Life/Death Lesson

The fillies learn to not let their desires control their actions, or bad things can happen.

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Gyro Pony

Gyro Pony #1 · Jul 14th, 2012 · · ·

This is a good Cutie Mark Crusader story. It really tells something.

I can't remember if it was featured or just in Browsing, but with a few fix ups with grammar and separation of thinking/speech (says a person who hasn't published any fim fiction) it definately deserves to be featured.

Bookmarked! :-)

PewDashiePie

PewDashiePie #2 · Dec 25th, 2012 · · ·

I liked the story, I will thumbs it up, favorite it, and follow you. By the way there are a lot of misspelled words in the story, Just saying.

We will be smart about it and wait, is much better than doing risky things”

it is

Applebloom understands how dangerous can an ambition be.

an ambition can be

“Dad! Daddy! Please don’t leave! Am so sorry, I will never do it again! Am so sorry! Please, please… don’t leave me, Dad? Daddy…”

I am, I am

Is over, I’m dead” I though.

It's, thought

After I closed my eyes, I heard more of the fire breathing. I ignored what I saw, closed my eyes and snuggle up against my Dad.

I closed, snuggled

gulped and slowly went it,The dragon woke instantly. I screamed so loud it was hard to breath,

it went, breathe

“why you do this? Stop this, you don’t need a cutiemark”

Why do you do this

and ask me for how long I would keep doing this,I didn’t tell anyone about my pilgrimage, either my Mon nor Dad.

Mom

The first seconds of been in midair were invigorating, it filled me with vitality, once the gravity started pulling me down I was more active than I ever been in my life.

being, have

my ears hurt and went deaf. and swam until I got to land.

, and swam

He says is a very sad story,

Sweetie Belle and Applebloom leap in his back again. Gale doesn’t protest about being ride. ride on.

besides what does it matters

matter

"Is very simple, I never got it” He repeats and drops her gaze.

It's, His

it would seem impossible if they weren’t be seeing it with their own, huge eyes.

weren't seeing

That was a close call, she owes their lives to this stallion

she can't owe their lives to him, so I think it should be they owe their lives.

After a minute of walking, Scootaloo notices he doesn’t own a cutiemark

have

Applebloom says she isn’t getting alone into the forest never again

going

Been able to fly turned into a matter of life or dead.

Being, death

specially doing it by themselves,

especially

The cutiemark have been an enigma for eternity behind them the results of a very bad idea.

Has, is the.

varilla111

varilla111 #3 · Dec 27th, 2012 · · ·

1850463 glad you like it

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varilla111 #4 · Dec 27th, 2012 · · ·

1850463 oh my you are right! well I guess I can spare some time and fix em all

PewDashiePie

PewDashiePie #5 · Dec 27th, 2012 · · ·

1859853
Sorry I didn't reply sooner, I can barely ever get on the computer. I wasn't trying to be rude, I really liked the story, I jut wanted to tell you.

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