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While trying to explain Pinkie Pie's... well... Pinkie Sense, Twilight hadn't realized she had invented a mind reading device! After months of sitting decommissioned, Twilight finally finds it while picking through her library's old artifacts. Immediately, she wonders what wonderful things she could use it for! Or... what saucy gossip she can discover with it! But she can't try it on a pony first, she thinks. It'd be too suspicious. So she tries another subject first... and the results are quite the opposite of what she thinks!

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Comments ( 24 )

Good idea but please, for the love of God, stop color coding your text. You should be able to communicate who's talking without color codes, and if you can't you need to learn how.

I'm interested in the story but you may want to lay off the color coding. It kind of limits what you want to do because you would want the colors more distinct. If you run out of individual colors it would be bad for your story.

interesting idea, and twilight to be HUGELY surprised.

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Agreeing with these, color coded text is a pet peeve of mine.

Oh, this is going to be so good :pinkiehappy:

"Spike, was this helmet on when you brought it?"
"No. I turned it on! I thought it would work better that way." Oh Spike... this isn't power armor!

Silly dragon, THIS is a power armor
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Now this is going to be fun. :rainbowdetermined2:

I hear Gummy as Marvin the Paranoid Android. Anyone else?

Stop it. Stop it with the colored text! I'm not kidding! STAHP!:flutterrage:

Why do I hear Gummy as a high class british englishman?

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I was thinking of one of those annoying American college professors that have a huge vocabulary and never stop talking.

Ever since the episode I can't stop imagining Gummy with that sexy rough voice he had in the show. :heart:

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The 100th episode, 'Slice of Life'!

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It was in the newest Episode have you not seen it? Gummy looks out a window pondering the Meaning of Life. This is what he thought to himself "What is Life? Is it nothing more than the endless search for a Cutie Mark? And what is a Cutie Mark than a reminder we are all just one Bug-Bear Attack away from Oblivion. And what of the poor gator? Flank forever blank, doomed to an endlessly swim down the river of life to an unknowable Destiny.." It was hilarious and very deep. Despite how stupid he always seems he is apparently always lost in thought about the universe.

6100982 I hear him as Keith David, the actor who provides the voice of the Arbiter in Halo

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6101457 afraid not. As soon as i can I shall rewatch all of season 4 and then see season 5

The coloured text. It hurts. Please stop.:raritydespair:

Other than that, this is going great! And you actually use semicolons correctly, which pleases me greatly; however, there are a few typos besides.

"Sorry I'm late, Twilight! Gummy hear loves bubble baths!"

"Hear" should be "here".

He walked out of room

Missing "the".

MY EYES I'M Blind!


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:twilightoops: Spike you understand Gummy?

:moustache: We both have crazy marefriends except Pinkie's usually covered in frosting. . .:facehoof:

this is actually really interesting

Owlowiscious. Would be hilarious if all he his is just a child. The opposite of gummy... But it's not my place to say.

Please don't color code the text. It's an evil gimmick perpetuated throughout history by evildoers and ruffians.

This is very interesting. Once again, it would be really nice if you could lay off on the colour-coding, but otherwise, I'm liking it! :pinkiehappy:

"I must ask Opalescence what she thinks of my wardrobe! And I simply must hear her input for new styles!"

You are better off not knowing

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