A fourteen year old brony who loves to write :) Sweetie Belle is best pony.
After a long day of hanging out with Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash drifts off to sleep, only to find that she isn't in Equestria anymore. Then, when Pinkie Pie, the only other pony there, is separated from Rainbow Dash. it's up to her to find and rescue her from whatever might be waiting. Friendshipping. Artwork by my very talented friend, Vivian :)
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Can someone explain what friendshipping is?
34373 I've always understood it as a two friends getting closer but not getting romantically involved. I might be wrong.
:D omg that was so awesome :D
36449
Glad you liked it!
Lord, this is easily the best fanfic I've ever read. Please, make more, make plenty more!
38934 Wow, thanks!
i loved being able to see a bit of what Spitfire was before the fame and glory, and im glad of the little speech RD and Spitfire put together, made it seem truly worthwhile being friends with them
I luv it
it's so awesome and deep dashie was like 
noo and pinkie was like 
it's ok u can leave me it's ok then she starts petting a rock
34377
A winRAR is you.
I don't think this story has the attention it deserves.
39020 haha, believe it or not, i was perfectly content with my 300 views before it got accepted by EQDaily. but im glad that you liked it!
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Honestly the base of the storyline, Rainbow Dash choosing between the Wonderbolts and her friends, as well as the 'every character must have a tragic back-story' is pretty cliché. Otherwise the writing was alright but nothing spectacular; there wasn't anything outstandingly bad about the story though. Overall a three out of five.
39287 this gave me a laugh :)
39333 Well actually, the story was going to be a oneshot, with only the first chapter. I changed my mind because I didn't like how I portrayed the Wonderbolts. I don't have any excuse for the tragic backstory of Spitfire, I feel as if that kinda had to happen. But thanks for your feedback, I'll make sure to take these points into consideration for my future fics.
39394 eh, there's always gonna be the neighsayers, if they don't like cliche, fanfiction is not the stuff to read! Haha, great story, i'm glad Rainbow gets the best of both worlds for once!
Jolly good show, that.
*blows bubbles out of pipe*
oh my gawd lights, ur such an amazing fanfic writer <3 haha
Confound you, you took the premise I've been working on for the last three months!
lol oh well, that was still amazing. I love friendshipping, although I usually read it as pretense to actual shipping anyway. lol
Fantastic read.
42910 Go for it! Just because two stories share similarities doesn't mean that they can't coexist!
Great story. But did anyone else picture the last scene in thr actual animation of the show with the lines and everything? B/c did:D
43307 the original chapter was just rainbow dash saying the speech in her head. i changed it to both rainbow and spitfire because i thought the reader would be able to picture it better.
glad you agree!
I absolutely i am SPEECHLESS.
43903 haha, glad you liked it!
Lights, I have to tell you that this is one of the greatest stories I have ever read in my career as a full time Brony.
Nicely done. That dream sequence illustrated Rainbow's dilemma quite nicely.
Must hurt to fall off a cloud... Guess Rainbow's too cool for that though.
Well, I certainly wasn't expecting Spitfire's flashback there. Very moving.
Very well-done. Glad Rainbow did the right thing (pursuing her dreams and making sure that her friendships remained intact).
Also, wonderful ending lines, especially the last word.
What can I say...this is the first time I have genuinely felt sad after reading a fic. You sir(or Ma'am), are a fantastic writer. Please write more, this is awe inspiring. I have never had such an emotional connection to these ponies until now...
Braden
59413 there are definitely other fics that are a lot more emotionally controlling than this one. However, I'm extremely grateful that you would give such praise to me, and I'm glad I could supply you with a good read :)
Uh... Rainbow Dash an Earth Pony?
67327 Only in her dream :p
Dang, I always imagined Spitfire as the kind of character to have a bit of a gloomy history, but I didn't expect her past to be as sad as that.
Pretty awesome.
109169 to be honest, i put a lot more effort and emotion into the first chapter. the second chapter was more of an addon that just came to me one morning
anyway, glad you liked it!
109369 Haha yeah, I could kinda tell. I actually read just the first chapter a few weeks before, thinking it was the whole story. Then I saw a post saying there were two more and I was all
and 
You did a great job on the first chapter. The way you described everything and worded some sentences was extremely well-done IMO. I would've been very satisfied if it ended there, but the next two chapters were a pretty nice addition, too
Again, awesome read. Really enjoyed it
111327 yup, it was originally supposed to be a one-shot, but i didn't want to leave the audience with a skewed version of the wonderbolts, so i had to justify it. so then i wrote the second chapter, but i was still dissatisfied with the sort of cliffhanger spitfire's exit left, so i ended up throwing an epilogue in there. at first i thought the additional chapters were unnecessary, but it got a positive reaction from the readers
This is quite the cute little story. Rainbow Dash character development is always a good thing. Reconciling one's dream life with one's normal life can be every bit as difficult as this story portrays in my opinion. However, I should point out that I don't think the story caused enough conflict between RD's friends and her aspirations. Having Rainbow Dash question whether she wanted to practice or spend time with Pinkie was a great starting point but I think it should have escalated from there. It seemed unrealistic for Rainbow Dash to suddenly question her life choices after a simple incident of realizing Pinkie's disappointment at her leaving for the day, even if it came in the form of her sub-conscious. More tension between her time spent with her friends and her time spent trying to join the Wonderbolts would have made things less jarring, especially since that would make the onset of her dream make more sense.
Spitfire's tragic back story wasn't the most original thing in the world but RD needed somepony to spur her on and I still felt sad at the end of her story so it's hard to complain too much about it.
The ending chapter was conclusive and felt right so a big thumbs up there.
Your prose was quite satisfactory and there were few grammatical/spelling mistakes. (I'd point out the ones there but it'd take forever in a reply post).
Overall I'd give the story three and a half stars. I like the idea of Rainbow Dash coming to terms with the consequences of following her dreams, I just think more could have been explored. Though it was still worth the read. I will definitely keep an eye out for any future stories from you.
125458 greatly appreciate the critique. to be honest, i was intending to do a full rewrite of the story, with more emphasis on the development on the story. looks like that'll have to wait a bit, however, i'm a bit tied down in terms of writing.
Nicely done
212868 thanks!
I would rate this story a four out of 5 but the rating system doesn't seem to like me at the moment. It takes a lot to reach a 5/5 in my opinion, not the least of which is the fact that it has to totally knock my socks off leave my jaw dropped hanging on the floor in amazement. This was a good solid story. Excellent composition and story. The grammar was pretty good. All in all a thoroughly enjoyable tale.
I always enjoy a good sad/heartwarming story. Especially if Spitfire manages to make her way into the story or even, heaven forbid, be a main character. What can I say? I thoroughly enjoyed the fact that Dash actually said no to the Wonderbolts and that for once the Wonderbolts actually acknowledge her as an Element of Harmony holder.
That was probably one of the best flashbacks I have seen in a while. Great job!
Silver out!
The story is advertised perfectly.
You get what you see and what I see is a good story. The emotions were great, and the backstories were done well. The ending speech was icing on the cake. Great work Lights!
Silver out!
This was... not what I expected.
...
It was BETTER than I expected!
Very good story.