First thoughts: Unique idea, but chapters are too short. I'll edit in my full opinion after I read.

Edit: My phone crashed as soon as I was done editing D:

In a nutshell, good writing, good humor, but first two chapters could be combined, as well as a third part added onto that.

Also, Trixie is out of character. Not talking much at all. Explain in story how that happened plox.

Son of a

The chapters could be longer, but what you have here is well written. I also like the concept.

I wish I could wait for the next chapter but I'm gonna be offline for the next week

Android Messiah - Adam Drew

>>800161800161 Wow, Ive always liked your choices for fitting music.  Although, for now at least, the song doesn't quite fit where I'm going with this.  But you can bet Discord and Queen Chrysalis won't know what hit them

...Alright.

that is HILARIOUS! no idea what could come from this, but it'll be a fun read

i like the idea, i can't wait to see what happens next

Hmm.  Interesting idea.

good story but you need to make it longer as said above both chapters could of been put together

This has good potential, but the chapters could be longer

chaps could be longer cant wait to see where this is going

Nice, but these chapters are tiny!

>>10951311095131 Working on that with chapter 3, but thanks for giving this a shot

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more plz

holy cow it updated

the chapters are kinda all over the place but other wise its awesome

This seems kind of a non-sequiter, but I sorta forgot what happened earlier.

an interesting idea. I'll see if it develops into something.

Who would have thought that Twilight Sparkle would a Robot, VERY Intrigueing. LOL!

>>11806291180629 Well SOMEONE had to do it

>>11806371180637 I was working in a similar concept... althought a little more militarized, and this fic kind of reminds me a comment talk I've did with Patrosion on deviantArt, You're doing a Great Job with this fic

>>11807751180775 Well, don't let me stop you, I would certainly read it

>>11806371180637 Don't u mean "SOMEPONY" had to do it? ;)

>>11815031181503 That wasn't said in story.  Therefore, I can say it however I want.

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>>11837671183767 Sorry My Bad :)

interesting

cool... want moar please?

i believe my feelings towards this story can be summed up with one word: MOAR!

Finally got around to reading this, and I gotta say, I like it. Interesting concept, rather different direction than I took from a similar source of inspiration (that picture by tsitra is badass, ain't it?), and your execution is pretty good so far.

A couple suggestions: do a quick grammar/spelling check on what you've got so far, just to clean things up a bit. As others have said, the first two chapters can easily be made into one chapter, and I think they would flow better. Also, "coolant/antifreeze" doesn't really work as a spoken thing. I'd recommend picking one or the other, probably the former - people'll get what you mean!

Biggest one ... you skip over her explanation of things to the other ponies and we don't really get that much of their reaction to Twilight being what she is. Their overall reactions are somewhat understandable but still come off as being somewhat unsupported, which you could fix in the following chapters, certainly, but really I'd be interested in seeing their initial reactions to, well, everything. Expressions, exclamations of concern; these things interest me.

All that aside, man, I LIKE it. Keep going.

>>15026341502634 Consider the coolant fixed.  The rest, at this point, shall wait until chapter 4 is out, but will get done or I'm not Grtgfbll!!!!

I'm a sucker for stories like this, in which a character becomes or turns out to be something else. I like this.

However, I'm not too confident in your ability to finish this. Looking at the update dates of your chapters, I see a pattern very similar to my own. I have never, ever been able to finish writing a multi-chapter fanfic, despite having plenty of time to do so.

I would greatly appreciate it if you would hurry up and prove me wrong.

>>15026891502689relly edd

>>21671272167127 Just one d little brother.

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>>21702372170237yes he is my older brouther...

>>11806291180629you forgot (be) insted of just a... Ok?

>>21996722199672 Try to save that for the story, brat-boy.

>>22006202200620 blae