This is awesome! Great job

I cried a little for Scootaloo, it's always hard watching someone who tries to act tough break down.

Great chapter! This story is looking good.

>>602067602067

Thankyou so much! :) I'm really glad you like it - it's my first one, so any critique is always helpful. Ofcourse, don't hesitate to let me know if you like it!

Hmm.. interesting! can't wait to see more

Only thing I have to ask about this chapter is what happened to Sweetie Belle, did Rarity explain Scootaloo's situation to her?

This is still good though.

>>603660603660

Not yet no - ofcourse Sweetie Belle will know from someone, but it seems that Applebloom's and Applejack's relationship is 'perfect' compared to Sweetie Belle and Rarity, which was what I wanted to depict. Fear not, she will know!

will we get to see rarity and sweetie belle talk in the next chapter?

this one was sweet. i loved it

Awesome chapter! Can't wait to see how this turns out!

YAY!!! continue soon

Aw I love seeing how much Sweetie Belle and Rarity's relationship as sistes has imporved, it's so adorable.

Now I feel even worse for Scootaloo, no filly should have to suffer the way she does.

>>620167620167 people suffer worse than Scootaloo. In my opinion, no family is better than an abusive family.

>>629100629100 You mean worse right?

Poor Scootaloo, she's really broken down right now.

Wow poor Scootaloo, I hope that things get better for her anyway another awesome chapter.

Awesome chapter! Poor Scootaloo

Princess Luna is best Princess. Scootaloo is best pony.

I'm glad you got her home safely, and I did enjoy the reunion scene. I think you portrayed Rainbow Dash rather well. A week to herself though, Scoots is going to go crazy. Can't wait to see what's next.

Oh, nice to see that Princess Luna was able to help Scootaloo find her way back home.

Looks like Scootaloo has found something to do to keep herself busy for the next week, good for her.

*Come on Bronies don't deny it, you wish you could leap into this fic and give Scootaloo a hug*

yay!!

you can do it scootaloo

>>681852681852 We all KNOW you can, just keep trying, you'll get there someday.

>>681966681966 if roidrage can do it so can you

>>681999681999 Just do it the honest way, not the 'Roidrage' way.

>>682134682134 lol can't wait for the next chapter

When Cheerilee (4 e's) said she was an orphan, I thought for sure she would be Scootaloo's long-lost sister.

>>714364714364

Now that's something I've never thought about.

awwwww cute

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Gabe will dance for more.

Wow that was a awesome chapter i can't wait for the next one.

That was great! I love how RD and Scootaloo both have a stuffed animal! so cute! Nice job.

I think Scootaloo might be going about this the wrong way.

Poor Scootaloo she's worked herself to the point of exhaustion and now she can't do anything.

Only up to chapter 3, but enjoying this story so far. My bed, sadly, sings a siren call to me. I shall return upon the morrow, to continue reading this fine work of words and wills.

In other news: I get weird after 4am.

Oh why did you have to do that Scootaloo has just managed to fly and now you go and crush her spirits, please correct that in the next few chapters.

Good job I love and fanfics.

There are a few grammatical errors here and there that should be fixed (I noticed you tend to not use the correct form of 'too'), but other then that a very cute story. I am looking forward to reading more.

>>792928792928 I see what you did there

I always enjoy these forms of fiction. The orphan story is... touching, and I'm one cold hearted bastard so well done. You have made one old scale rotted dragon shed a tear.

>>900759900759 I got to agree I love the ole Scootaloo is alone and needs a family. Then gets one.

Rainbow Dash made Twilight think she was pregnant that was priceless, I wonder if Pinkie Pie could pull a stunt like that?

>>901032901032 Indeed, I was always a big softy for the rainbow Dash adopting Scoots. I need to learn how to.. soften up like this or my own orphan Scoots will never have the intended effect.

Let me guess, thanks to Spike, there's gonna be a rumor going around that Rainbow Dash is pregnant that's gonna end up causing her all sorts of grief.  

lol

Rainbow dash may become scootaloos mother...so awesome

>>901123901123 after PARTY.MOV... anythings is possible

>>910075910075 Geez that was bad in my tastes, SWAG. MOV had better be good!

