Two years have passed since the mane six defeated Lord Tirek with the power of harmony and enclose him in Tartarus. After that day, the peace fell in Equestria as never before. But not all were in peace after all. In the Everfree forest, at night, there's a problem with the creatures and that could affect the neighboring town next to the forest, Ponyville. Luna decides, accompanied with her guards, to investigate what endangers PonyVille. But she didn't know what surprises the forest would provide when they reach the forest.
Chapters (9)
The description has already frightened me away. Try getting an editor.
6257165 Ok, thanks for tell me that! I'm not very good with this of the stories, but I give the best that I can.
So far it's decent 6/10
6259223 Is only the first chapter, soon I'll upload the second chapter, but thanks for voting
Why does this have a gore tag, but not a dark tag?
6259223 Where did you get the icon for your avatar?
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Gore, Why? the FAQ say: "use ‘Gore' when there is explicit description of violence/grotesque imagery in your story"
I'll like this story even more if he ends up with Luna instead of celestia.
6344473 Hmhmhm, I don't tell anything about it, this will be a surprise.
6344698 ok..but luna would probably be heartbroken if he ended up with celestia.why am I trying not to laugh at the thought of this
6344723 Hahaa, anything is anything. Just wait the other chapters and you'll see
I swear if he falls in love with celestia major threats be goin down..jk I'd just have a really crazy reaction.
6476963 Hahaha!!. Easy!! you'll be able to see the truth at any time, just be patient
6477633 but I don't want luna to be heart broken
celestia u better stay away.
6486041 I was in the same situation when I read a story of the two sister. I know what it feels, and that's why I do
Awsome story gotta comb it with grammar editing you Speak Espanial correct
6561454 Hahaha. Yeah
6562579 its cool awsome story man, i can see your Espanial to English is getting better with each Chapter thus far
6562854 Thanks men!!, I'm glad that you like my story.
I always try that this story be almost perfect. But well... hehehe, sometimes some errors escape me
I see what you're trying to do. It's just that I couldn't continue reading due to the grammar. Usually I can get past the difficulties of writers that have English as a second language. But, oh man....this is....different...to say the least. I ask that you go back through your story and improve your grammar or at least get an English editor. I will be very interested in this story once that happens. So if that does happen please PM me so that I can check it out and give it a fair chance.
"Having mistakes is not a sin. Not fixing the mistakes that you can fix, is a sin."
Hopefully that's a quote. Because I follow that rule when writing.
I hope that you can improve this story and I wish you well.
6602798 Hello SkyDragonMC!
Well... that's what I had previously thought to do. In the first chapters, the grammar is nothing compared to the last chapters, and I realized when I read the chapters firsts to check.
It's a bit difficult and tiring having to search every problem in every corner, even not having the English as language already incorporated, but despite that I had intended to fix certain things. I always try to make this story as best I can, but... it's tiring having to translate it into English, and sometime I don't want to continue with that. But nevertheless, I made the sacrifice.
I don't take it in the wrong way, is very perfect what you're saying and I appreciate that you told me about that.
Thank you very much.
I'm just waiting for luna and orion to kiss
6652496 Hahaha. I don't know, I won't talk anything about this issue, just wait a little more. Is the only what can I say.
Just I can say that I'll touch the issue of romance in the next chapters, but I don't promise Anything.
Edit: Sorry, I posted twice
6652582 yaaay
can't wait.
6700031 I don't know what else to say. I'm finishing Chapter 9 and surely before the holidays I can upload it. And I think that you'll like it a bit.
That's all!. I'll not say anything more.
6700903 kk thanks you're doing great with the story
6701666 Hehe. Thanks
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I'm glad that you're enjoying my story
Catfight between Luna and Twi inbound
6749920 HA!! Man! You made my day!