Really well written. My only complaint is the excessive bolding. Starts to distract after a while...

I don't normally read clop. When I do, it's usually the good stuff.

This is no exception. +1

>>639845639845

I changed up some of the formatting so this should help with the problem (the emphasis has been changed to italics which should still stand out, but not be as jarring)

Also, more chapters are coming as I get them formatted to FimFiction's style, and the author is still writing new material.

Omg, yes! I thought. The six chapters I saw before where all we were going to get!

I hope that this continues!

>>640085640085

The author is currently working on chapter 7, a chapter involving Twilight (though I don't know more specifics than that).

in this story you make it sound that the stallions there are (except for theyre size) are the most worst and horrible sex partners for the Mares, and that they all would have so much more fun with a Human

>>640121640121

Well, I can't speak for why the author did it this way, but you can actually find a similar social mindset in groups of humans where the women vastly outnumber the males in a population.  It becomes the woman's prerogative to gain a male's attention and to "keep him interested" with little to no effort upon the male since should he be displeased, he can quite easily find other prospects.  

In a population such as the E Sapiens, where this gender imbalance is always the case, you might find this taken to an extreme where stallions don't even bother trying to please mares and become extremely choosy with body-type, simply because their options are so extremely open.

Continue.

awwwwww it so romantic that it hurts!

awwwww........ you make me all sappy

I've read the first two chaps somewhere on the internet (can't find it now) but it's nice to see it getting up here on FimFic and being continued aswell

Looking forward to the next chap

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I can take or leave the clop aspects of the story, not really into that sort of thing, for all that I'm pretty open minded about it.  What has me absolutely flabbergasted is the SOCIETAL work this author has done on the story.  It makes so much goddamn sense I'm amazed I never thought of it before.  Considering how equine herd psychology combined with a sapience and the disparity of male to female ratios... I am absolutely amazed at this story.  

Hats off to the author.  This is world building at its finest.

Thank you very much for writing it.

did the autor mention anything about how many chapters are planned for this story, i hope alot because i really, and i mean really REALLY like this story

Recent studies have shown that gender roles are largely society based, so I completely agree with that.  What I'm in awe over is how smoothly he was able to incorporate his own interpretation of the world into the canon series.  It doesn't come across as jarring at all, which I appreciate for the feat it is.

>>640455640455

The first chapter was posted up on ponibooru as an image story well over a year ago, with the second chapter following a couple of months later in the same fashion, so you probably saw them in that form.  A couple months ago, the author was convinced to put them up on Pastebin and all of his work up through chapter 6 was placed on the Clopfic Directory, where I was then able to convince him to allow me to format the chapters for FiMFiction in order to get them out to a wider audience, hopefully with the warm reception the story seems to be getting we'll see more chapters in the near future (I know he's working on the next one right now)  So keep liking & favoriting the story to promote more of these wonderful tales .

>>640488640488

I don't believe the author has a set number planned, he just enjoys exploring the different societies and writes whatever scenes strike his fancy.  But keep following the story and clicking those like buttons so he knows you want more

Actually, now that I've had time to think about it, this societal setup says some interesting things about Princess Celestia and her primarily male guard of well armored muscular male ponies.

Well... it's good to be the princess, I suppose.

>>640591640591

From what we've seen of the show, they're more ornamentation than a true guard.  Celestia has taken on most direct threats on her own without involving the guard (and they were spectacularly ineffective against NMM in the pilot), so having strong male guards would be a rather distinct societal statement of power in Equestria, showing not only militaristic strength, but social strength that you can attract that many males to your defense.

Although perhaps there's more truth to the tales of Molestia than ponies realize   

she would SO not work in this setting, but it's still fun to dream.

Whoa, dude.  This story.  This story, dude.  Whoa.

Awesome.  And I don't usually say that about stories with this much ... content, if you get what I mean. But the way everything plays out, the feelings, the social context, the human/pony interactions it's like, somethin' else, man.  Honestly one of the best I've read. Seriously, I can't think of a comparable fic that did so much right.

Like all good things, I require more. I can't wait to see what happens next. The relationship with Dash ...  c`est incroyable, but I'm a bit curious about how things would work out with other ponies, too.  Or maybe they'll decide to keep it just the two of them.  Or maybe there'll be jealousy and conflict. So many great possibilities.

