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Moonlit Novel


Don't like my stories, that is fine, but if there is a reason, besides, not liking the storyline, please let me know so that I can improve

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This story is a sequel to Return Of The Lunar Knight: A Sharp Sword's Knight


Evening Star, Sharp Sword, two names that will live forever in the books of history, so long as Luna and Masao continued to keep them there, one was a mare that was Masao's first lover, the second was her reincarnation, and both were close friends and confidants to Princess Luna who later became the wife to Masao Darkheart, the Lunar Knight, now time has brought us to the future of Equestria, a future where its peaceful existence is about to come to an end, the War of Stars is about to begin, and with it, Masao will learn who had been pulling his strings ever since he landed on Equis, and he will learn just how he ended up there, and why...

Crossover with Warhammer 40k (sortof); Human in Equestria; Human/pony romance; mentions of mane(not a misspell I did that on purpose) character deaths; possibly graphic scenes involving war; Crossover reference with several sci-fi games/movies/shows

Chapters (31)
Comments ( 35 )

So, first she was a maid/(insert nice word for prostitute here), then a knight defect from the old lunar rebellion, now a thief in a futuristic Equestria. wordpress.carthrottle.com/wp-content/uploads/2013/03/borat-meme.jpg

So, Twilight used some good old necromancy to have a chat with her friends, cool. And what is this about the humans calling the ponies "abominations"? This is sounding like they think they're still on Earth. I don't think if you land on another planet, you would just attack the local populous without a good reason. Really can't wait for there reason for attack now.

then we have humans quoting things from video games...

Do they think this is just a war simulation/video game, or is this something more twist worthy? :unsuresweetie: I just have a feeling, from what you wrote, that at the end of this story, it's either going to blow all my expectations away, or it'll make all my feels come out to play. Maybe both.

Yay, the humans aren't complete dicks. :twilightsmile: Now I want know who the enemy is that they brought with them.
Oh, and yay for Willow asking to marry Masao. :twilightsheepish:

6030994 Thanks for the support :twilightsmile:

I hope to have a new chapter out soon, I am just churning them out now that I am no longer confined to the script of the show, but I just noticed that the storyline is a little out there, so I apologize for that.

So Discord is in complete denial of Fluttershy's death. Wow, :rainbowderp: with how high tech Canterlot is, I wonder just how long she's been dead? I want to say 1000 years, just to stick with the way stuff happens in the canon (what's up with that anyway?).

Also, this is starting to sound like this is going to lead to a coma ending.

I have to say that I am enjoying this story. I do hope to see more of it soon.

Dragonfox

6083636 every Wednesday(EST) I publish a chapter, this gives my editor some time to edit, and it gives me time to get chapters written, rest assured that I have enough chapters buffered between you readers and myself

Mother of god the humans are weaklings i mean come on atleast give them a chance.

So uh yeah how about you give the human some upgrades yeah? Just saying not that you should.


Only that it would even the odds out a bit incase they would fight. And masao needs to be taken down a notch very cocky XD

6096793 Part of the reason I seem to be focusing on Willow Leaf is because Masao is too powerful. He got that way with time and training, but still. he's no fun to write anymore even if the story itself is fun as hell to write

I can't help it. I am enjoying this story. I don't know why there so minny dislikes. Maybe they did not read all the story's be for this one?

Dragonfox

6128629 I'm not worried, I am writing 'cause I like writing, so don't worry about me stopping because of dislikes, cause I promise it won't happen. Also I am so happy that someone commented! I was beginning to wonder if anyone still cared enough to comment about the story!

Thanks for the comment!

Can you tell me why the humans can't stand the fax that Masao love Willow Leaf and Luna and that they wood go to all the trouble of kidnapping him because he loves the pony's he lives with? He has not been part of the humans for a long time.

Dragonfox

Might have internet soon. Unsure but I do have a job now so yay since I go by the library on the way home

6129584 wow I never got this alert, well, I can't tell you, mostly because I would ruin the story for others that are reading this, but still...

I'm sorry I'm not doing my editing I'll get on that tomorrow when I go to library just my rl job has been killing me

This was a very good story, i thank you for making it:twilightsmile:

doo alalalala. hopin you make another story that i can help with

Eh.....He still have chaos magic....

6429280 Nope, he never did, Tzeentch never gave him access to Chaos Magicks, otherwise he would have used it

6434543 Guess he will have to improve himself with his combat ability then..

I'd like it, thx u 4 sharing this.

So, as some one familiar with the 40k universe, I have some questions that really bugged me during the story. One that is really bugging me is the state of the military for the Terran faction.

I realize that you kind of went alternate universes on a lot of this stuff, but having the Emperor of Mankind on Terra and not on the golden throne means that this took place before he created the Primarchs and Space Marines, because while the Terran soldiers had ceramic armor, no mentions of increased size or abilities were mentioned, so it's assumed they're normal sized, so they're simply Astra Militarum or the 30k equivalent: Imperialis Auxilia. However, I don't believe that Slaanesh is mentioned once in your story, which I'm thankful for, seeing as how they're my least favorite Chaos God and they were the last of the major 4 to be born. But, poppa Emps only decided to directly reveal himself to direct mankind after the Eye of Terror was formed (Which meamt after the downfall of the Eldar civilization and birth of Slaanesh) so he could reunite Terra during the Age of Strife, and he used the Thunder Warriors to do so, which were precursors to Space Marines.

I did mostly enjoy your story, you did a pretty good job writing it, it's just there were a few inconsistencies with what I found familiar with one of the universes you were trying to use.

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