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Fizzy Orange


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Set in RainbowDoubleDash's Lunaverse. Trixie greatly underestimated the amount of paperwork expected from a Representative of the Night Court of Luna. At Lyra's suggestion she decides to hire an assistant to help her out around the office. She puts up ads all over town and gets ready to receive interviewees.

What could possibly go wrong?

For official chronological order of Lunaverse stories, and everything Lunaverse, please come visit us in the Lunaverse Group!

Many thanks to FredMSloniker for editing and proofreading.

First Published
24th May 2012
Last Modified
28th May 2012
#1 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Looking cool so far dood. The only thing I would consider doing is making the interviewee montage longer (because those are hilarious) and have Pinkie appear somewhere in the middle of the montage as well, to satisfy the comedy rule of three.

#2 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>638472 I'm honestly not sure how I could stretch the montage any longer, I'm out of questions. Don't worry about the rule of three though :pinkiehappy:

#3 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>638847

Well, you could have Berry Punch show up drunk. That'd be funny.

#4 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>638859 Good idea! I just slipped her in there ;)

#5 · 134w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This sounds like fun. :pinkiesmile:

I'll give it a looksee.

#6 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

That gave me a good chuckle, I'm definitely interested to see where you'll go with this. The lyra opening killed me, blank staring Trixie down. Classic :pinkiehappy:

#7 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Oh, goody. Either she's

a) trying to get her own flank in the big chair

b) she's one of Luna's spies (Luna being good but not THAT good)

c) she's one of Chrysalis's spies.

d) she thinks Corona is just misunderstood.

or

e) She's somepony we've met before.:twilightblush:

#8 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>640342 She can't be Twilight because this story is set before Boast Busted :twilightblush:

>>639624 Hope you like it! :pinkiehappy:

>>640224 Thanks! Glad you like my pre-opening stinger. If I do other Lunaverse story I'll certainly use that format.

#9 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This looks like it'll be good! :moustache:

#10 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

This looks pretty good but I noticed a few spelling errors here and there. If you'd like I could PM you with them or post them here in the comments, not sure what you'd prefer.

#11 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

One does not simply decline Pinkie Pie :pinkiehappy:

This is great so far; do go on, good Sir.

#12 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Really?  I'm going to be the first to say it?

Well, okay...

#13 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

THAT MOONDANCER'S A SPY!

*Please insert Team Fortress 2 meme here*

#14 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Hmm, methinks moondancer is up to no good.

*Everyone looks to Striker, with this expression :facehoof: *

Okay, funny montage there. Although I have an odd feeling Pinkie would've been perfect for the job. :pinkiehappy:

#15 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Hee hee, loved it.

but I would find it hilarious if there is nothing wrong with Moondancer.

or if there is, Pinky ends up with the job :pinkiehappy:

#16 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

Quite good. Could use a quick proofread. I'm at work on my phone right now but I'll post some edit notes after I get home tonight. As long as Mr. Spiced Rum doesn't end up monopolising my time..

#17 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>640833 & >>642203 I've corrected a few typos someone pointed out but if you find anything glaring don't worry about pointing them out. I'm not actually a native english speaker AND I tend to type fast AND write late at night while sleepy AND my keyboard has a few tricky keys, bad combo. Sometimes I type a completely different word from what I intended to... I don't always catch those mistakes sadly. :facehoof:

>>641029 Thank you :pinkiehappy:

>>641074>>641632 I expected those sooner :derpytongue2:

Thank you everypony else for the good words!!

#18 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>641845

Sorta' wondering why she was even applying. She has a job with the Cakes, after all...

OR DOES SHE?

(Hey, if you're writing a story for the Lunaverse, you're making the canon just as much as me...)

>>640612

By the way, I don't suppose choosing Moondancer was due to that Londo to Vir quote I posted in the List of Ideas thread, was it?

i.e., "What is it now, you moon-faced assassin of joy?"

