Um.... I can't even think of a bit of helpful critism for this. I'm sorry, but it just plain sucks. You didn't even do the script format right.

that was officially the worst fic I have ever had the displeasure of reading. Please do not write again, I gave you a chance to improve your stories and they are just getting worse.

Twilight with her computer skills and smarts knocked 3 of them out by a plan she hatched in her head

YES BECAUSE THERE ARE COMPUTERS IN EQUESTRIA!!! holy shit this is simply terrible, and to make it worse you adding unnecessary cursing. You need to stop writing.

What's the point of making "stories" every single day that are just going to be deleted later? This is seriously like the third or fourth day in a row that I've seen one of these from you (and I doubt I caught on right away, so I imagine you've been doing this for longer than that), and they're always gone from the site a handful of hours later. If you're going to troll, why wouldn't you want to at least leave a legacy of it? If you were a bit more subtle about it, your stories would stick around pissing people off for ages, but instead you insist on writing these...things. I get that you don't care about it from the perspective of a writer, but I can't even understand what's going on here from the perspective of a troll. It's like you're going out of your way to cut your own fun in half.

What?

Your short comeback story for all your bad fics? More like your quick fallback story into yet another terrible fic! Seriously, what motivates fools to write crap like this? I'm sorry, but this is...ugh. Atrocious isn't even a good enough word! If you are old enough to know how to use a computer, and old enough to know how to type, you have no excuses for not being able to write something even SLIGHTLY worth reading. Seriously, I suggest you take a few more years of English classes, read some GOOD stories, and learn how to write PROPERLY. Good luck to you. You're gonna need it.

please go read my stories, hopefully it'll give u an idea of how to write. I know my fics aren't perfect but this is atrocious

Umm TOO MANY SPELLING MISTAKES!!!!!!!! sorry but it's pretty

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Comeback DUDE a chapter needs at least 1000 chapters you only have a thousand period

It is spelled X not ex the type of X you put was like in ex-girlfriend not like the letter X

I'm not even gonna comment anymore cause this fic is so horrible

Flutter shy,"Meep.": Two mistakes in this sentence, 1: It is Fluttershy 2: She says "EEP" not Meep.

Sorry I know I said I wouldn't comments but I couldn't stand it

you know... it sucked so badly and pissed off so many people i think im going to thumbs up, you make my storys look better, plus i feel bad for you, if you want help... fixing these into real storys with more then 3000 words per chapter send me a pm

Flutter shy,"Meep." (laughs) when i read that horribal like i thought of the road runner "meep meep" hahaha so bucking horrible

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slender MAN?! you mean slenderpony, slendermane or even slenderstallion/mare would be better

This story made me want to kill myself.

This is the most irrelevant fanfic I have ever seen. It doesn't show any of the mane 6's personalities. You have probably only seen one episode of my little pony, most likely involving The Cutie Mark Crusaders. Also, you probably read one creepypasta about some random sighting of Slenderman because you obviously have no knowledge on that topic. I was going to read all four chapters to get a good laugh, but after reading this one, I just can't bring myself to do it. You shall be burned!!!

After seeing that this chapter has only 188 words, I decided that reading this wouldn't make a difference because it's so short. I was very wrong. What I read here today added tremendously to the eternal swirling torrent of radioactive diarrhea forced forever into my mind by your disgusting abomination which you call writing. Fuck you.

This chapter made me want to set myself on fire and inject my legs with liquid fecal matter.

I read the first paragraph, then closed the window to go clean my brain of the horridness of this fic :

Wish me luck, I'm going to attempt to read every chapter.

AFTER READING: KIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIILL MEEEEEEEEEEEEE

YOU!! YEAH YOU! DON'T YOU EVER, EVER AGIAN-

Ahem, this sucked...a lot...I'm not kidding, I can't describe what I would to if I could get at you through the internet

FUCK YOU PIESES OF FUCKING SHIT

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My eyes. Let me set them on FIRE. And EYE BLEACH!

>>11068321106832 Oh. It's you. You still owe me a game of Poker!

stop. just no. dont write. please. no

WTF IS THIS SH**

WHAT THE FUCK IS WRONG WITH THIS OH YEAH EVRYTHING IS FUCKING SHIT