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This story is a sequel to Never Judge A Book By Its Cover
Luna has taken a filly as student in magic.
But not everypony agrees with her choice when that filly is an earth pony.
Editing and pre-reading by: Web of Hope, shutaro and Dusk Watch
Cover image by The Paragon
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Didn't even started, but already insta-fave + like!
I was under the impression that it was a one-shot without plans for a sequel...
Wait, why am I even... complaining?
Ediit:
Missing 'of', per chance?
You know, this whole organisation reminds me of Sunset.
Oh, and Celestia, there won't be dark times, the fic is missing the dark tag!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png
Oh, wow, a sequel! And darker and edgier!
Yet another story to add to my reading list. That makes what? 12 in progress stories that I am reading. This fandom comes out with so many good stories that I cant finish them before another one takes ahold.
But still very interesting
it has a very interesting story line and i can't wait for more...
i love luna!
1229264 Oups! Thanks.
Yes... It was a one shot story. But then some guy came up and said "What if?"
Said just enough to get my stupid brain started.
I just cannot wait for ur update!!!
THIS IS SOOOO /)
(\ AWESOME!!!!!!!!!
LET IT BEGIN
Illuminati type group in Equestria... wow... lets see how Twilight defeats them
THE SUSPENSE IS KILLING ME!
1237910 Good... Good...
Good!
A really interesting start!
----
Frankly speak, I don't really love to read sad/tradegy story. Because I usually cry for the story.. (Damn.. I'm a male adult..)
Especially at the end..
Oops.. But I'd love to keep reading your fiction. It has a really good beginning!
Keep writing plz and MOAR!
Saturday morning, reading time!
And I agree theMyth said..
"The suspense is killing me"
Really attractive story!
Back to work.. (sigh)
The killing is suspensing me! The me is killing suspension! Erm... The suspension is killing me!
Shining Armour and Twilight are not going to be merciful if something happens to their parents...
I take it your editor/prereader was unavailable? You have mail.
And I'm calling it now: It's Prince Blueblood! It's always Blueblood! Unless it's the gardener. Or maybe it's Fancy Pants?
BADASS TWILIGHT ACTIVATED!
Very good and well-written fiction!
Especially I love the fiction reasonably talking about the possible Equestria story (not a fairy one).
I also enjoy your setting of Luna.
This is pretty cool and legit and that may be one of the reasons why subjects were afraid of her before.
There are similiar ideas from the following artwork (and his ref fiction and music "not a hero")
farm9.staticflickr.com/8295/8013789023_4a85d4704f.jpg
http://zedrin.deviantart.com/art/Not-a-Hero-328176892
Great artwork from Zedrin
And some of his idea was from another good fiction
Whisper Sun Silent Moon
GJ! And I'll keep reading your great fiction.
Best wishes!
1320730 Editor? Prereader? I have no such fancy people around.
Thanks plenty for the corrections you sent me. It's really appreciated.
Ooh so Twilight's family was one of the faction that supported Celestia during the war 800 years prior to the story...
Cool take on the FiM verse, and I'm feeling the Assassin's Creed vibe from it. Can't wait for more!
(Can't wait for AC3 either, I've loved what I've seen so far!)
I NEED MORE //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Twilight_Sparkle.png
Yay for the slow ass update.
Huge thanks to Shutaro for the amazing pre-read.
I wasn't sure what the beginning meant. Could you have Twi ask Shining to repeat what he said?
Great chapter and... cyan...
nope, too dark... cyan is more 
If it was teal I'd say dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png but cyan...
1461672 Well, the magic goes with the eyes color, no?... Celestia being an exception to this rule.
pinkie.ponychan.net/chan/files/src/133756715454.png
But that's still kinda wrong... Also she has way too many roles in secret societies...
I like this story, I just finished reading the first one and reading this one has been very entertaining. I do suspect it will be a long story though, which makes it even better.
"....only a handful of times..."
Princess, what's a "hand"full?
1462037 Wait... what? In which chapter??
Ah-ha! Found it.
You should do an extra chapter just to explain how magic works in your story. The story is awesome and entertaining, but when the central point is "somepony who cant use magic, yet can undertand it better than any other who can use it" then, without limits or rules, sometimes it feels like magic is just there to be a deus ex machina.
Glad to see a update!
Keep reading.
1462452 I fully understand your point. Did you read the first one? I tried to give some bases to the magic stuff... But I admit it might have not been very clear.
Of course, the last thing I want is to do a Dragon Balls out of it where the characters pull stuff out of their asses without explanations.
Do you have any ideas?