I sure hope the author can write quickly.

>>640639640639

I am reminded of the scene in History of the World Part 1 where the royal concubine is moving down the line of men and going yes, yes, yes, yes, no, no, no, yes, no, yes...

Oh MAN I can't believe I missed that joke.

Characters name is Bellerophon, who in greek mythology is known for riding the pegasus and slaying the chimera.

Ba Dum Ching!

The amount of awesome you just made Lyra increase by is OVER 9000!!!

If the ponies find out they can use this poor human to alleviate their heat, this will end very very poorly for him.

>>640869640869

It wouldn't end very well for those ponies you mean, considering Lero is friends with the three toughest ponies in Ponyville, one of whom is the sixth or seventh deadliest pony in Equestria.

Glad to see this story make its way to Fimfiction.

Ha! Man about time I saw this on here! Can't remember where I found this before, pastebin or somethin... but still really glad to see this here really great story.  Thanks for posting it!

The story is more than only well written, its just amazing. I hope there will be more chapters.

I'm pretty curious about Lyra and her character in this story as she is mentioned  but had no real appearence till now.

This is far superior to the erotic Romance other writers here have written - better than TAW, better than Crowley, etc. etc.. Only HotSauce's better works can rank along with it.

But beyond that, this is a deeply considered story of the mores of Equestrian society, and not a mere HIE sexing the mane six. And then, he writes feelings and emotions with such great depth that it takes ones breath away. And to write so well. Yeah, this is my favorite FiM fanfic.

Thanks AnonponyDashie, for posting his story here.

Ohh I read this before, it's very good I, I'm glad it's here, and I am super excited that it's continuing.

The society that the author has created in this story is interesting and believable.  The societal gender reversals lead to some great funny moments. The stallions as property in history is believable.  Lyra as the 6th or 7th deadliest pony alive is...  awesome!   Celestia with her many male royal guards has interesting connotations as well.

This is how you do a clop... actually, calling this a clop seems like an insult. This is a romance story with sex scenes in it. You can feel the amount of love those two have, and I really like how he made up Lyra as a unicorn Bruce Lee. This seems to be the only fanfic that remembers that RD goes to karate class.

This is the most In-character I've ever seen Rainbow Dash in almost any clop. I mean, the author got it all of her personality covered, and even Lero himself seems like an awesome dude (by the way, google his full name).

I remember reading the first two parts of this at Ponibooru, and I never thought that it had more parts. This is awesome.

You might want to add links to the Ponibooru images that this is from, most of the author comments are there. Just a suggestion.

oh dear,

mental note:

avoid Twilight Sparkle on bad days,

Avoid Lyra at all costs

or bring Very long range sniper rifle.

To be fair the show in season 2 has adjusted the ratio of females to males from 5:1 to 3:1, kinda like how the state of Georgia has that ratio for it's population.

As for the fic itself I do like how you build your universe, regardless whether people agree or not. You tackle the whole gender roles reversal thing very well. *Note: now I'm picturing a male version of the Women's Suffrage Movement in Equestria. Spike is lucky because he won't have to worry about sexism because of the whole "I breath fire and can swim in lava" thing...but I digress. There are parts of this fic that separate it from being just a straight forward clop, yes there is quit a lot of that in this fic; however, this fic is also well written, the characters are likeable and there some genuine hard warming moments sprinkled here and there. There are two things that makes this work. The first is that unlike a lot of HIE this takes place from the pony's perspective(Dash) and the second is that Lero is somewhat relatable and has to learn the social norms of his new world.

>>642297642297 I believe the proper term would be 'erotica'. 'Clop', to me, is essentially a 'and then they fucked' sort of story.

This story, however, builds it up in such an incredible and meaningful way that it actually accentuates the sex with incredibly maddening degrees of ludicrously torturing detail. I like it.

And there are images? As if there wasn't enough detail already!

>>642667642667 Erotica. I like that word.

However, no, there're no pictures, only text submitted it as an image. Check it here and here. It's just the first two chapters, though, but the author does talk a lot about the fic there. (oh, and someone just gave me another link here. I've never been to that site, and I don't think I want to, but the author does answer some questions, and even gives a bit of detail about the upcoming chapter)

>>642658642658 I think this was written before season 2, or at least when it started. You're right, though.

