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Victor Frost 309

Joined October 2011
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    Victor Frost's Stories (3)

    • The Conversion Bureau: Sidelines
      A young professor starts a search for answers but gets an adventure he can never tell a soul about.

      45,056 words · 1,867 views · 53 likes · 8 dislikes
    • An Understanding of Sacrifice
      Twilight uses magic to better understand the choices of those who sacrificed their lives in war.
      5,016 words · 765 views · 14 likes · 4 dislikes
    • A Conversation of One.
      It's often said that a writer holds his characters in his head. What if he stops writing?
      1,234 words · 72 views · 2 likes · 1 dislikes

    The pony race and humans have lived together in harmony for centuries. A peaceful race, the ponies never really felt the need for war or violence to solve world problems. Things always seemed a lot friendlier with the ponies involved. Only recently have ponies been integrating into the modern human society. Ponies have lived in isolated, calm lands for many generations, but with over-population becoming a risk for the equine communities, moving from Canterlot to Newark was a common occurrence in these times.

    Through warfare and species-exclusive diseases, humans have begun a steady decline in population and general health. The ways humans have destroyed the world around them, through pollution, greed and unhealthy living conditions, have led the humans to realize the error of their ways, but it had been too late. Ponies, being a hardy, largely pacifistic folk, had slowly become the majority in world population (but only just so). It was becoming clear the time of the human was coming to a close. Soon, scientists of both human and pony worked together to create a formula to, in a sense, "ponify" a human, and hopefully keep society from collapsing. Their long term plan was to start a thriving, pony-centric world for generations to come.

    In this interim period, humans were plagued with mass confusion and doubt as to what to do. Most humans understood the decline in the population, and would much prefer to be a pony. With a down-to-earth, carefree lifestyle, the possibility of flying or using magic to their advantage, and current human health problems a thing of the past, what could possibly go wrong? Some, however, are less trusting

    Michael Frost is 28 year-old ex-physics instructor, inventor, and among the few humans who don't want to be ponified. But when his best friend tells him he's taking the plunge into ponydom, Michael decides it's time to dig deeper.

    First Published
    14th Nov 2011
    Last Modified
    15th Nov 2011

    Comments ( 52 )

    #1 · Chapter 22 · 79w, 2d ago · · ·
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    LOVE IT

    #2 · Chapter 22 · 79w, 2d ago · · ·
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    One of the best The Conversion Bureau stories i have ever reviewed since i joined

    Pyros Overall grade for :The Conversion Bureau: Sidelines By Sonic  5/5stars

    you earned it

    #3 · Chapter 22 · 79w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I give this story 500,000/5 stars. This is easily the best conversion Bureau story I have ever read.

    #4 · Chapter 22 · 79w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Very very well written.  I'm definitely in agreement that this is one of the best Bureau stories.  There are a few things that keep me from giving it full stars.  Parts of the story seem a tad rushed at points, and there's a few too many convenient happenings to my mind, especially Coldwell's sudden shift from fanatical pony-hater to basically pointing to the metaphorical big red destruct button and telling Michael to push it.  I dunno, I suppose a case could be made that he had a last minute change of heart in the face of impending nano-death, but its still the only major issue I have with the story.  Overall, really well done, congrats. :twilightsmile:

    #5 · Chapter 22 · 79w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Great story overall. I don't really see Twilight wanting to stay as a human, though. 4/5

    #6 · Chapter 12 · 79w, 1d ago · · ·
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    Oh, I wish I could see the face of the princess right now. xD

    #7 · Chapter 21 · 78w, 6d ago · 1 · ·
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    the doctor who reference is amazing... ∞/5 stars

    #8 · Chapter 22 · 78w, 4d ago · · ·
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    THIS WAS AMAZING!!! 5/5!!!

    #9 · Chapter 9 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·
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    ""Life is wonderful, everyone is so nice, and you can just do what you love all day.""

    Ye- no.... You cant run around with a ACR 6.8 and shoot things. not even just wood targets, why? no thumbs, and even worse.. no guns.

    #10 · Chapter 22 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·
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    >>32585  because humans are better than ponies duh!  you dont get CoD, Battlefield, and guns, tanks, weapons, radar, laser scanning, cool buttons, fighter jets in equestria. If i had a choice i would stay on earth, plus... fingers :D

    #11 · Chapter 22 · 73w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I would make a much longer comment but I am tired and need to sleep

    But great nonetheless

    #12 · Chapter 22 · 73w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I would make a much longer comment but I am tired and need to sleep

    But great nonetheless

    #13 · Chapter 10 · 71w, 3d ago · · ·
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    hm holes, walls, crush in a land with a giant deadly wall, O GOD NO :flutterrage:

    #14 · Chapter 22 · 71w, 3d ago · · ·
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    #15 · Chapter 11 · 71w, 3d ago · · ·
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    nice zecora rhymin, MIKE IN EQUESTRIA :pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

    #16 · Chapter 12 · 71w, 3d ago · · ·
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    "pegacorn" officially its known as "alicorn" :twilightblush::facehoof: but whatevs XD

    #17 · Chapter 2 · 71w, 16h ago · · ·
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    This seems to be an interesting idea for a fanfic, now I'm going to read the next chapter!:twilightsmile:

    #18 · Chapter 3 · 71w, 16h ago · · ·
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    I love you've already incorperated a well known pony:scootangel:

    #19 · Chapter 4 · 71w, 16h ago · · ·
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    I think it's funny how everyone was just so happy, it's like "hey guys were gonna invade your planet and turn you all into our species Kay?" then everyone claps... :yay:

    #20 · Chapter 5 · 71w, 16h ago · · ·
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    I think you kept fluttershy in character, good job:pinkiehappy:

    #21 · Chapter 6 · 71w, 16h ago · · ·
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    Huh.. This is getting more and more interesting by the chapter

    #22 · Chapter 7 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Its nice that you made michael and twilight sparkle have a good coversation and not having them argue the whole time.

