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Yeah, the sequel's out now, so enjoy!
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I would like this story if it dident start with oh my life sucks bullshit. I'm asking should I read it even though the first line pissed me off beyond words, boo fucking hoo I know this is mean and I really hate to post this but will anyone tell me this will get better.
First, there is absolutely no plot. It’s just a series of events barely held together by the, already weak, premise of a concert with your Mary Sue of a self-insert as the centre of the universe.
Second, you have derailed absolutely every single character in the show, turning them into mindless drones whose only purpose is to praise and cater to the needs of your self-insert. The case of Rainbow Dash is particularly bad; you turned her into a copy of the filly from “My Little Dashie”.
Last but not least, what infuriates me the most about this “story” is the sheer misanthropy present in it. I seriously hope it is just a phase of your adolescent years, because otherwise you are utter scum undeserving of any kind of sympathy.







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