>>640121640121

The author responds to you with: "Remember that the story is being told mostly through the lens of Rainbow's experience. Just because one individual had an unfulfilling sexual encounter does not by any means mean that *all* such encounters are unfulfilling."

>>640760640760

The author thought that nopony would get that reference, I'm glad that we keep proving him wrong

>>641800641800

I'm glad I could help to share this with others.  I love this story which was why I was so willing to take on the extra work of formatting it, and hosting it on my own account to help get this out to a wider audience.

>>642658642658

I've always said that HiE stories start out with a major disadvantage simply because of the subject matter, but as you've stated, this story avoids the common pitfalls, and is well structured, well written, and keeps the characters engaging.  It goes to show that talent will show through regardless of the setting.

>>642667642667

The term erotica certainly does fit this better.  It is first and foremost a romantic story with world building and sensual elements.  You care about the characters, and so the sensual parts feel much more rewarding because you're emotionally invested in the character's happiness.

There aren't really pictures for the story (although if some artistic brony would care to *create* some that would be truly awesome hint hint anyone with artistic talent

What NG is talking about is that these stories were first posted up on ponibooru as images of text, it wasn't until recently that they were formatted for pastebin and now FiMFiction.

>>642650642650

Or explosives...lots and lots of explosives.

I like it

Lero, (short for Bellerophon, for his parents had been odd folk)

And he gets to "ride" a pegasus.

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This story is great!!! Tbh, I'm generally not a big fan of stories when it isn't explained how the human ends up in Equestria (or if something nonsensical happens, like he gets struck by lightning and teleported there, etc.) but this story's romance makes up for it. THIS BETTER BE CONTINUED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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>>643931643931

I personally prefer when a story does what "Xenophilia" does and just treats it as a non-issue.  Unless the story is going to revolve around how they got there or how they're going to get back, then I feel it makes more sense for an author to simply treat it as if it doesn't matter and not even try to give a BS answer.  Since inter-dimensional travel is at best scientific hypothesis, even a well versed author could only throw techno-babble at the reader, or simply go with "It's magic, I don't have to explain shit" both of which are IMHO degrading to the reader because it's not an actual response.  

By simply ignoring the mechanism of how they got there, or saying that they have no idea how it happened, the author isn't forced to condescend to the reader by trying to come up with an explanation for an unexplainable phenomenon.

But hey, that's just my 2 bits  Stay awesome & thanks for reading!

Holy crap the world building! Or: World building in my clop-fic?

It's been mentioned before but I could take or leave the clop. It's the look into pony society from this perspective as well as the world/history building that kept me hooked. I'm really interested in the long term aspects of Lero's and Dash's relationship as well as them dealing with the not only intercultural but interspecies aspects of their relationship.

Also could you tell the author I want to personally thank him for not making this 2nd person perspective? So many experimental fics are and I always felt the reader loses a lot of potential characterization in 2nd person.

oh my.  i don't usually like, uhm, this type of subject matter in my favorites listing.  i, uhm, try to avoid it.  but this fits so well with my own headcanon and it's really well written!  it's kinda funny, i posted a very similar run-down on mlpheadcannons tumblr a while back but never did get around to writing anything with that setting.

of course, it's not a word-for-word rendition.  Equestrian gender roles weren't exactly reversed when i wrote my ... headcanon thing.  the relative power and prestige associated with them is.  uhm, i mean ... human societies tend towards patriarchy due to several environmental factors, one of which is the normally hightened aggression in the human male (evolutionarily to fend off predators and threats to mating rights, for hunting et al).  those with the ability and mentality to use violence, in the ancient world, would prosper more than those that were not so quick to the sword.  kinda barbaric but that's history.  of course, there are notable exceptions but generally that can be seen as the case.

in Equestria, because of the Equine and herbivorous nature of the species, the first response to predatory action would probably be to flee.  only those in a position of relative force over predators would be able to fight or fend them off (pegasi being the primary one i'm thinking of) and that would heighten their aggressivness in regards to their brethren.  therefore, violent aggressivness would be seen as counter to the will of the society in most cases.  the Guard and other jobs traditionally associated with males on Earth would still be seen as male-specific roles but they would be seen more as 'needed evils' rather than honorable professions (barring leadership roles and crafting i suppose, those would be more mare-centric).  the 'honorable and good' jobs were caring for children, bringin in food and other roles that human societies see as 'lesser' to the roles of protector and aggressor.  so it's not a role reversal, though i really like that here.  it was a ... societal reversal.

