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xStellar_Bubbles


A derp trying to make sense of reality.

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Feeling bad about how they used the Cutie Mark Crusaders to get to Princess Twilight Sparkle, mean fillies Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon try to make it up to her.

... Although, it may come off as a bit "questionable".

Author's Note: I don't know if this is my worst, or best idea yet. Also, taken place before Crusaders of the Lost Mark.

Pre-read by:
Thunderbolt Sentinel, Silver Chord, Thunder Lightning, Midnightsotherother

Thank you all!

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 19 )

well, you use bold print a lot, some word you used it on, it was unneeded, such as this

call us blank flanks

was not really needed there. or here

so rudely interrupted

to be honest, this is quite well written, other than what I listed, this is a good story, good job

6294520 yep, other than those, I did not see much wrong

I read over this as much as I could, but I never got to comment on anything before my internet went POOF!. But either way, good job!

6300900 Really? Anything I can improve on?

Nah, I think you did good. :-)

This is actually really hilarious.

DT's and SS's behavior in it feels like a fusion of their pre- and post- CotLM selves.

6658499 You're welcome

Adorable as hell. Cute story :heart:

Good story. The only thing I have to complain about here is the quite misleading description.
When I read this, I thought it's a fanfic for "Crusaders of the Lost Mark" and that the events are set after Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon have become better ponies.

6710005 Sorry. :twilightsheepish: I intended this story to be set perhaps only weeks after Twilight Time.

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I found out by reading the fic. :pinkiecrazy:
You might want to add a little note to the description that it's set before the events of "Crusaders of the Lost Mark". :raritywink:

It has some grammar goofs here and there, but it's a cute and funny little fic. Can't argue with that :twilightsmile:

"Just follow us, we're sure that you might like it!" Diamond said, playing her most innocent smile.

that sentence is a bit of contradiction, Diamond Tiara. You're SURE that I MIGHT like it?:facehoof: Don't you mean either you're sure that I will like it, or you have a feeling I might like it?:twilightsheepish:

I am totally not nagging the writer here since Diamond Tiara in canon did use the word "lame-chin"

but yes Twilight is a total grammar-Nazi and she would never let such a linguistic anomaly slide:pinkiehappy:

That was hilarious! And kinna messed up.:twilightsheepish:

Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara are such GOOOOOOD Girls!:pinkiecrazy:

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