the idiot wearing the red ears and horn" near Stomp Space, we hung out for a little while. It is explained that Ribbon is leaving Sunday and that they're about to go see Guardians, but that she wants to hang out when the movie ends. Several of my friends want to meet and hang out with her. I suggest watching Food Fight, and everyone loves the idea. My room would be ideal for this, but people need to sleep, so I do my thing and start networking.

    -Stonershy's Campaign to Screen Food Fight-

    You might think that is an exaggeration, but getting this shit to line up was a lot more difficult than I thought it would be. That's probably because I had never seen Food Fight before. My first stop was Quills and Sofas, where I asked Present Perfect who I would have to talk to to get a showing in the cinema room. He wasn't sure, but he told me they were taking suggestions for films, and that was all I needed to hear. They were playing some kind of fandom made movie when I arrived, and then I noticed that there was some kind of administrative room across the hall. This is where I made the mistake of asking someone without a sense of humor if I could screen Food Fight. I was show down immediately. I guess that's understandable, but still, it wouldn't have been until midnight when most of the con goers would be gone anyway. Whateves.

    So, with that idea in the toilet, I returned to Q&S to try my luck elsewhere. I asked a few other people and was immediately shot down because I guess Food Fight is just that awful (and it really is, I found out hahaha). But then, I came to Alexstrazsa. He was hesitant, and then I mentioned that this was essentially for Red Ribbon, and that was all he needed to hear. Vicodin was across from us, and it was at this point that I learned about My Little Porny, and more importantly, that Vicodin had helped fund it. Incredible. Even more importantly, they were going to show it in the same room that I was asking to use for Food Fight. I followed Alex up to his room to make completely sure he was okay with doing a showing there, and when I had asked him for his consent for the twentieth time, I returned to meed with my party. It was at this point that I discovered that running off to try and get this little event to work had inadvertently ruined Paris's chance to get into a drawing panel. Not a good feel :/  

    After apologizing profusely, we made our way to the TSSSF panel.

    Once at the TSSSF panel, I TF'd into Pinkie Pie and started advertising the SHIT out of TSSSF in an effort to help Allie Alteration. "Do you know what this panel is about? You don't?! Well, it's a card game! Don't know how to play? Hey, that's okay! Step right on in and learn!" I think I handed out thirty business cards in the span of minutes. At some point, my friend Sparkle Overflow appeared, and we started making plans for Pizza and Booze on Sunday. There was a group shot of players from Neighvada Nights at some point and just fucking guess which one is me. Some additional dumb stuff happened that I apologized for, and then we hung out in Q&S while waiting for Red Ribbon to get back to us.

    That last part took a really, really long time. Full Stop cashed out for the night, leaving Paris, Peggly and myself to wonder what the appropriate course of action would be. Just when we were fearing that she had bailed, I get a text that her phone had died, and that she still wanted to hang out. THIS IS THE PART WHERE PEGGLY-SUS SAVES THE DAY. His dad was hanging out somewhere else for the night, and he said that Peggly could have friends up in their suite. So, we set out with plans to watch a garbage film with cool people.

    As we rounded the corner, we encountered Key Light being accosted by some manner of Brony. While said brony was distracted, Key Light mouthed "help me" and we promptly rescued him from certain frustration. We informed him of our plans, and to our delight, he joined the party. The five of us made our way across the convention center and ventured out into the rainy Baltimore night to reach Peggly's hotel. It was during this trip that I realized what a cool dude Key Light is, and he was fantastic traveling company. He also informed us that, as "a brown person" he would ward off any potential trouble, which I greatly appreciated. Once we got there, Alex and Baron were informed of the change of plans, and despite it being a long walk, the both of them agreed that they wanted to get in on it.

    Paris and Peggly stayed at the hotel to wait for Ribbon and her crew, while Key Light and I wandered back to the con to escort Baron and Alex to the room. We discussed how my hidden ethnicity was both a blessing and a curse, and how it's bullshit that a brown gay man has to deal with adversity in 2014. Alex and Baron were acquired, and we returned to Peggly's room. Let me pause for a moment to make a note about Peggly's hotel. It looked like shit on the outside, and on the inside, but his ROOM was AMAZING. Anyway, we got my laptop set up, Red Ribbon and her posse appeared. As was made evident not long after their arrival, this was apparently and inadvertently a fat pony meetup. There was some member of Ribbon's party that Paris was thrilled to meet in person, which was equally cool. Even though the TV would not play sound and we had to listen through my shitty laptop speakers, we soon got the full Food Fight experience bowel-cancer.