one of the things i would like to see is how rape is treated.  uhm, that sounded bad.  i mean, in humans, female-rape is specifically unfair to the female in a physical sense.  the emotive responses to rape are the same in both genders of course and that should never be taken lightly but when a female is raped, it can leave the woman with an unwanted pregnancy and that is a specific economic and social strain on her (the rapist not giving care for the child and how unwed mothers traditionally are viewed et al).  how is rape treated from an Equine point-of-view aside from it just being 'bad'?  what environmental factors go into stallion-rape and how does that effect the Equine view of rape?  male-rape amoung humans is more common than some think but it's still treated rather lightly even in the most enlightened of societies and i think it's due to the traditional view that a 'man can never be raped' as well as the thought that it's 'not so bad' for men because the pregnancy threat isn't there.

uhm, i'm sorry.  i didn't mean to go all crazy with my own thoughts.  i hope i didn't offend anyone.  oh, i really shouldn't post all that but i really want to know.  i'm sorry.

but i really like this!  as a romance story, it works really well and while i don't normally like much clop except for the unintentional humor, this works on more than just a physcial desire.  i like how the author is exploring a cultural aspect that is either glossed over or ignored in the more 'serious' HiE fiction works.  though most HiE can be regulated to 'Human on Earth with Pony-Humans' in the social and cultural sense.  might want to go through and clean up some more though.  a few double-colons here and there.  i'm guessing that denotes internal thoughts.  and please, i would love to read more of this series.  it's really nicely done.

The story is labeled "incomplete" is this true (since you are not the author) or did you just forget to change it?

>>645591645591

The author is currently working on the next chapter, don't worry there's still more to come

>>642718642718

THAT'S where I remember the story from.  Was interested in the premise back then, and was hoping for a continuation.

Great Story!

C'mon, Dash--he is male, and thereforedense.

He has reach, but she lacks flexibility. Not that he cares.

>>642871642871 Orbital strike? You'd have to time it around the Sparkle family's shield capabilities, though.

>>645699645699 Oh okay, I'm going to ready it later then

Yes......just yes

Too be honest I dislike the idea of more than 2 people in a relationship and to be honest again it kinda put me off the story (I'm still gonna read for sure)

What can I say I'm a one person kinda guy

>>648365648365

Most people are, however, you must keep in mind that one of the main purposes of this story is to show how our two societies differ, and how we might interact because of those differences.  

Monogamy among humans is mainly a cultural, and generally religious, issue.  We've had cultures that are strictly monogamous, strictly polygamous, and some cultures that never cared.  So, when the issue is brought up among a race where rather than being a social issue, it's a biological one (with the high disparity among the genders monogamy could not work on a biological scale, the species would die out) Lero, who is no longer in his own society, allows RD to make the decision for him.  He doesn't have strong ties to the issue, and would instead want Dash to be as comfortable as possible.

I'm glad that you're enjoying the story, just keep in mind that this isn't trying to say that any way of life is better than another, it's just exploring societal differences and the interactions they cause.

Boss, love this, tall the author to keep up the good work.  

Honestly, I cannot express my delight at this story. I hesitate to call this a 'fic' as it is so brilliantly written. This writer (whoever he is) manages to pull off an 'out of MLP cannon setting' with billiant ease. I almost feel guilty that i am not in some way paying for this story.

Hopefully the author reads the comments! Because I've seen nothing but positive feedback.

>>649080649080 Everything you know is wrong black is white up is down and short is long and everything you thought was just so important doesn't  really matter anymore coz the simple fact remanes that everything is wrong just forget the words and singalong

I'm really 12 on the inside.

The story is impossibly accurate not mention just plain great can't wait for next chapter.

Love

Your seacret admirer

I like this story alot the traditions thin is interesting and this is the first story I've seen like it.

I like it.

Nope. Just bring Pinkie Pie. The disadvantage universal to all fighting styles is that they require physics.