Probably just a coincidence and me reading too much into things.

#19 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>643084 Maybe subconsciously. I just like the name really :twilightblush: plus she's someone who 'exists' in the canon-verse. Even if we never saw her.

#20 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>643084 Good to hear! *Scribbles down note for 'Ill Communication'

#21 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>643115 Can't wait to read your story!

#22 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>643148 Thanks. :twilightsmile: I can't wait to write my story. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiegasp::derpytongue2:

#23 · 134w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 1 ·

>>643076

EDIT:

Good job on getting an editor, and good job on editing, FredMSloniker. The chapter reads more smoothly now.

#24 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Trixie is a complete ass! I love it! I don't think I was particularly good at getting that idea across in LNLD, so this is really helping to remind us that even in different universes, there are constants...A is still A...and Trixie is still Trixie. And Trixie, I see you've you've acquired a book on transmogrification ever since the, ah...well. You and Lyra will be on speaking terms for "Boast Busted," anyway.

(On that note I actually like that entire bit. All sorts of little bits and pieces for prospective or existing authors to plug in, in order to make a more complete universe).

I do wonder what Trixie did during Winter Wrap Up...for some reason I can see her with Rarity, actually, making bird nests. Perhaps on directive from Luna, who'd still want her to make up with Rarity and the Apples for the Longest Night fiasco, even if she is more or less forgiven.

And as for Moondancer, or should I say, Zizanie...a quick Google search reveals zizanie to be French for "ill feeling, fued, or rivalry." Interesting, very interesting indeed...she may be some kind of spy or something but right now my sympathies are sort of with her, due to Trixie being an ass. And I sympathize with her over Trixie's eating habits...which I will explain, eventually, I actually do have an explanation for it that makes a degree of sense.

I'm right now wondering if "Discordian scum" is a generic insult or a specific jab at her. Screwball's long-lost sister? Tainted lineage is mentioned, but then again insofar as Blueblood is concerned that could mean anything.

And Prince Blueblood...well well well. Viscount, eh? That's a step up from the former Baron. Good for you! What's got your knickers in a twist, though?

#25 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>652766 All I'll say is: :pinkiehappy:

#26 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Nice, this is shaping up to be pretty interesting.

#27 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Ooooh, this is good! I can't wait to find out what happens next!

Dammit Trixie, why are your eating habits so... "exotic"?

#28 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

I hope that "Moondancer" has something really evil planned.  After Trixie's treatment, she could spend the next few chapters punching puppies in face and  I'd still feel sorry for her.    :trollestia:

#29 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Loved it. Trixie is gloriously Trixie here, yet we know by now she's not a complete bitch... just an insufferable one to work for heh. Love those little details your leaving, paying it forward for new authors to work off of :twilightsmile: Really cool of you to do.

I know 'moondancer' is up to no good but I still feel for her in a way, with having Trixie (and Blueblood as well in a way) as boss. Mystery still lingers though... definitely looking forward to more.

#30 · 134w, 1d ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

...and the plot thickens.  I must say, while I figured she was lying about her background, I was quite surprised to find that even her name is fake, since Moondancer is an actual name from the show.  Also, something involving Blueblood, wonder if it's just typical Night Court political shenanigans or something deeper.

Anyway, loved Trixie being a thoughtless ass and showing off her unique tastes in food, especially when the two intersect with the Coffee scene.

I'm not sure I much agree with your interpretation of Rainbow Dash though.  From what I observed, I had thought that she often showed up late, left early, and was generally unavailable when not officially on call, but that she didn't usually skip whole days at a time, especially not multiple times per week.

#31 · 134w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653327

Mabye she's just particularly bad this month or something.

#32 · 134w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653327>>653672 Or maybe Trixie is just exagerating about missing entire days instead of, say, an afternoon :trixieshiftleft:

#33 · 134w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653689

Well, RD was certainly missing on the days leading up to the LNLD, which I can't imagine a weather manager is supposed to take off...

