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Bonding
Friendship
BFF’s
That is what Twilight want everypony to do and be, and with her new-won authorities as the Princess of Friendship, she can finally make it happen.
This time around , Twilight decided it was Celestia and Applejacks turn to become closer than ever, despite the two ponies protests...after all, they must have something in common , don’t they?
My entry for the Harmonist's JUNE CONTEST: WRITING PONY IS GO!
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Twas enjoyable to proofread/read <3
I did get a chuckle out of that!
6163899 weird, but good
Why didn't they talk about their Earth Pony Magic™?
I find your characterization of Applejack, with her random assault of the Princesses completely unbelievable
6164370 I dunno...felt like both needed to be earth ponies for that...
6164715 Alright, if you say so... and guess you downvoated huh?
6166195
You do know that as an alicorn, Celestia also has Earth Pony Magic™, right?
6166831 yes, but it's still not the most obvious discussion point and it's unecgesary to downvoat because of artistic choices.
Well, I finally got around to reading this (although I'm terribly sorry I couldn't go over it earlier: I was trapped in the south of France without internet).
As with a lot of your stories, I feel rather torn between what I think is a genuinely sweet and pleasant idea: Applejack and Celestia finding they have sisters and family in common, and the execution, namely the grammar, spelling (the usual deal) which will probably keep it from being enjoyable for a lot of people. Stuff like the awkward dialogue and word choices, even an improperly capitalized 'I', is just a real shame to see in a story that's just begging to be enjoyed by anyone who likes a bit of pleasant slice-of-life-ish discussion, like myself. I was actually rather surprised to see that you had an editor, really, since I don't feel like this is an edited story at all.
Thankfully, I think the story maintains the genuine, heartfelt feel I've come to expect from your stories, and though I think this one in particular could have benefitted from us seeing more of Celestia and Applejack try to get along before Celestia plays the sisters card, it remains a pleasant read.
If I were to find ways to improve this story, I'd suggest making it longer, showing us a bit more of this discussion the pair are having, and finding an editor who can do a bit of a better job, because behind those two things, I still find it in myself to like the wholesome, natural, and distinctly My-Little-Pony-ish one-shot.
6220036
Thanks for the comment, and yes, I need to use an editor that's not my also Swedish gf...
And, yes, many find that There should be more in the middle, and the reason it's not, is because I was stuck in the middle
6221694 Probably. There's nothing wrong with using people you know, but there's so much that I'd like to see improved in the story.
I think I'd personally have gone for them trying to find activities they could enjoy together, and finding nothing worked. Applejack could try playing cards or horseshoes, for example, and Celestia wouldn't know how to play, and Celestia could try introducing Applejack to her job, which would go right over Applejack's head. Something like that, I suppose.
The point still gets across, I suppose, but I wouldn't have minded more of them interacting.
6222047
Yeah
Well, that's what happens when you totally lack direction and basic facts about the idea.
The first entry idea at all was Celestia and Aj getting drunk and having a threesome with Thunderlane
The second idea was Celestia and Aj kidding around and talking about Annoying sisters.
Thesecond idea became this, now with a crazy, aggressive princess of friendship
6222078 Well, if you're going to be a Princess of Friendship, you might as well be a good one.
6222100 yep
It was a great read, and here is a little something pertaining to how Celestia and Applejack bonded over their love for their sisters.
“The truth is, everyone is going to hurt you. You just got to find the ones worth suffering for.” ― Bob Marley
6504161 Yes, oh my gosh it fit then so perfectly I can't even...
6504179 Glad you liked it.
6504275 I do :)