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I'm not that obsessed with Naruto in real life. Honest.

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A week after becoming Princess Celestia's personal student and protégé, Twilight has finally completed her first homework assignment!

At first she's overjoyed, expecting praises from her new teacher. However, when a certain little dragon has an 'accident' that ruins her perfect assignment, Twilight must do everything she can to fix it.

Can Twilight clean up the mess before submission?


Comments and criticism are highly encouraged! I hope you'll enjoy the story!

CONTENT WARNING: SNUGGLES!

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 60 )

5981167

Well, maybe if you'd actually READ the story, you'd know it wasn't a fetish one. :pinkiehappy:

It's just comedy. I never do fetish.

So adorable, and so funny. :rainbowlaugh:

5981172 I keep trying to tell everybody, ignore Starla. his/her head is so far up their ass they can taste their hair.

I'm glad that at the end you characterized this as a sibling relationship, because it's much more reasonable for siblings to make these sorts of assumptions and have the conflict Twilight had than if she was his primary caretaker. I was a little worried, until towards the end when it's clear as a sibling relationship.

So... This was cute, and I liked it.

Poop isn't a teen theme. Everybody poops, and plenty of kid humor revolves around talking about how funny poop is at school. I think it's safe to downgrade it from teen to everybody. :twilightsmile:

That was absolutely adorable! :twilightsmile:

5981193 The admins on this site have a weird hangup about toilet humor needing to be rated teen. I've run into the same problem.

5981167 It's really not necessary to be a jerk over a story this cute and inoffensive.

5981193 Maybe this fic was originally submitted as everyone, but the moderators requested it be bumped up to teen. Speaking from experience, that can happen quite often even when there doesn't seem to be anything objectionable. And sometimes authors will rate a fic a higher rating just to be safe.

5981193

I know. I argued with the mod about that, but he eventually partially convinced me to play it safe and change it to teen.


5981188

Thank you, kind sir.


5981186

You have two options:
1. Read my story and then post your criticism. It's only 4,000 words.
2. GTFO.

Also, I wish for you that one day your IQ would exceed 60.


5981189

Thank you very much! I'm having trouble seeing a romantic relationship between Spike and the Mane Six, mainly due to age differences.
I do, though, enjoy reading romance about them, and writing romance if it's only for laughs.

That was so funny and awesome!!!
Write about Twilight and her friends saw all of Spike's baby pictures I'm begging you!!!!!

5981228

Thank you!!! :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

Unfortunately, I don't think I can write a very intriguing story about looking through an album without any actual pictures.
Besides, I only wrote this because the general idea was just stuck in my head. :twilightblush:

5981216
I was more meaning a sibling vs a mother relationship, not a sibling vs a romantic relationship. I was saying I think Twilight was too young to be the only person in charge of taking care of Spike (or even the person most responsible for him), so I was glad that you weren't writing it like that, even though for a short bit I wondered if that was your angle.

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For the record, toilet humor need not necessarily be rated Teen. It's generally fine for people to make innocuous fart or poop jokes in-story (presuming it doesn't get too raunchy, etc. etc.). What requires a Teen rating is when actual bodily processes show up and the matter--solid, liquid, or gaseous--released from your lower half starts floating around. Particularly when the story as a whole focuses on said processes/matter. A fart joke is fine. "Twilight Sparkle spends five minutes farting Spike to unconsciousness in an enclosed space," replete with details on how wet and smelly her farts are, borders dangerously on fetish work, even if intended as comedy.

Most ratings on TV and such do follow this pattern--someone needing to run to the bathroom because they really have to go isn't particularly Teen-rated, and kids shows are fine with depicting that. Conversely, it's pretty darn unlikely that a show for kids is going to feature a sheet of paper smeared with actual, Honest-to-God fecal matter.

5981248

I won't argue with you, especially here and since another moderator already explained the reasoning to me.
I still don't agree with it at all, but then again I'm actually a quite 'different' (and tactless) person.