    HOW DID THIS FILM COST 10 MILLION TO MAKE.

    Really, the only good thing about it was Christopher Lloyd. And his parts, while magnificent, were far too brief. With that hilariously nauseating event under our collective belts, we set out, now with a round Hawaiian in our party. There was some problem with his room, but we couldn't let him stay with us, so we escorted him back to the con and proceeded back to our room. Everyone was exhausted, myself included, and this would have been the end of the day for me, but I heard partying at the end of the hall. This is when I decided to check up on The Drunk of Bronycon Future.

    For the sake of keeping these folks out of trouble, I won't name names, but not long after stopping in to visit we departed to blaze. Apparently they had been caught by security the day before, but the security guard just joined them and gave them advice on a better place to smoke (amazing hahaha). As it turns out, the spot the guard suggested is the spot I had smoked in last year, which I guess means it's THE SPOT for Bronycon. I very vaguely recall what was discussed. I know I told them the Bronycon Carol at the very least. Once we had reached the stratosphere, we made our way to my hotel so that they could call a cab. I have no idea what was discussed while we waited, but they did eventually pile into their cab and be on their way.

    There was someone smoking outside, and I think I started talking to him by asking him about the Orioles, or something. I honestly have no clue. But that's besides the point. I realized that he was in Baltimore for horsecon, and so, we started discussing the con. Guy was apparently working registration, and various staffers kept swinging by to tell him things. Eventually we headed inside, paused at my floor to talk a little more, started to say our goodbyes, and THAT is when the veil of anonymity dissolved. I say "I go by Stonershy," and he says "That sounds familiar," then he says "I go by Zebranky," and I completely lose my shit. We had talked on Skype a few years before, you see, so I was pretty enthused. Apparently this was grounds to continue talking, so that's what we did essentially until the sun came up.

    Zebranky is a pretty cool dude :3

    So, after almost twenty four hours, I stumbled into bed and slept like a champ, at least for a little while.

    End of Day 3

    Sunday

    Slept all day and partied all night

    I had promised Digit that I would be at the LARP even if he had to drag me out of bed. This meant that at some point, I got dragged out of bed. I was a dissident, though, so I went right back to sleep. At about eleven, Paris woke me up and informed me that it was 11am. The LARP had started an hour ago, and would be ending at 12. I erupted out of bed and flew down to the con center, barely awake, but determined. I got there as things were kind of wrapping up, although not quite. Allie Alteration was there, and I proceeded to "help" her take pictures of her hat. After Discord's Big Stupid Scavenger Hunt had concluded, I congratulated Digit on running a great LARP and pleaded with him to move it to a later time slot next year.

    At this point, I remembered that I had commissions to pick up, so I stumbled into the vendor hall, picked them up, and then promptly returned to the room to go back to sleep. That is a half truth. I kind of slept. People kept coming and going, and I would semi-lucidly have conversations with them while they were present. Eventually, I think maybe at 5 or 6, I got out of bed for realsies and started planning how to tackle Pizza and Booze. Baron came through for me by suggesting a pizza place and then ordering a pizza from said place, and that was what we ultimately settled on. It ended up being a marvelous decision.

    While milling around waiting for everyone to get back from Guardians, I cleaned up the room and set up my laptop. Then, suddenly, I started getting texts like "dude are you sure you can fit twelve additional people in the room?" Truthfully, we couldn't. As I made suggestions to Sparkle Overflow that some folks be turned away, drama ERUPTED on their end, and I began to wonder if anyone would even show up. Eventually, Paris and Full Stop returned. Peggly had begun the voyage home at this point, so he was not present. Sparkle Overflow arrived a little while later, and it was at this point that we began to view the much acclaimed RUBBER.

    Rubber is an amazing film, and I love it with all my heart. It's funny and surreal and bizarre and totally outrageous, much like Bronycon. As far as I'm aware, everyone loved it. Even the people who were skeptical. And THEN we started watching Fatal Farm videos.

