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A short-trip to help Twilight study some fallen meteors left Rainbow injured. But what happened when she started gaining new and terrifying ability.
And what, exactly, did those meteors bring to Equestria?

A Prototype-crossover.

(My first published fic)

Chapters (16)
Comments ( 191 )

more...i DEMAND MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Moar is now up.

:rainbowderp: omg intense cliffhangers....
gotta hte them.....
:3 :rainbowkiss: :squee: this is awesome

#4 · Nov 21st, 2011 · · · Day 2 ·

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:yay: my first comment and i use it to tell you how awesome i think this story is turning out

As awesome as the story has been so far, I think you may have just introduced a concept which is going to be difficult to work with. I mean, the fight scenes you are writing are brilliant, and the idea of creating a Green stand-in from Luna's chopped off wing is inspired - but the Elements? Prototype worked so well because this one person with superior abilities was taking on an entire army of creatures that were only a few steps below him. Granting _all_ of the Elements these powers could work, as Equestria is a lot larger than Manhatten, and so needs more Mercer's to effectively deal with the problems - except that's not how the Elements work. They don't split up, they work as a team. And a team of six Mercers would make even the Supreme Hunter cry in fear. Siccing the six of them on any given situation is liable to be overkill - mayhaps a corrupted dragon would warrant two or three of them, and the alicorn creature could probably be defeated with only four or five of them (although for surety, all six should go deal with that).
Of course, this could be averted if you split Mercer's powers between the lot of them - which does seem likely, now that I think about it. This is going to make the fight scenes a lot more... complicated, though, so I can't wait to see how you deal with them.

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Thanks for the assessment. And I also hope that I can deal with that well enough.
Can't say more for risk of spoilers.

Day 3 is up.

OOOOH
VERY VERY NICE :D
i especially liked the part where she nom nom nom'd on the fish, and healed all the way back up
its like......insta-heal....x20

Niiiiiice. Been too long since the last update.
Good story with some solid writing. Big fan of prototype.

Love your ability to weave humor into this story. Admittedly it is a dark humor, but that is the best kind. :pinkiecrazy:

#12 · Dec 3rd, 2011 · · · Day 3 ·

wow, this is just god teir. no other way to describe it.
This fic really crosses to things that should never be crossed, but pulls it off incredibly well.
It's on my watch list noaw

Hrm - So the Deity of the Sun is infected, but unable to totally purge the infection from her system... or worse, unable to purge it _at all_. Which would indicate that, were she to be knocked unconscious... bad things would happen. I do have some theories, though - it appears the Elements of Harmony have some affect on the virus - after all, the two current bearers who are infected have gained superpowers, the previous bearer is, while not immune to the disease, certainly resistant, and the only pony in existence to have the elements used on them became infected at a vastly different rate than any other (Nice exclusion of the deus ex weapon, by the way). With this in mind, I almost want to see what an infected Discord would be like (in the twenty seconds or so before the planet turned into a giant blood pustule).
With regards to the guards being sent to accompany them - why? They'll just get slaughtered by anything that gets attacked, and she has already stated that she currently is of the hope that the Elements are affected differently. So the only reason for them to be there is Spike - and I pity anything that attempts to get anywhere near Spike whilst Twilight is nearby. Especially if she has powers at that point.
Finally, I do have a query about the story itself. Granted, this isn't Prototype so some stuff will be different, but I have to ask - the Blacklight and the Redlight viruses _are_ different. Presumably RD and Fluttershy have managed to forcibly mutate Redlight into Blacklight by dint of their being bearers of the Elements (magic fixed it). So how come when Fluttershy accidentally infects Celly, she contracts the Redlight virus?
Regardless, this is still going nicely, and I can't wait to see what happened to Appleloosa.

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Finally, I do have a query about the story itself. Granted, this isn't Prototype so some stuff will be different, but I have to ask - the Blacklight and the Redlight viruses _are_ different. Presumably RD and Fluttershy have managed to forcibly mutate Redlight into Blacklight by dint of their being bearers of the Elements (magic fixed it). So how come when Fluttershy accidentally infects Celly, she contracts the Redlight virus?
That's because Celly didn't get infected by Fluttershy. Having a bleeding hydra infected with redlight falling on top of Celly while she's wounded, did.

With regards to the guards being sent to accompany them - why? They'll just get slaughtered by anything that gets attacked, and she has already stated that she currently is of the hope that the Elements are affected differently. So the only reason for them to be there is Spike - and I pity anything that attempts to get anywhere near Spike whilst Twilight is nearby. Especially if she has powers at that point.

Several thing here.
1. The guards were sent to aide Appleloosa, it was just a good idea for the two group to travel together (P.S. In retrospect, I did not make a note of this. I will edit the story to reflect this better.)
2. The guards weren't completely helpless. They did put up a decent fight (Luna's guard did managed to hold off the diamond dog attacks for a while). With better knowledge of the threat, they would adapt.

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Okay, admittedly, 'slaughtered' may not have been the best choice of words - I was thinking more of what happened at the hospital encampment more than the actual fight - one scratch, one bite, and that pony is effectively worse than dead. The only way I can think of for them to adapt to that is to execute injured Guards as soon as combat is done. So I hope you're more inventive than me, coz that's just plain dark.

As for the rest, though - okay, that makes sense now, thanks.

Oh how many intresting works I have found today! This being one of them. I admit, the combination seemed like a potential disaster, but this has caught my attention and my respect. I will be watching this develop. It's funny how the nicest ponies tend to be the most vicious protectors when their friends are at steak. (Flutterstator: When that infected hydra has to go away right now, accept no substitutes!)

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To my faithful student,

Today I learned that when a normally timid friend of yours tell you to do something. Even if you're a goddess, you listen to her.

