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totallynotabrony


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Of all the slices of life, this is the sliciest.

Maybe she just doesn't like PowerPoint as much as she does paper presentations? I'm 100% sure that Twilight would keep up with modern advancements in technology as the years passed, but I doubt she would easily give up the feel of paper in her hooves and magic.

Knowing you, I had no idea what to expect. That was cute and very well done. Thanks again for making my day better.

Simple and beautiful for it. Very nice.

Took me a bit to clue into the fact that a desktop computer would NOT be anachronistic. Twi's age should have been a clue, but I missed it. Actually now that I think about it this would be in a very short window of decades (Button Mash was playing a standing game) OR the other bearers are also immortal?

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The first arcade stand-up videogame, Computer Space, was released back in 1971, and Pong came out in 1972. (Although videogaming didn't really explode in widespread popularity until around 1977-1978, when games like Space Invaders started coming out, and the Atari 2600 home console hit the market.)

Powerpoint first became available for the Macintosh in 1987, and the first Windows version came out in 1990.

So, yeah, not that long of a gap, really. 19 years, at most; if the Mane Six are in their early-to-mid-20s at the start of the show, they'd only be in their 40s at most by this time, so no immortality required. :twilightsmile: (And there were computers capable of doing Powerpoint-like slideshows earlier than that, really; Powerpoint was just the first incarnation of it that was relatively easy for a non-expert to use, on commercially-available hardware that was within the average home user's budget.)

It wasn’t relevant to the daily intelligence briefings he provided her. Friendship Rainbow Kingdom Castle in Ponyville was smaller than the castle in Canterlot, but Princess Twilight still needed a staff to keep her up to date on important matters around the country.

Where the extra space is, you forgot a the.

A minutes before six, the door opened and Princess Twilight entered. She was always almost exactly one minute early, as if making a rehearsed appearance.

minute, and drop the extra space.
Great story!

Death by powerpoint.... *shudders*

I understand what a one-shot is. I know what Slice of Life means, and this is certainly that.

But I couldn't find myself enjoying this, because there was simply nothing there. You took Slice of Life to the extreme, and made the story so bare bones there wasn't really a story left. There's nothing inherently wrong here, and your grammar and spelling were impeccable as far as I saw, but nothing was remotely interesting. There were plenty of opportunities to set up an oddity, some question that left the reader wondering, or satisfied. But you didn't use them.

I can understand wanting to write a truly Slice of Life genre short clip, but the reason most people enjoy those is because we've been given a frame of reference for them. A 'version of reality', if you will. People will read a Slice of Life side story to another story, a romance for example, because they can attribute interest from that story. They can draw similarities, connect dots, and that keeps them interested.

As it is, this one-shot seems like it belongs in a collection of one-shots revolving around another story in which Slide Show is a main character. Maybe this was somehow a shadowy short about how the Princess' friends are now dead, she's much older, and trying to deal with it. But there wasn't nearly enough information to really give much credit to that theory either.

Now, I'm certainly not giving this a thumbs down, as I said there's nothing inherently wrong with it. Maybe you've written another story with Slide in it, or perhaps mentioned him in passing, and I never read about it, or forgot about him. (Though the lack of a Link makes that seem unlikely) Or maybe you simply wrote this out of sheer boredom, or you sat down with an odd idea and decided to write it out. Regardless, I'm afraid this one was a miss for me.

5983469 You seem to have considered a lot of possibilities. Regardless of what I was thinking while writing it, I suppose someone else thinking while reading it is satisfying.

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