    How horrifying.

    After that, we all went to sleep, satisfied that Pizza and Booze Act III was successful.

    End of Day 4

    TL;DR BRONYCON 2014 WAS FUCKING AWESOME :3c

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  • 16w, 1h
    Stonershy's Big Ol' Bronycon 2014 Adventure - Day 1 & 2

    Thursday

    Lots of driving, stayed up all night, had interesting company

    Got going a little later than I would have liked because I needed to get money out of the bank and buy coconut rum. Put further behind schedule because I had to drive forty five minutes out of the way to pick up someone that didn't have a ride to the con. He goes by Tygerbug. LITTLE DO I REALIZE this guy is responsible for frame by frame restoring The Thief and the Cobbler, among a whole lot of other shit. My friends had actually showed me his work before a few years ago. Dude is kind of a big deal. I've also apparently met this guy at Bronycon of January 2012, or as he called it, Hallway Con. Laughs were had and stories were exchanged and he was very good company for the ride down.

    We survive the intense traffic, near misses, and sudden swerves to make exits only to arrive and find that once again, it's Oreals season and a lot of the roads are blocked. It was no issue getting James and Dandy to their hotel, but we had to circle multiple times to figure out how to get to the goddamn Hilton. We joined up with Digit, Baron, and Paris, as well as Full Stop, Greg and Tasty Freeze, dropped off all our stuff, and I braced myself to endure registration. By that, I mean I drank some absinthe. But, interestingly enough, there was not ONE SINGLE PERSON in line. So we went back to the hotel, talked and hung out for a while. During this time, I was informed that PIKE, a fraternity, was having a convention in the Hilton at the same time as Bronycon. And then everyone went to bed.

    I'm nocturnal, though, so I had to keep myself occupied until the sun came up. The plan was simple: go to the lobby with my phone charger and draw for a few hours. The reality was a bit more surreal.

    -A Bronycon Carrol-

    The TL;DR of this is that I was visited by three drunks of descending age: The Drunks of Bronycon Past, Present, and Future.

    The first drunk (Biker Dash, actually!) probably wasn't drunk at all, but for the sake of theme we'll say he was. He didn't come until a few hours into drawing. He asked me if there was a garbage can nearby, and as soon as I saw the tattoos I knew what he was in Baltimore for. He asks to see what I'm drawing and I'm like "Horse porn lol" and he's like "I appreciate all artwork" which is honestly a really cool answer. We talk for a bit, he's a writer, as is his son! Father and son visiting horsecon together. How wonderfully bizarre. We bid each other farewell and I decide to change locations.

    The second drunk was very, very drunk. I didn't realize this until later, but we'll get to that. I'm sitting in the lobby, still drawing horseporn, and this guy kinda gestures at me. I grin and return the gesture, and he gestures affirmatively. At this point, I say, "Are we gonna hang out or what?" So he comes over and I ask, "Are you here for the Fraternity thing, the Orioles, or the horse thing?" He laughs and says, "Maaaan horses are for pussies." I laugh and exclaim, "Get that shit outta here!" So, both of us grinning, he sits down and asks me what chapter I'm with. I'm like "here for the Orioles lol" and he's like "What the fuck is baseball are you here with PIKE or not?" It's obvious that this guy is both really drunk and also from PIKE, but he's really fun to talk to, so I keep pretending I'm not a horsefucker to prolong the conversation. EVENTUALLY, after discussing career paths for twenty minutes, he passes out mid sentence. Having enjoyed his company, I wait to make sure he's sleeping, then get up and ask a security guard for a blanket. I put some pillows under his head, made sure no one would take his phone, and essentially tucked him in. While it was a fun experience, I wanted to finish my fucking drawing, so I changed locations again.