Your mentor,
Princess Celestia

:0 omg that was instense.....make more, as i cannot wait to see what happens next

#19 · Dec 12th, 2011 · · · Day 2 ·

....uh, I think this site is broke, cus your story at this chapter kinda continues, but the website itself ...."breaks" is what im trying to say, I think?

This is so awesome.


So. Are each of the mane 6 going to be inflicted with the Blacklight virus? I mean really......RD has the claws, fluttershy has the whip.....now Applejack has the horn? (scythe...?) Anyway, very well done brony, keep em coming. Cheers :ajsmug:

Thank you for all your comments. :yay:

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Keep reading and find out :derpytongue2:

#23 · Dec 13th, 2011 · · · Day 4 ·

Fluttershy- whipfist and tendril barrage
Rainbow dash- claws and divebomb
Applejack- blades and ???
Very good story, can't wait to read more!:rainbowkiss:

Yeah, crossovers usually suck but this one is done really well, keep up the awesome! :rainbowlaugh:

Great story and an excellent chapter, I look forward to reading more.:raritystarry:

Apology for taking this long. Christmas and New Year holiday took me away from computer for a long stretch of time.

I love this story :heart:. Every Chapter is incredible and enjoyable. Fuberrari you truly know how to tell a good story :twilightsmile:.

You fill this story with epic action, great character portrayal, good visualization and tell it all at a steady pace. This story maintains it's position as one of my favourites. Also don't worry too much about the release date, epic stories with long chapters like this one take time to write, no one's gonna begrudge you because your chapter was long and brilliant :pinkiehappy:.

Anyway I look forward to the next chapter in this brilliant story, I predict fantastic writing and excellent chapters ahead :eeyup:

...Is it ominous that I'm finishing up the last bit of Red Dead Redemption: Undead Nightmare earlier today when this shows up?:rainbowderp:

Sweet chapter, keep up the awesome! :rainbowlaugh:

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It's probalbly Blade and Armor

Dead Fic is Dead. :ajsleepy:

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It's not dead.
A combination of writer's block (the section I'm currently working on was one of those un-forseen transition I had not fully thought through) plus real-life obligations equals slow progress.

Although I would say I'm about 80~90% done with this section (not sure if that's an optimistic estimate or not).

Sorry for the long delay.

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Then use your blog, so readers wont lose faith in your production credibility :twilightsmile:
It be a blank flank thar.... :moustache:

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Hm, I was not aware that there's a blog.

Alright! Finally!
Sorry for the long wait. As I said before, real-life obligation, writer's block and the fact that this section wasn't planned out before hand made for slow progress.
My apology.

WELL THAT...
was amazing :)
i bet, soon, that the trip will just
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yeah...that

Bah, evil cliffhanger! Why must you torture us so? :fluttercry:

So happy this is back. A bunch of other Prototype crossovers have been attempted, but this one is just leagues ahead.

363740 I concur.

Really great chapter, some humour that doesn't feel out of place and a enjoyable experience to read. Black Rain continues to be Thee best [PROTOTYPE] style story. It doesn't rely on forcing Alex Mercer on us or simply telling the games story with Ponies. Every [PROTOTYPE] story should be taking notes from this one.

This chapter was very enjoyable, more of Celestia's connection to the infected is explained. The Alicorn Mutant/Infected is given a very fitting name. Pestilence is just so fitting, I can't even think of anything that would sound better. Luna is being kept busy I see, and the nobility continue to seem like spoiled brats. Would be nice to hear of some nobles doing something positive, maybe Fancypants organising a militia to deal with infected and Fleur De lis handling emergency housing and refugee camps.

Anyways I continue to track and read this fantastic story, I look forward to the next chapter. As I always do :rainbowdetermined2:

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I think you hit the nail on the head. Black Rain is taking Prototype as a starting point and running off to do its own thing, rather than trying to stick to the game and tell a story that's already been told.

Probably an example more crossovers could emulate in general.

I shit you not, I audibly celebrated when I saw the update, my favorite crossover so far.

By far and away one of my favorite crossovers (second only to Name's Ellis) and the ONLY grimdark story that I will actually tolerate. Keep up the good work.

Awesome, keep it up! :rainbowdetermined2:

I love this story. I really do. Prototype was one of those games that people thought "Ehh..." but I was like "Dude, this is fucking awesome." It seemed the game creators knew exactly what I liked in a video game. Still tracking this.

This is good. The dark is balance out with the epic. If one of the Mane 6, Spike, Celestia or Luna die, though, I'm out.

Reposted from blog.

Okay, it looks like Chapter 7 may be longer than expected (currently 14k+ words, with about... 20%? more to go). Sorry...

Anyway, in the process of writing Chapter 7, I discovered that a small section near the beginning (about 1k words) might work better if its moved to the end of Chapter 6 (which, on re-reading, felt like a somewhat weak ending).

So I move it.

If you just want to read from the changed part, search for the the word [Added] (with the square bracket, it was a white text so you'll only see it if you highlight it), and start from there.

Thank you for your interest in this story, I hope this small addition will tide you over until I'm done with Chapter 7.

:yay: New Chapter!
:fluttercry: Cliffhanger Ending!

Quick question. Is Applejack able to retract her horns? If not I would think that the Griffins might have something to say about a pony with that kind of hardware being carried around :scootangel:

oh ho ho
shits bout to get serious

Excellent chapter, the story continues to deliver superb writing and plot twists.:heart:

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Yes, Applejack's horns are retractable (and like both Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash, kept it away unless they needed it, or Pinkie Pie wants to play with it).

It would be hard for her to carry around a pair of horns that's about the same length as her body around all the time (not to mention the issue with potential friendly fires).

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