The Best Birthday

Sweetie Belle plans a special birthday surprise for Rarity, but no one is able to come. How can she show her love for Rarity?
I'm not super happy with this story, and it could probably use a few rewrites.

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ShadowKick

ShadowKick #1 · May 21st, 2012 · · ·

The beginning is mostly just the beginning of Sisterhooves Social.

Other than that, it's a fun look at the relationship between Sweetie Belle and Rarity, who are the most interesting family in the show (in my opinion).

SkyWalker

SkyWalker #2 · May 21st, 2012 · 1 · ·

Nice story, I wish you had come up with lyrics for the song, but it was good nonetheless. Angel with party hat lolz

Allonsbro

Allonsbro #3 · May 26th, 2012 · · ·

Very nice. You may want to be a bit more descriptive, however. In the scene with Fluttershy, I thought they were at her cottage.

TheGreatEater

TheGreatEater #4 · Mar 5th, 2015 · · ·

I’m sure that you’d want to spend your day with Scootaloo and Applebloom.”

How about you go have fun with Applebloom and Scootaloo?”

Ugh, she wished Applebloom or Scootaloo were here!

Apple Bloom
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Rarity way not have been the best cook in Equestria, but at least she knew that.

may
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She wasn’t the element of honesty, but she still had trouble lying, especially when Sweetie looked so disappointed.

Cap.

And are you serious?, with all the lies, deception, and manipulation she does on the show. She's a master liar. It's practically her 'other' specal talent.
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Ah’m sorry, sugar cube, but ah’ve gotta go t’ Rarity’s other surprise party. Wouldn’t want to let her down, ya know! Besides, ah’m already tired from bakin’ all the sweets for this party. Ah don’t think ah’ll be able to bake anything else for a week!”

Ah
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Already commented on the use of Ah and Apple Bloom in a different fic of yours. Again sorry for how I came across after my Tabby crashed and erased everything. Really did sound like an 455. Anywho, decent fic. The first half as mentioned by someoneelse did feel like the Sisterhooves Social, but the other half was kinda cute. Although you might want to be a tad more descrpitive on where Sweets met Flutters.

OmniFox