I love it when clopclop goes into deeper meaning like this. Good job, I hope I don't have to wait much longer for new chapter.

Fuuuuaaaarrrrrkkkkkk... *Begins long process of clopping*

I never thought I would find a story involving a human banging a small cyan horse hot, but that was... damn.

Holy shitfucktits this was great! This dude can fucking write. Liked/faved/tracked/clopped-to/etc...

Wow. Moar plz.

I'm going to .... die of exhaustion if i keep ... clopping this fast  

Xenophilia? How unfortunate I forgot my Starfleet captain's uniform.

>>657364657364

Oh, ye of little faith.

>>660863660863

This makes me wonder just how many Xenophiles Kirk created...  and a tiny bit curious if he ever got it on with a cyan alien

This is the kind of story where you could strip out the sex scenes, and it would still be an entertaining and interesting exploration of human / pony social differences. Very well done. So well done, I wish I had explored this more in my own stories.

>>662390662390

Captain's Log, Stardate unknown:

Stranded on a planet populated by colorful sentient ponies. The locals are... very friendly.

This is my fav clop ever. Thank you sir for uploading it here so I can read it again. And with more chapters than old picture ones

Oh damn son.... i'm so wasted now.      FUAAAAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRK *croak*

Whoever wrote this... IS A GOD.

Great relationship building right there, I like how he made Lero being in Equestria more of a none issue. No random lightning bolt, or God sending him to Equestria. Rainbow is completely in character and Lero, in no way, feels like a self-insert OC Human. Great start to a story, the writing is top notch.

The way this is written, "clop" doesn't do it justice, I file this under "Love Story with sex scenes/erotica". Gotta say, I never thought I'd see the day when reading a love story with a Human having sex with a candy colored pony So Damn HOT! Great job not going the 13 year old virgin route with the sex scene, and actually going into detail of how Rainbow was feeling throughout the whole experience.

>>657364657364 then you havent been on this site long enough

>>653030653030 what if someone learned the legendary pinkie style?

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>>677898677898

They meet Pinkie Pie and begin a duel to the death. The strain on physics is so great that the universe simply cannot take it. It collapses upon itself, causing a very large explosion. We now call that explosion the Big Bang.

And that's how the universe was made!

>>677976677976

Finally, this explains why the universe can expand at a rate faster than the speed of light... That's right people the only thing that can move faster than the speed of light, is the Universe itself... because Pinkie broke the laws of physics to create it.

>>678710678710

I'm actually working something into my next story that at least semi-answers the question of how Pinkie breaks physics without going into technobabble. Although now Iifht just do a one shot where Pinkie creates the universe.

>>678758678758

"And that's how Equestria was made!"

Tell your author friend.

MY BONAR THANKS HIM (dont give it a hand shake tho)

This was simply amazing i had to read it a second time

I found different stories with RD and i have to say this one is my favorite one. Also the sex scene didn't feel rushed, and the story i find very interesting, and the romance all in all is magnificent. Tell your friend to keep it up. Just simply bravo.

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Love the romance. The Background, especially because of the fact that there was so much science in the whole, courtship thing

This is jut brilliant! Some people say that using omniscient narration makes things less interesting, but with you I can tell it's not going to be a problem at all. Excellent and honest writing style, I'm really excited to read the rest of this.

Oh my god! Instantly favorited!

Love romantic HiE clopfics. This is well done. My compliments to the author.

Have you by any chance seen "Somnambula"?

I'm not so much interested in the clop part (although it is rather arousing) rather than the actual story line. Don't know 'bout y'all but the part of them actually falling in love is the best part of this fic, this is easily the best clopfic I have read yet and can't wait for chapter 7.

I comend your knowledge of greek mythology sir. Bellerophon, Slayer of the Chimera and Rider of Pegasus. I like it. Most people only know of perseus as the rider of Pegasus, which is acually inaccurate. I greatly look forward to reading the rest.

One Hellva way to start out the day! Romantic hot morning sex is a always a plus! Rainbow must be living every Mares dream!

i can't fav twice what is this

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This is great. I love how deep this goes into possible Equestrian society.

