I have had those feelings of jealousy before it hurts

This is a story i can get behind keep it up

>>627363627363

Thank you so much, 501st, I will!  

>>627410627410

when might i expect updates? weekly, daily, or whenever you get around to it?

>>627418627418

I'll be updating this story a few times per week.  You can expect a chapter in the next few days!

>>627436627436

Good to hear

I love this story! Great characterization, a sweet story, I might just have a new favorite AppleDash fic. Keep going!

(I always love AJ and Dash teasing each other. Great job on that.)

(Edit to add: Ignore the haters. There are people who thumbs down every ship fic, or every AppleDash fic or something. All I know is that mine always get a few thumbs down, then a bunch of thumbs up. Strangely, my gen fic gets no thumbs down.)

Wow, this is really good so far! Like some others said, great characterization, and an interesting idea that I could actually see happening. Plus, Appledash. Can't go wrong with that Keep up the great work, I'm definitely gonna look out for more of this

>>627474627474

Oh, thank you for telling me that!  I was wondering why I was getting so many "thumbs down" so fast, I was worried.  

I'm glad you liked it!

>>627493627493

Thank you, Ladyhart.  I think I have some good ideas for the story, I hope you like where it goes!

Yay for Appedash

I hadn't realized it was just the one chapter up so far.

I'm liking this. Not only as a sucker for shipping, but it feels nice. It feels like it could lead into a well rounded situation, not something entirely shaded one direction or another.   Is nice.

>>629102629102

Sorry to trick you, ambion!  Don't worry, I'm already starting on the next chapter as we speak, so you won't have to wait too long.  I'm glad you like it!

This definitely has potential.  I'll be watching

I will be most certainly be keeping an eye on this.

>>629356629356

>>629377629377

Thanks for following, guys!

Interesting...

I can't believe no one is commenting about the plan.

Rd will try to run the farm? XD

Your characterization is spot-on, and your dialogue is excellent. The pacing is also pitch-perfect, so the story flows naturally; it doesn't feel like you're rushing anything, nor does it feel like you're lingering too long. I'll definitely keep an eye on this one.

>>630928630928

Thank you for the kind review, De Carabas.  

>>630072630072

You'll see!

>>632093632093But but...

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I need to learn....

I have been writing sad stuff all day, and I needed this like you wouldn't believe!

That was hilarious. Great job!

>>641534641534

I'm so glad it cheered you up, Bookplayer!  I'm didn't know it was going to be so silly, but I liked how it turned out.

It's decided, I'm definitely watching you.

Seriously, I love this story and the characterisation felt spot-on to me.

>>641618641618

Thank you, Lone Ranger.  I'm glad you liked my characterization, I worked hard on getting it right!

This was adorable! and sweet jesus did it make me laugh... I love the story! Keep up the good work!

>>641906641906

I'm glad you liked it!  So what do you think, should I add a "comedy" tag to the story...?

Oh shit son!

>>641929641929

ADD THAT TAG NAOW

:3

>>641929641929

Most definitely homie!

Stuff just got real!

Are we to be expecting some rainbowjack or appledash?

>>643796643796

Well I don't want to give anything away, but... probably.

Another awesome chapter! I'm really liking this so far, and your characterization is really accurate. Can't wait for more, keep up the great work

Faaaaantastic!!!

>>649416649416

Glad you like it, Trinary.  Thanks!

As always, perfect. Poor Dash, I just want to read more right away so that I know it gets better.

Keep up the great work!

>>647395647395

Can't wait for more?  *poof*  Well here's another chapter!

All is as expected

>>649481649481

Don't worry... I have a feeling it will get better.  But we have to get to the "Adventure" part of the story first!

>>649504649504

Didn't have to wait long for your Appledash part of the story!  

>>649512649512

Thought it was gonna progess through the story and she confesses feelings for her toward the end but still great job

Oh wow, this is shaping up quite nicely. Love how you're handling slightly-in-the-future head's-just-a-little-bit-bigger-than-it's-always-been Rainbow Dash. Very true to the spirit of her character.

You could probably use a good editor though. There are a few minor stumbles, like miscapitalizations and such.

No! NOOOO! After all that?!       You must upload more. You must, you must!  I need to know what happens!

>>650219650219

New Chapter once every three days!  