    This new spot was right outside the room, since there was an outlet. I was there for at least an hour before I hear someone coming down the hall. I was literally prone on my stomach drawing at this point. He rounded the corner before I could get up and says, "What are you DOING?" I'm like, "Uh, drawing?" And THEN, in the surprise move of the century, HE LAYS DOWN NEXT TO ME. His first question is, "Are you a frat guy or are you here for bronycon?" And my response is, "I'm here for the Orioles. How about you?" He bashfully responds, "I'm... here for Bronycon." At this moment, I lift up my hat, exposing the PART OF THE PROBLEM Pinkie sticker under the rim, and say, "Me too dude, hahaha" We talk for a while, and I learn that he's eighteen and drunk for the first time, and the alcohols used to achieve this were Grey Goose and Everclear. Hardcore. I express my admiration and he asks "Are you going to butt fuck me? Someone tried to butt fuck me and that's why I came back here. Also am I going to die?" Laughing, I tell him "No, definitely not, but you probably want to sleep on your side so you don't Hendrix yourself." When he starts to pass out, I send him on his way to his room, which is at the end of the hall.

    At that point, it was really just a matter of staying awake until I could find a place to sleep, which wasn't until around 11 am. At some point before then, I went down to the lobby to check on the PIKE guy, who was reported to have made it to his room fine, and then went to get breakfast. What I ate was the BEST Eggs Benedict I have EVER eaten. I don't think I've ever eaten anything that slowly in my life.

    End of Day 1

    Friday

    Woke up too early, did not party that late, slept through the night

    I think I was the last one to wake up, but it was still a lot earlier than I would have liked. I freshened up and got dressed, then stumbled down to the con with Paris to meet Full Stop, and where I was reunited with Peggly Sus. Paris, Peggly Sus, Full Stop and I were essentially a party of four for the duration of the con, and I would not have it any other way.

    THEY ARE THE BEST FRIENDS I COULD ASK FOR.

    We went down to the vendor hall, and I think I bumped into James and Kayla once or twice. Commissions were purchased, I bought a knife at a booth selling shitty swords, and we encountered DAT FUKKEN PIG, which Paris had earlier told me about. Absolutely adorable ^3^ After getting some prints for James, Pacce, and my girlfriend, we returned to Quills and Sofas, where we sat down to draw, and Full Stop taught me how to speak like Henchman 24.

    So anyway, while Paris and Peggly and Full Stop and I are drawing  in Quills and Sofas, people keep bouncing off of me like OH YOU'RE HORSE FAMOUS and I'm like, "shit, really? I haven't done anything." Apparently, that is not how others see it, which is pretty cool I guess. I just don't want it to go to my head. I said something like that in an interview with Zyrian (will link later), who I technically first encountered during the After Dark panel of last con.

    Not long after that, Golden Vision invited me to a writer's dinner, and there I bumped into a whole lot of cool people: Present Perfect, Vicodin, Sleepless Brony, Applejinx, Solitare, Alextrazsa, Aquaman, a guy dressed as a pirate that I can't remember his name (Midnight Quill!), and surprisingly, the guy who I encountered the night before in the hotel lobby (Biker Dash!), among at least forty other really cool people. I had a fantastic dinner, we talked a whole lot of fanfiction, and cinema, and PIKE. After that, we went down to a plaza for a great big group photo (will link later), and THEN we piled all our hats on Obselescence. My hat got to be on top because it says "fedora" I'm so proud hahaha :3c

    So after that very wonderful experience, I returned to Quills and Sofas for more hanging out and possibly more drawing. Eventually, we went to a panel on Drawing Expressions, which was really cool. There was some eleven year old sitting next to Paris, and when we tried to give her drawing advice, she started rambling on and on and poor Paris had to hear her whole life story. There was also a girl sitting next to me, and when we offered her drawing advice, SHE TOOK NOTES. I kind of wish I knew who she was because that kind of eagerness to learn is a good sign that she has major potential.

    Once that panel ended, we went back to the room and Baron and Baron's friend that I can't remember their name and Zanith all started playing Twilight Sparkle's Secret Ship Folder, but we were cast out because Digit and Tygerbug needed to sleep. We ended up in a cosplayer lounge, Baron's friend tried some of Zanith's chewing tobaco and nearly got sick. I eventually decided to call it a night, despite knowing it would fuck with my sleep schedule. I found a place to sleep and checked out for the evening.

    End of Day 2

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#1 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh fuck you posted it hahahah! Didn't expect it so soon!

Very nice. Gooood shit.

#2 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Sounds interesting, can't read it now though. Can't wait till friday!

