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FlutterSky1979


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All her life Rainbow Dash has dreamed of one day joining the Wonderbolts, the legendary aviation team of Equestria. Now that she's finally on the verge of making the squad, a problem she never thought she'd have has reared its ugly head and destroyed her focus.

With Dash's chances of passing her final examination becoming slimmer with each passing second, will she be able to pull herself together and overcome this new challenge, or will her indecision swallow her up and put an end to her career before it's even begun?

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 14 )

Yeah, I'm definitely interested with this one, Sky. Looking forward to the next few chapters! ^^

Just read all the chapters posted so far. You need to separate lines of dialogue - this story looks very much like a wall of text. Other than that, I'm enjoying it so far, and I particularly liked the part in chapter three with Fluttershy shedding a tear and a cold meal getting colder.

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Thanks a lot! As for the format of the story, I'm going to fix it after the last chapter's up. I know it looks pretty bad right now, but I'm working on it. Thanks for reading ^_^

Alright, I wanna start by saying that I don't EVER comment on a story, EVER! That being said, I HAD to comment on your story! I FREAKING LOVE THIS STORY! Now normally I'm not a fan of excessive cursing in a story, but your's was done so naturally that it didn't feel too unnecessary so I didn't mind it as much. Also, your formatting seems a little off, but again it's an ignorable problem. Seriously, this story had me captivated from beginning to end, and I hope that it gets more popular, it deserves to be on equestria daily or something! I'd even go as far as this may be my current favorite story! It was a fun read and I hope to see more from you in the future. Please, more Dash X Pinkie! You do it so well :twilightsmile:

Thank you so much for the support! And thank you so much for your opinion, it really means a lot :pinkiehappy: Rest assured that there will be more in the future, though this story has reached its end. The second story is still in the planning phase but it should be up within the next few weeks so keep watching for it. And again, thank you so very very much for the favs and comment :yay:

GAHH. Why is your dialogue so FUCKING PRO? You understand mane 6 dynamics so well, it's like I'm reading a transcript from a new episode of the show itself. Except with swearing. Hehe.

Also, I love the turtle. Silly Dash, having conversations with herself. But how does Tank live in a house made out of clouds when the other ponies have to use spells?

I feel like this whole story could have easily been Appledash. Your portray a really unique friendship here, one that we don't get to see very often in the show. Anyways, there hasn't really been any shipping yet, so I'll save my judgement on your storytelling skills for later.

Eeyup... so far so good!

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Thank you so much :pinkiehappy:
You know, it's funny. People either say my portrayals of the mane 6 here is either completely ooc, or dead on. Granted I haven't had a lot of feedback, but whatever lol. As for Tank...Uh...He can chill in Rainbow's house because...Magic?
Seriously though, why hasn't anyone else said something about this? Why didn't I think about that?! D:

The wonderbolts are part of the military? Not sure how I feel about that. I'm sure it has significance.

Also, D'AAAAWWWWUH FLUTTERSHY :raritydespair::raritycry::fluttercry::applecry::fluttershyouch::applejackconfused:

From a writer's standpoint I see the appeal of ending the story right there. I also get that you're trying to show how our newfound Pinkiedash date is much more significant than the race.

But come on! The outcome of the race is related to us in the form of ONE SENTENCE? :facehoof:

Anyways, friggin loving this. Now that I'm up to date, I'm never gonna get off your back! You gotta write more! :heart:

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Yep XD
If you think that's upsetting, originally I wasn't even gonna spend that much time talking about their date in the follow up :derpytongue2:
Besides, the race really wasn't that spectacular. They got the signal to go, and Dash flew a lot faster than the rest of them. It was three laps and it wasn't even a close one. And that is why I didn't write about the race :rainbowlaugh:
Anyways, thanks for taking the time to read, and thanks for commenting :)
I'll be updating Try, Try, Try soon.

1216436 well ya know, you da boss of your own story. I can't wait for more. Well, I can, but I dot wanna!! :raritycry: As always, good luck and Celestiaspeed!


That was awesome but now i have to wait for more.:fluttercry: Oh well love the story:pinkiehappy:

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Thanks for the support! I'm glad you enjoyed it :twilightsmile:
I'm actually about to finish the 2nd chapter of my Rainbow x Pinkie story's second part: Try, Try, Try so hopefully the wait won't be too long!

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