As weather manager, though, I imagine she can write her own schedule. So it wouldn't surprise me if she only schedules herself for, like, one day a week at max and then has herself "on call" for all the others. Or something.

#34 · 134w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

Well, the plot thickens! Blueblood conspiring here. We see some of the first hints of the cutthroat nature of the Night Court. Moondancer... yeah. Trixie's tastes are... bucked up. :pinkiesick:

#35 · 134w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653672>>653689

I figure Rainbow spent the time trying to seduce Con Mane and steal the plans for the Orbital Harmony Laser.

Also, Pia Ikea is now Lunaverse canon :trixieshiftright:

#36 · 134w, 23h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653702 My guess is that Rainbow Dash has a bad tendancy to change her schedule at the last minute.

#37 · 134w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653760

I feel I missed something with that reference.

#38 · 134w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653794

Pia Ikea, the Ikea pony. Trixie's cabinet sounds like it came from an Ikea.

#39 · 134w, 22h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653833 Oh my god the joke about the Quill & Sofa guy stealing the pencils to sell them is HILARIOUS. :rainbowlaugh:

#40 · 134w, 21h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

A now for the oh so annoying wate between chapters.

#41 · 134w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>653702 >>653765

Hmm, yes Rainbow setting her own hours and changing them last minute is definitely more like what I had been working with.  Also, good point on Trixie is probably exaggerating, though given that the reports she files apparently affect Dash's pay, I find myself feeling a little sorry for Rainbow.  Then again maybe part of the reason she's been getting away with her work habits so long is that the Night Court representative exaggerating stuff like that is nothing new to Trixie's time in the position, and so the higher ups gloss-over/ignore most of those reports.

#42 · 134w, 20h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

>>654239 Well Trixie doesn't decide on Rainbow Dash's pay, she just reports on changes in schedule. In my mind the weather patrol gives Trixie their schedule in advance and she passes it along to the central weather bureau along with the rest of her paperwork so if there is last minute changes to it she has to report them.

#43 · 134w, 4h ago · · · Chapter 2 ·

This is a pretty intense chapter! I'm so glad I don't work for Trixie. You've done a great job with Trixie's weird appetite, too. And possible Discord influence? The plot thickens...

#44 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

And here we are folks! Last chapter of my little story. I hope you're not dissapointed! :twilightsmile: I know it was short but I always intended it to be a short story. the only thing I feel could have used to be showcase would be Pokey Pierce's predisposition for bad puns. I think it's a fun character trait for a guy who started as a visual gag.

Now just like RainbowDoubleDash released the Lunaverse to the care of others, I have no problem with anypony else using Zizanie in their Lunaverse story! Have fun with her :raritywink:

#45 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I Iove the fact that Zizanie thought that Trixie was intentionally being a jerk, only for Trixie to completely wreck that theory.

#46 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

:rainbowderp: This, this changes things.

#47 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

I see you've kept the fine Lunaverse tradition of every villain escaping :rainbowwild:

Kidding aside though this was a pretty enjoyable story, that made for a lot or world building. Trixie was gloriously trixie as always but she's taking baby steps at becoming a better pony at least. The climax was pretty cool, always been a fan of illusionist in a battle setting.

Zazine is an interesting character of dubious origins and thought she's not avialble for later use we well... we don;t quite know what she is :derpyderp2: :derpyderp1:should be interesting to see what people come up with. That and Blueblood looming in the background for some inevitable Night Court Intrigue.

Overall though good job Fizzy :yay:

#48 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>660551 Yeah I love that joke.

>>660558 Yeah, with Snails that gives us two male characters added to the secondary characters line up! :trixieshiftleft::raritywink:

>>660589 It's Zizanie, not Zazine :derpytongue2: thanks for the good words :pinkiehappy:

#50 · 133w, 6d ago · · · Chapter 3 ·

>>660693 What could you POSSIBLY mean by that dear? :trollestia:

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