Gah! Cliffhanger! I'm glad you update quickly. Super awesome job, yet again. I actually leaned closer to my computer screen in apprehension at AJ's reaction, until I realized what I was doing and laughed keep it up

>>659206659206

Glad you liked it.  You can expect a chapter to be sent in sometime tomorrow!

I really love this story becauso its so different besides the other appledashfics =)

Cant wait for the next chapter!

>>661178661178

I really love this story becauso its so different

:)

besides the other appledashfics =)

:(

Edit: :)

>>662148662148

Why the sad Face?

Its a good thing that the story has a completly other plot than other Fics, it a reason why i love this

English is not my first language and a make a lot of grammatical and spelling errors, so maybe you misunderstood something.... ;)

>>663550663550

Oh, I'm sorry, it sounded like you were saying "it's so different, but it's not at all different from other appledash fics" which sort of made it sound sarcastic.  I'm glad you like it, I misunderstood!

Just amazing. The black dragon is awesome, and I LOVED AJ talking to Big Mac.

>>664737664737

Shucks, bookplayer, you always have the nicest reviews.  I'm glad you liked it!

Eee! This looks like a fairly interesting Appledash story :D /followed!

...

I approve of these developments.

I love this chapter too! I really wasnt expecting an "adventure-Story", but its great that it turn out to be one ;)

Dun dun dun

*hang up*

>>664914664914

Thanks for the follow!

>>664976664976

Glad you liked the adventurous parts.  I hope you like the next few chapters!

>>665109665109

I'm glad you do!  Yes, why not mix a little adventure and romance?

>>665305665305

Yes indeed.

Gah! So good! I really like the added adventure, I find it always makes a romance more interesting. I just hope Dash and AJ get out alright. Also, the idea of the black dragon and his power is pretty cool, too. Can't wait to read more, keep up the great work!

>>683295683295

I'm glad you think the black dragon is cool.  You need cool villains!  

Sorry this took so long. This chapter is great, I can't wait to find out what happens, and that dragon is voiced by Jeremy Irons, just so you know.

AND WHERE IS THE NEXT CHAPTER??? GET TO IT!!!! I LOVE IT I LOVE IT ILOVEITILOVEIT I. LOVE. IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIITTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I give it twenty mustaches out of five!

AND WHERE IS THE NEXT CHAPTER??? GET TO IT!!!! I LOVE IT I LOVE IT ILOVEITILOVEIT I. LOVE. IIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIITTTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I give it twenty mustaches out of five! >>688015688015

Emoticon rule!! Will nineteen suffice? (It's really twenty )

>>688023688023

I give up

>>685351685351

Jeremy Irons?  Great choice.  He's allowed to be the voice for any villain I ever write.

>>688023688023

Haha, wow, that's the most positive review I've ever gotten.  

>>689578689578

I try

... I REALLY did! Can't get the emoticons to work gud I JUST DON'T KNOW WHAT WENT WRONG!!!

Ooooh, brilliant! The adventure part of this story is wonderfully done, fast paced and vivid. This is so going on my rec list when it's done. I have no doubt.

I. Want. More. NOW.

Just kidding (well, actually not, I really want more) but your story is awesome. Dash would be proud of a writer like you.

Just like bookplayer said. The story is so well written and fast paced that getting to the end of each chapter leaves you craving for more. Really badly

Keep them updates coming!!

>>696428696428

Thank you, bookplayer.  I'm honored you are thinking about adding it to your rec list!

>>696643696643

Thanks, rainbowHash!  Don't worry- I update a chapter every three days.  You can expect a new one on the 7th!

By the way, are you rainbowHash, the mod from r/idliketobeatree?  If you aren't, that is going to seem like a really odd thing I just said.

AGONIZING CLIFFHANGER!!!

NO! SHE CAN'T LEAVE RD ALONE!!! I FEEL TEARS COMING ON Hurry with an update, please

Listening to this song ( http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9G1I16gJBvU ) while reading this will make you cry Try it... Please?

>>696726696726

Well, I guess I'm not the rainbow you think I am! Is that a Ponychan channel?

Anyways your story is GOLD. I'll be checking tomorrow for the update!

Ps: I most definitely don't want tobe a tree.