#3 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh god oh man oh god oh man

#4 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Well, weight gain isn't normally my bag but if it's Pinkie being chubby then I can dig that...:pinkiehappy:

#5 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

I don't think I enjoyed this the way you... enjoyed... it, but I still love you for writing it.

#6 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Original, to say the least. Haven't seen a fat fetish in action before.

#7 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

BIG adventure and TONS of fun seems to be on the horizon here.

#8 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

...good writing but kind of...disturbing:unsuresweetie:

#9 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

>>669752

But she'll need a beautiful heart, faithful and strong in order to keep up with the weight gain.

#10 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

It begins.

#11 · 129w, 6d ago · · ·

Oho, this was a surprise to find on the front page! :3

Why isn't it in the group, Stonershy? :v

#12 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>670516

Amended!

>>670219

This is zero hour.

>>670012

hahaha oh god

>>669893

In a site saturated with cupcake spinoffs, this is disturbing? That's both flattering and worrying.

>>669752

YOU FUCKIN KNOW IT

>>669621

I actually started a group for these kind of stories with fellow fatty enthusiast, Baron Von Clop. There are only several stories in there right now, but that will change, in time~

>>669558

It's cool. Not everyone can appreciate heavy machinery.

>>669544

Pinkie is canonically a fatty. This is just the natural order of things.

>>669537

BEHOLD MY TRUE FORM, AND DESPAIR.

>>669472

No rush. It is a story about fat ponies though. Be warned.

>>669471

Surprise Fatty Pie strike on FimFiction kills hundreds.

#13 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>672483 Hell, I'm not into fat clop, but I just might follow this to see how you handle it outside of Fluttershy's fantasies. It'd be interesting to see what kind of health consequences this would result in should Pinkie wish to go through with Flutters' love of lard. I always, ALWAYS appreciate the wonderfully strange. It's why I'm an SCP enthusiast.

#14 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>673103

Well as long as Fluttershy doesn't come across SCP-807, Pinkie isn't at any really serious risk. That said, if you couldn't tell, shortness of breath/being out of shape is kind of a fetish of mine.

For the most part, yeah, the way it works in reality and the way it works in fantasy are two completely different things, just like in real life!

#15 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>673160 Awesome, your story shall be easy on my suspension of disbelief then. Of this I approve. ^.=.^ <--Happy dragon.

SCP-087...I know someone from the Foundation is actually writing an SCP crossover on here, but somepony ought to write about the Mane Six going on an expedition into the Stairwell (or its experimental horror game counterpart SCP-087-B).

On a similar note, one of my favorites is SCP-610 "The Flesh that Hates," as well as similar disease-like SCPs.

#16 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>673276

I considered something where 087 manifests in the library's basement, and Shy ends up going down trying to help whoever is crying, but I could never think of an ending for it.

#17 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>673319 Interesting premise. I would have gone with perhaps a stairwell in Canterlot Castle that doesn't show up on the blueprints. Though I might not send a canon character down there; probably a few OCs that we could kill off without consequence.

Gaz
#18 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

I dare do say, I love me some big, soft, pink pone. :pinkiesmile:

#19 · 129w, 5d ago · · ·

>>674294

You and me both!

#20 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

Nice, not bad indeed :moustache:, i never really thought about a fat fetish (if you want to call it that). very well written.

#21 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

Not bad, not bad at all. Descriptions were vivid, characters were very in character I felt... it's a good fic all in all. Wasn't expecting that ending.

The one thing I don't like is something that I find is a common error in fics, being that at times it felt like you tried to use more creative wording. Now there's nothing wrong with that, but sometimes a simple order of words serves just as well as a complex one.

Still, all in all a good fic. I rate it 4.5 stars out of 5.

#22 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

>>680277

No, it's totally my fetish. I'm not in denial about it. Thanks, though!

>>680863

Thank you very much! Of course, this was only the first chapter. There is plenty more to come.

I'll also take that bit about complexity to heart in the future. I do believe that it's possible to overdo description. Did you have any specific examples?

#23 · 129w, 4d ago · · ·

>>681128

I'll keep an eye out for future installments.

