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Yoshachu


Hello, my name is Yoshachu. I have been a fan of MLP: FiM ever since Season 2, and I love writing stories based on the series. My dream is to one day write the perfect grimdark story.

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Rainbow Dash finally gained her consciousness to see she was in a dark room. She tried to rub her head, but saw that her legs were tied down, as well as her head and waist. She suddenly remembered where she had experienced this before.

Well, she herself didn't experience it, but in a story she read, her best friend, Pinkie Pie, kidnapped her and turned her into cupcakes. She noticed how despaired her pink friend was when she found out what Rainbow Dash had read, even though she didn't understand why Pinkie Pie was so badly shaken up. Rainbow Dash knew Pinkie Pie would never harm her in any way, but why is she down here, strapped against her will, if her friend would never harm her?

Had Pinkamena Diane Pie, Pinkie Pie's evil side, finally resurfaced to kill everypony they knew and loved?

I wrote this story back in 2012, so of course my writing wasn't nearly as good as it is now, not meaning to brag. :twilightsheepish:

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This is a very funny story. Kudos! :rainbowlaugh:

Me personally, I'm not a fan of this, but I wont dislike. Just a tip, all the excessive caps;

"WAHAHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!"

Wasn't necessary. It could have been replaced with something like, Rainbow let out another scream of laughter as the pink pony continued her assault on her hooves. I got bored and skipped over most of it, but it was a nice try. Keep up the good work,

- Altaimare

5908488 I learned from this, as this was made three years ago, and my writing style's improved greatly, but I'll keep this in mind the next time I make the same mistake. Thanks. :twilightsmile:

Not bad. It could use some work here and there, for example

"PLEASE DON'T KILL ME!!!"

And

"HAAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAAAA!!! STAAAAAAAAAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAP!!! PIHIHIHIHIHIHIHIHINKIE PIHIHIHIHIHIHIHIHIIIIIIIIE!!!"

I honestly don't think you should use caps lock for those, in my opinion, you should use the bold prompt or the italics prompt for when a character's being loud
But all in all, the story was pretty cute

I actually love this. This should get more views. It's a travesty that it is not! I give this my David Crespo stamp of approval.

>>Yoshachu If you ever need an editor, I would be happy to help. I would like to see more of what your offering.

- Altaimare

5911057 Thank you so much. But to be honest... I'm a little scared to. I've heard of stories of what happens to people who get hacked if someone doesn't like their stories and I'm kinda scared to post my newest Grimdark story on here. :fluttershyouch:

5912041 Firstly, I HIGHLY doubt that anyone is going to hack you. Secondly, that's all the more reason to get an editor, you can send it their way and they can brush over it, pointing out the flaws and what does/doesn't work. #I'mDyingToEditForSomeone

- Altaimare

And this is how i got over my cupcakes trauma, this and an overdose of Rocket To insanity alt-end

5912061 Well, in that case, would you like to be my editor? :twilightsmile:

5912727 You just made my day, I would love to edit for you, but, I believe we have a time difference. Not sure about you but, I live in Australia. Also, if this were to go into motion, I believe we need a more convenient way of contact. I hate social media, so that's out of the question, but I do have Skype.

5916031 Well, I'm afraid I don't have a Skype. But I do think I know of another place we could go. Do you have access to Google Docs?

5916133 I wouldn't know if I did.

5916187 Well, if you can, maybe we can use that place? It's private and we both are able to type at once on a document.

5916229 I'll be able to figure it out.

5916536 Uhh, In the story description description, it states;

wrote this story bak in 2012,

... bak... That's extremely ironic, considering you said your writing had improved.

5919891 Sorry, it was a typo. Guess I was typing too quickly ^^;

5919945 I know what you mean, sometimes i'll type slee instead of sell.

5919945 We still need to figure out how i'm going to edit for you, if we're never in contact (well, not really).

This.was.the.best.tickle.fic.I.have.read.EVER!:pinkiehappy:

I sure hope this doesn't happen to me

I honestly liked it! This is the funniest fan fiction I read, even funnier than "Vinyl is a Vampire". If I was in that scenario, but Pinkie Pie might chose to kill instead, I would think "O.K, what is going on?", and would probably be worried when I see the toothbrush. Who knows what she put in it!

I laughed so hard reading this that I'm surprised that I managed to finish it. Great story! :rainbowlaugh::pinkiecrazy::pinkiehappy:

6461759 Hey. Want to take your chances and go to Pinkie's basement?

Make a human or anthro version of this, please.

Now THIS is a Cupcakes story I can totally get behind!!! I was totally tickled to find it...:pinkiehappy:

Seriously, this needs sequels. Have Dash and Pinkie drag thier friends to the basement and tickle them too! Lol!

THIS IS BETTER THAN THE ORIGINAL CUPCAKES!:pinkiesmile::rainbowlaugh:

Really wish this got a sequel where Dash got some ticklish revenge

Why does it say mane 6 if it’s only pinkie pie and rainbow dash in the story

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