However, I did have a bit of a minor problem with this chapter. I hate how nearly every story keeps throwing in heat, and how it basically cripples the mares. It makes no sense. I can't see how they could possibly have reached the level of civilization they are at while still dealing with a heat. I suppose it could be argued that a heat would remain even after all that time, but for it to still be so extreme? If anything, it should just be something small.

>>642845642845

"The author responds to you with: 'Remember that the story is being told mostly through the lens of Rainbow's experience. Just because one individual had an unfulfilling sexual encounter does not by any means mean that *all* such encounters are unfulfilling.'"

I could believe that, if everything else in the story wasn't pointing to basically the same thing. So far that is just how it's been shown to be. Not just by Rainbow Dash, but everyone else as well. Don't get me wrong, since I think it makes sense considering the society they have. Honestly, I love the fact that this guy has shown up and is basically taking all their expectations of horrible relationships, and tearing them apart.

>>701332701332

I'm not sure why people still make such a big deal over heat, calling it implausible or unbelievable that ponies would experience it.  Humans experience hormonal changes when they're ovulating as well, ours are simply much less noticeable than the effects are in other species, but even so, many women can regale you with tales of mood swings, irrationality, and increased desire during their ovulation cycle, we even have a rather common term for it... PMS.  Just because we're "civilized" doesn't mean nature has stopped playing matchmaker with our hormones

The author has made note of this a few times in similar arguments that RD's heat doesn't debilitate her, she simply knows that she has impulse control issues and is attempting to deal with them as best she can.  If you knew that every time you saw a cookie, you would immediately desire (on a primal and hormonal level) to buy it and scarf it down for that rush of endorphins, and that you had terrible impulse control so you'd generally just give in to the desire rather than fight it down, would you plan regular trips to a bakery?  RD knows that her body is giving her a biological imperative to mate, but she's smart enough to fight the urges and to even take steps to avoid temptation since she doesn't want kids.  Sounds like a rather civilized outlook IMHO.

>>702836702836

Yeah, I get what you're saying. It's more personal opinion than anything, really. It doesn't bother me that much (and it helps that this story is great).

Awesome

>>702836702836 Because in most stories on this site, heat is basically used like mind control and a cheap excuse to get characters to have sex, not to mention that the animals here in the real world will want anything to fuck them while they're in heat, and it only exists in animals specifically so they can breed because they live entirely by instinct and nothing else. It's handled here decently (the only reason it's that strong in Rainbow is because she and Lero have been intimate  a lot), but it's a bit fishy to have something that overpowers you like that. It would be a rapist dream come true (in other stories, not this one). I mean, a sapient creature needing something like that?

What if I'm on a diet, or have diabetes, but I see a cookie and can't control myself? That would be bad for me, and comparing hunger and taste to body issues? I think having a full bladder and trying not to pee would be a better analogy, especially if you work on other people's houses, and you're not allowed in the house, so you decide to pee in the bushes, the home owner sees you, and you're fired. That's basically what heat is, something you can't control, you get desperate, and do anything to get rid of it, except instead of losing something, you get pregnant. That's why some people don't like heat in stories, it's contrived. I do like how it's handled in this fanfic (coolers? That's a bit awkward), but not much anywhere else (PMS and heat aren't the same thing by a long shot. I know that's not what you meant, but reading your comment, it sure seems like it).

Nice world building you have going here, first time I ever read a story with completely reversed social norms with gender. So a Mare saying, "Get back in the field!" to a stallion would be like a man saying, "Get back in the kitchen!" to a woman.

And Damn! So Lyra is like a magical Bruce Lee in terms of power?? I wonder, in this story is Lyra Human obsessed as usual? She has been brought up a few times, and from what we know she likes Lero, so I'm guessing we'll actually met her sometime in the story.

This is absolutly amazing. I've jjust finished reading this for the second time; the fact that the author still manages to compel the reader even when the reader knows whats going to happen shows great talent and skill.

The only others books I have read more than once are actual published novals and non-fiction.

Seriously great work!

Read the whole thing. I love the cultural aspect that this explores with their romance rituals. Very well done.

aww you got rid of the awesome other picture. This is obviously more of a romance then a straight up clop (even tho the mutliple sex scenes) and I always liked the other one because it wasn't "cloppy"

Here's the next chapter in our continuing story, hope you all enjoy it as much as I did

The next chapter will be up soon as well (once I get it formatted) so be ready for more.