    #23 · Chapter 8 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy:

    #24 · Chapter 9 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    >>40080

    No guns? Well that kinda sucks...

    #25 · Chapter 10 · 71w, 15h ago · 1 · ·
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    "Trush me i'm a scientist."  <------ best line so far

    #26 · Chapter 11 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    This story has taken a turn, for better or for worse I can't wait to learn.

    #27 · Chapter 12 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    My gut tells me that shit is about to hit the fan...

    #28 · Chapter 13 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Oh crap a bomb!!! Shit just got REAL!:twilightsmile:

    #29 · Chapter 15 · 71w, 15h ago · · ·
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    Why does this make me sad?

    #30 · Chapter 18 · 71w, 12h ago · · ·
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    Oh no :pinkiegasp::fluttershbad::rainbowhuh::raritydespair::twilightangry2::ajbemused:

    #31 · Chapter 22 · 62w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I quite enjoyed this.

    #32 · Chapter 22 · 60w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>312685

    Glad to hear it!

    #33 · Chapter 22 · 60w, 19h ago · · ·
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    Hmm. I enjoyed the story.  But two big things bugged me.

    Magic can apparently be 'vaccinated against', and it's possibly to reverse the ponyfication.

    Wouldn't it have been best to use both?  Humans are no longer forced to become ponies to deal with Equestria's magic, and those that became ponies can get returned if they want.  Suddenly, everyone's happy.

    That concept never seems to hit him.

    #34 · Chapter 11 · 60w, 6h ago · · ·
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    #35 · Chapter 17 · 60w, 4h ago · · ·
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    Pure awesomeness.

    BTW it isn't allonsi, it's allons-y.

    #36 · Chapter 19 · 60w, 4h ago · · ·
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    I play the saxophone (alto) and I was wondering what kind Michael was playing.. Good chapter. :twilightsmile:

    #37 · Chapter 22 · 60w, 3h ago · · ·
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    I call for a sequel. Unless there already is one.. I'm going to find out! ALLONS-Y! :rainbowlaugh:

    #38 · Chapter 22 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Great ending. This was the best TCB story i have ever read.  /)*3*(\

    #39 · Chapter 4 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    "We're facing overpopulation....let's ponify an entire species numbering in the billions." WHAT?!

    #40 · Chapter 13 · 59w, 1d ago · · ·
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    And it is about here Micheal starts to get a bit too unreal. Sudden magic powers capable of breaking Celestia's magic, earning the princess's trust in record time, volunteering to pass right back through the barrier he just worked his butt off to get through?

    Not too mention trying to replace someone's Element with an oc. I have nothing against oc and in fact I tend to like them....it's just having an oc step in for one of the EoH especially, since the one replacing the element of magic is a being that's relatively new too magic, is just a bit too much.

    #41 · Chapter 11 · 54w, 4d ago · · ·
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    OH MA GAWD!

    Sorry, but I he isn't forced to be ponified.

    #42 · Chapter 22 · 52w, 4d ago · · ·
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    masterpeice is the only word i can use to describe this story. ive seen too many conversion bureau storys that never seem to make sense or have countless mistakes.this is one of my favorite storys easily and as of such i give u 10/10 rating.

    #43 · Chapter 18 · 48w, 5d ago · · ·
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    I am dissapointed in the lack of comments. This is an engaging read. I like it.

    P.S. It's Alicorn, not Pegacorn.

    #44 · Chapter 10 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I enjoy stories that suddenly become exciting!:pinkiegasp:

    #45 · Chapter 11 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Seriously. The whole reason for ponification and the conversion bureaus is breeched by a horse hide. That is either awesome or stupid. Haven't decided yet.

    #46 · Chapter 13 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>402432 You have a very valid point.

    #47 · Chapter 13 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    I want to believe that Michael becoming magical was more of the reason he could pass through the barrier than the horse hide. So that makes it kind of awesome.

    #48 · Chapter 15 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Tad abrupt for my tastes actually. Should have been more a build up and little hints about Michael's past.

    #49 · Chapter 16 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This story has too many twists and turns that don't pay off so far.

    #50 · Chapter 19 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Oh my goodness...Those ponies are so....:pinkiecrazy:

    #51 · Chapter 21 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>34427 I thought so too.

    #52 · Chapter 22 · 18w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Certainly not a typical Conversion Bureau stories. The best TCB stories always do a good job at balancing out and countering the misanthropy of the original story. This does a good job of that. It is also unique with Michael having (albeit limited) magic and the humanification potion. Give you props for that. :pinkiehappy: However, I felt this story was all over the place; I felt like it was trying to do like half a dozen things at once. Michael's relationship with Twilight comes almost out of nowhere. I didn't feel it. :twilightsheepish: Overall, it's a good story, not the best I've read, but good. It'll certainly be on my mind if I ever take a stab at my own TCB story. Thanks for that at least.

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