:trollestia: Twilight ! Why is Spikes first D-mail letter covered in dragon waste?

:facehoof: Spike wasted my homework.

:moustache: I took it out !

:raritystarry: My Spikey a mobster?

:moustache: It's no big deal ,

5981246

Oh, THAT kind of relationship. Never seen it before in a fanfic, actually.
That actually makes even less sense than romance. :rainbowlaugh:

5981228 If that happened, poor Spike would die of embarassment.

5981248
Point taken. :rainbowlaugh: The Teen rating stays for certain.

I can really see this being canon. It's that good.

I will admit I was expecting toilet humor due to the teen rating which I like but although I didn't get that I still enjoyed this story. It was adorable and we got to see Twilight and Spike get closer over something a tad unexpected. What I like most about this story is that it shows that sometimes something good can come from something bad.

5981396

That was the main reason I wanted to avoid the Teen rating... I just wanted to make a funny and cute story.
Thank you very much for reading!

Ganna just guess "walat" is baby spike trying to say Twilight

This was really well written. Good Job!:trollestia:

Not bad, I actually could see this actually having happened. Good story.

Wow dragons learn fast, week after hes born and hes almost saying a real name

What I got out of this story; Dragons need to be housebroken...:twilightoops:

5982621 I'm pretty sure that was Twilight's first priority after the "incident".

Daaaaw... I love stories about Twilight's childhood. This was a good read.

So this was all about Spike and his magical dragon s---? :rainbowlaugh:

5986220 You were expecting something else? :applejackunsure:

5986237
I was expecting Spike EATING Twilight's homework or at least accidentally sending it Celestia covered in dragon feces.

5986220

Uh, yeah.
Both the story and chapter name were supposed to pretty much prepare you for that, not to mention the descriptions... :twilightsheepish:

5986251
Why wasn't Spike in a diaper? Baby dragons don't do diapers or something?

5986269

That's a very good question!
Unfortunately, I don't have a very good answer to it. :derpytongue2:

5986269 Maybe Twilight couldn't find any diapers in Spike's size?

5986269 Hmm ... maybe a shortage of flameproof diapers? :trollestia:

5988679 How are you suppose to make a flame proof diaper that's comfortable enough for the subject to wear?

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You could make the exterior out of strong polymers like Polystyrene or Polycarbonate, and cover the interior in lots of comfy, fluffy goodness.
But that's just my internal engineer speaking.
Anyhow, I don't think pony technology has evolved sufficiently in order to fabricate goal-specific polymers.

On another note, I don't see the point of fire resistant diapers since I doubt Spike can breathe on his own butt.
Is he that flexible?

5990090 Probably not, but if Twilight accidentally left diapers laying around, Spike could torch them with his flame breath if they weren't flame proof.

I JUST WANNA HUG THE WITTWE SPIKE!

This was an interesting story. Really pointed out Twilight's neurosis in a comedic manner, and baby Spike was adorable. Especially his olderselfs reaction to Twilight making a report about his glitter-poo.

In your headcanon [even though this wasn't made to be taken seriously] is that the parts of gems a dragon doesn't digest? And what is the parts that do get digest get used for? Just asking out of morbid curiosity.

5981186

Wow you're an idiot. Seriously, you can't tell between using a child like accident for comedic purposes and scat? I have pity on whomever inherits your genes.

5995246

An excellent (and correct) deduction!
Yes, the glitter is the gem leftovers in Spike's system.
As for what they're used for...
I haven't given that much thought yet but I'd say to strengthen his teeth, bones and scales.
Perhaps the leftovers in his poo are gem impurities.

Anyways, thank you very much for reading my story!

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And if Spike is an Arcanotherm [rather than Mesothermic] then the magical properties of gems could possibly fuel his dragon magic. But yeah, gem impurities being what's left over would still make dragon fertilizer the most expensive and magically powerful fertilizer in the world.

Which I now need to make into a fic. I'll give you a shout out when it gets submitted.

5995687

Sounds plausible and interesting.

I'll look forward to your story! :)

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