Anywho, it's not that you were over-descriptive, you did a good job of limiting it to the proper amount. It's just that your word choice was a bit weird at some points. For example, I've never really heard anyone describe genitalia as a person's "sex" before. Although, maybe your word choice is just a personal peeve of mine. Eh.

Still, whether or not that be the case, I enjoyed this and will definitely read more as it's released. Keep up the good work.

#24 · 129w, 3d ago · · ·

>>681443

The problem as I see it is that there are only so many slangs for vagina that one can use without either sounding silly or bizarre. Referring to genitalia as a sex is a practice I'm actually very familiar with, but I can understand not everyone has the same literary background as I do.

#25 · 129w, 3d ago · · ·

>>682140

Which I can understand. I have a habit of doing the same thing sometimes, so I suppose it's not a real issue.

#28 · 129w, 1d ago · · ·

>>690431

I am strangely okay with this.

                      ^ me                                                                                     ^ you

Just keep doing whatever the fuck you're doing.

#29 · 129w, 9h ago · · ·

Just thought I'd tell you that I'm looking forward to the next chapter, I did like what you have written so far.

#30 · 129w, 8h ago · · ·

>>699831

Oh rad~ Thanks!

#31 · 128w, 3h ago · · ·

Yeah, this is awesome so far, can't wait.

#32 · 128w, 33m ago · · ·

>>738091

Gotta finish the Chrysalis one-shot before I do anything else. Thanks, though!

#33 · 126w, 6d ago · · ·

Damn you, now everyone will know my terrible secret; I ship mares together.

#34 · 126w, 6d ago · · ·

>>780021

Man, you and I have seriously different definitions of terrible.

#35 · 126w, 6d ago · · ·

>>781409

Well, what can you expect? It's not exactly like I'm some writer on the internet who's amazed with your work and jealous of the fact that he wrote a silly fetish story that nobody has seemed to notice while you write a terrible little blurb that is better than all the rest of the terrible pony fetish fiction on the internet and I'm making a sarcastic joke in an attempt to make acquaintances with you and at the same time alleviate the pain of my weak constitution.

Nope. Certainly nothing like that.

#36 · 126w, 5d ago · · ·

>>781514

You're silly~

Just chill, you'll get better with practice. As for exposure...

Well, apparently you didn't post the Fizzy thing on this site. There are a few budding expansion groups, one of which I started. You could try sticking it there and seeing if it grabs more attention.

#37 · 126w, 5d ago · · ·

>>783049

Silly? Who's being silly. I'm totally serious. Yep, really serious.

Well, I'm trying to work up the guts to post it. Join a group, mayhap. I'm just a little worried that no one will take my NOT fetish writing seriously if I do that. But then, we're on the internet, why should I care? I guess the comments of you story isn't really an appropriate place to talk about this, though.

#38 · 126w, 5d ago · · ·

>>784047

At the risk of sounding cliche;

Why so serious? :)

#39 · 125w, 6d ago · · ·

This is my fetish ..... =3

#42 · 125w, 1d ago · · ·

>>842177

gasp

Thank yooooooou :3c

#43 · 124w, 3d ago · · ·

okay, I have the weirdest boner right now... :twilightoops:

#45 · 124w, 2d ago · · ·

That...was...

I don't know

It was well written

But I'm not sure how to describe how I feel about it

:rainbowlaugh:

#46 · 124w, 2d ago · · ·

>>874374

This is a fetish story. I'm not even going to try and deny that. Thank you for reading, and I'm sorry if it made you uncomfortable.

#47 · 124w, 2d ago · · ·

>>874418

Actually, it made me break out laughing at a few points.  If nothing else, Fat-Pinkie is just as funny as her normal self.:pinkiehappy:

#48 · 124w, 2d ago · · ·

I'm not sure how I feel. All I know is there is a tightness in my pants and a smile on my face.

#49 · 124w, 5h ago · · ·

Right up there with chubby kitties, chubby ponies are adorable. Not sure about the non-animals. No problem with the ponies, tho. Plus Pinkie would probably have fun. It is Pinkie, after all.

#50 · 124w, 4h ago · · ·

>>874459

Well okay! That's good too!

>>875735

I'm no expert, but aren'those are usually signs of feeling good?

>>889820

Plus, it's canon that Pinkie porks out, so there's that too!

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