God the pressure is killing me to choose love or family is a hellish choice. You have me at the edge of my seat (bed) please do not dissapoint me

Gah! This is brilliant, simply brilliant. My stomach actually clenched while reading this when the dragon outlined Applejack's choice. I'm hoping that there's a third option somewhere, with both Ponyville and Dash making it out alright. At this point though, I think AJ's gonna have to choose Ponyville - and I think Dash should want her too, as heartbreaking as that is. And I love the switching of who's getting "left behind". A galloping great read so far, and I eagerly await the final two chapters!

>>696922696922

I'm hurrying with the update!  :)

>>701694701694

Whoops, never mind - it's a subreddit.  

It'll be there tomorrow!

>>705319705319

Good Did you try the song??

>>702921702921

I'll try not to!

>>703655703655

I hope they do not disappoint!  

I'm really liking this use of "then let me be evil" on part of the Black Dragon - gives him some dynanmic as a character, rather than an up front ready made villian. Makes me wonder if he wouldn't be swayed around to mercy at some point. As for Aj bucking a dragon to death... I dunno if that's possible, but I sure as hell wouldn't be the one to take the test shot. Girl hits like a truck.

Or, in this instance. Like a ship.

That Sunuva bitch! Coming between me and my appledash! So the dragon shows his true colours, with a heart as black as his scales. Of course, if you cast yourself as the villian, you die as the villian... Don't worry Aj, everything'll turn out alright... It has to. Dash would want you to do the right thing.

It better turn out alright.

RAINBOW, APPLEJACK, SPITFIRE, AND TWILIGHT WILL REMAIN UNHARMED!!!!

Please?

Edge of my seat! Hope you stick to your updating schedule!

*cocks heavy rifle*

*Plays "invaders must die"*

let's rock.

Applejack will save the day! She has to, because, um. . . because that's how the story ends. . . right?

Seriously, Best. Story. EVER.

I can just think of one thing! Three days to go!

This is me every time you post a new chapter:

* Yay! New chapter

* Yay! Has 3000 words, that's a bunch of words to read

* Starts reading...

* Chapter is over! Damn it!

You seriously have a great writing style, it feels like the story reads itself. I'm enjoying every chapter more than the previous, so bring the last one on

Good god this is doing a number on my heart with all this suspence

Gah! That dragon is a total asshat! He's so manipulative, but I guess that's what makes him a good villain. Seriously, awesome work. I'm riveted and ready for the final chapter, which will hopefully include the dragon getting his tail whipped by AJ (seeing as the Fluttershy special stare force isn't available). Oh, and I was listening to Eternal Flame by Audiomachine while reading this, which just upped the epicosity. Keep it up

>>712163712163

Gah! All your comments begin with "Gah!" Are we really poking such a sore spot?

I know they do I just don't want to put OMG! or something, so gah is basically my go to reaction for anything shocking/entertaining/interesting/scary/enjoyable. It means you're doing something right, anyway, but I could try to vary my written exclamations of shock if you like Just don't blame me if they start getting outlandish the more I comment

>>712227712227

Clavier, don't tease Ladyhart!  She's been a fan of the story from the start.

>>712262712262

Ignore him.

>>710685710685

Don't worry, Clavier and I will update on time.  The story will update on the 10th!

>>710958710958

Haha, I'm blushing.  I'm so glad you think so!

>>710973710973

I'm glad you like it so much!  Expect the last chapter on the 10th.  

>>711874711874

Only one more chapter to go, so your heart doesn't have to take much more!

YEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EPILOGUE AND AN EPIC CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YOU. ARE. AWESOME!!!!!!!!!

That was amazing You made it to where the "final fight" played off her natural abilities, something I've seen alot of authors struggle with- and you managed it flawlessly, too! This is an AMAZING story! I can't wait for the epilogue

Yay! One more chapter! Awesome work you did there, and awesome nearly last chapter.

This story/chapter was amazing

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AWESOME CHAPTER!!

Great epilogue, I'm a sucker for a succesfull Appledash

Your story was perfect. The dragon, the choice, the rescue, the victory, EVERYTHING

you win an internet my good sir

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and I hope to see more of your

Excellent way to end this story.  I've been watching and following it since the first chapter and you did not in any way disappoint with your writings.  The black dragon was played especially well and I was happy to see that AJ actually did the heroic thing and offered to dig him out; almost as happy as I am that AJ and RD got together at the end there.  Well done