1462534
Not many:
1)Spells seen in the show: Rarity's gem finder+Telekinesis on walls to make a cave in; Want it need it to distract guards; Twilight's (supposedly) anti-magic safeguard spell (WARNING: doesnt work on chaos magic); Trixie's weather spell; Twilight's 16 spell about wind; the obscurer the spell in canon the better.
2)Spells related to the details of a canon character: For example Twilight's dad has a moon for a cutie mark, shadowmancy? ilusions? licantropy? simple nightvision?, is good to check wiki for symbolism.
3)New spells for totally original characters: unless its backgrounds says otherwise (a royal guard, an elite magician, etc), magic for everyday mundane use.
4)Simple Telekinesis can be the best solution to any problem. Remember, even a needle can be fatal in the right place, one only needs to be clever.
Hope its help.
1462792 You actually had me do a double take on the spells used so far in both stories...
What was performed:
Azure:
- Conjured a Cupcake (After Twilight conjured a door out of nothing, that shouldn't be too hard)
- Teleportation
- Slightly modified magic detection
Twilight:
- Life Detection
- Magic Detection
- Teleportation
- Reality Bubble (Wasn't a plot device... Well beside showing how Twilight is best pony.)
- A kind of mind connection (Ok, this was a plot device)
- Mimicked the Changelings disguised spell (Shit... that was also a plot device)
Twilight's Parent:
- Force Field
We also know Twilight and her brother has a way to shield the city against the changeling's disguise and that their parents has a way to prevent Twilight from teleporting away. Alright... No more pulling spells out of my ass. Hopefully.
Amazing story. Can't wait to see more. Found two mistakes, but forgot to write them down :/ Nothing big though. keep up the great work.
This story is amazing, i was wondering when somepony would write a story about earth ponies learning magic!
And seeing as unlike "Never judge a book by its cover" there are very few errors and it's fun and easy to read it's well worth the thumbs.
Reeespect and please keep writing.
Hey there. First off, want to say that both this and the first story are great. Really love the concept, and can't wait to read more.
That said...you really...REALLY need to go back through this AND the first one and correct all the grammar errors. Seriously, I was almost turned off to these stories because of them, and I know other people who'll miss out on what are actually great stories for the same reason. I'm not normally such a grammar nazi, but they're just all over the place.
Other than that, like I said, great read, looking forward to seeing where this goes.
1495743 Happy to say that I had a pre-reader for the last 3 chapters. But yeah, I re-read the first one and I agree it's not pretty.
Another big thanks to Shutaro for the correction.
'Tis getting good.
This story is getting SWEETer than Pinkie's cupcakes.
Keep up the awesome work. It's amazing.
I could praise you and your story but meh... most of it was already said before soooo....
Twilight is really powerful here, talk about op, but well, it does make sense i quess.
Moar Azure otherwise good chapter :D
i suddenly have the urge to head butt a group of very evil unicorns... despite the very apparent risk to my brain -.-
No evidence of guilds in Equestria. If anything ,evidence against it. I'd change that to them exerting subtle influence on all her contacts, having them drop her contracts.
Changing the Hearthwarming Day story--- why? It doesn't add or even really change anything in the story. The canon would unfold the same way (the three tribes finding equestria, surviving the Windigoes, building a new nation, Discord takes over and is defeated by the Princesses, and then picking up with your narrative from there.) Important rule of fanfic: Don't change what doesn't need to be changed. Add something, don't completely revise it all.
A relatively good story. Unfortunately, the whole premise rides on having Princess Celestia carrying the Idiot Ball for close to a thousand years. She would have to be on a diet of loco weed to give a bunch of treasonous unicorns power over her government---- not just power over her government but nigh absolute power as an invisible conspiracy!
1497562 I'm not... at least that's not my feeling, or what my goal was. Only expanding on what was said in that episode. It was a theatrical play after all, nopony ever said it was a 1:1 representation of reality. The total absence of Celestia/Luna from that "historical" play was a bit weird for me. Was it before or after Discord?
1497616 Well, in her place, you would have continued a war that would end up with costing her her life?
A story as to why there is no king our queen? I literally peeked up at that. Must continue on. :D
1497636
As opposed to giving power over her government to those already plotting to kill her? Neville Chamberlain may have been stupid in dealing with Nazi Germany, but he wasn't stupid enough to give Hitler a position in his cabinet in exchange for a promise of peace!
1497838 She didn't give them power, at least not directly. Are you saying a
peopleponies elected council is similar to granting direct power to someone? You know, when I see the US politic right now, it feels the same. It's "elected" and comes with lot of good intention. But...