>>913310913310 SHED.MOV was where everything went to hell in my opinion....

>>913707913707 I think the problem is that SHED.MOV was the best of the series but it also marked the offical conformation that it was becoming a series that could be milked for more memes but nothing else, I'll never figure out how PARTY.MOV made it to the number 2 spot on The Movie Brony's Top Ten List for June.

>>913878913878 Meh... i liked the first two, but SHED.MOV was where it crossed the line, than PARTY.MOV where they got even worse with the brutalization... MAGIC.MOV wasnt that bad...

>>915577915577 I agree at least MAGIC.MOV tried to be decent, I say the worst was APPPLE.MOV since until PARTY.MOV we had no way of knowing wheter it was in the cannon MOV universe.

>>916951916951 i liked APPLE.MOV... i saw it when it first came out, and i just thought the series was an innocent brutalization of the show (kinda likey youtube poop). I forgot waht rarity's one was called, but it was alright, although i kinda wish she wasnt obese. SHED.MOV was where i was like HOLY SHIT WTF? MAGIC.MOV was kindof a redemption since none of the character's died, well, accept the RD being dead part...PARTY.MOV was once again where they crossed that line by a couple of miles. SWAG.MOV is gonna be the grossest of all i bet

>>918270918270 I agree that Rarity being fat was crossing the line and the Mexicans not being real people, it's a wonder that no one flagged it down for that because in today's world of polotics even the slightest offense angers thousands of soccer moms who have nothing better to do (just look at what they did to Derpy).

And of course PARTY.MOV was so bad the producers pretty much lied in the YouTube description about what the vidoe was actually about, it seems that most Bronies just believe that when one or two videos in a series are good they instantly assume the rest of the series is good and this seems to cause them to be biased in their reviews and they overrate it and underrate other videos that are more original.

>>918525918525 Meh, mexicans not being real people, thats just another brick in the wall for youtube videos. I honestly take nothing in those videos seriously. Trying to make logic out of an illogical situation is impossible

My first thoughts after reading the title:  "Home is where your heart is, but what a shame, because every ones heart doesn't beat the same."

It looks good though, can't wait to read it.

awwww Scoots

... I iz sad now...

By far one of my favorite Scootaloo stories, and trust me when I say I've read most of them on this site. Really really really really really excited for the rest of the story.

>>933850933850

I'm glad you are - thanks for the comment, makes my day, everyday!

Spike you idiot don't you realize what you've done, now poor Scootaloo thinks that Rainbow Dash wil never want her as a sister or daughter.

SHIT JUST GOT REAL... but luckily, my jimmies werent rustlee

This is featured. Oh. My. God.

Congratulations!

I never got around to reading this, sadly, because it's not complete yet, but hey, on the "read later" list it goes.

I knew you could do it. It is more than deserved, friend.

Regards,

                Michael

I got so excited when I saw this had finally updated, and you did not disappoint!

Keep up the good work.

It puts my heart at ease.

im just butting in here but PARTY.MOV was my personal favourite then APPLE.MOV

any way this is my type of story add some romance and then some adventure and id favourite this TO THE MOON

FINALLY!!! This is seriously one of my favorite Scootaloo fics EVER. So happy it updated.

As for the chapter, I only have three things to say about it. First is that Luna did seem a little out of character, specially when she yelled at Scootaloo and everything. I would've thought she would have gotten over that stuff by then. Secondly, I was afraid you were going to freeze Scootaloo to death for a moment when you talked about how cold it was going to be. Thirdly, I'm not sure how I feel about how quickly the CMC gave up looking for Scoots. I would've thought they would have searched around the treehouse some more.

I am hoping for a happy ending.

I have to say I like that Scoots doesn't live in a hellhole or homeless like other fics.

Great chapter, need more

Aw how sweet Luna saves the day (or should I say night) again!

Good update, your writing style is getting better with each chapter. also first

Maybe you should add a cover picture to this story?

Yes!

I've been waiting for this!

*reads*

I... require... MORE!

I'll give you a cookie for another chapter today.

Wow way to drop the bomb there Twilight!

Okay, third Scootaloo story that I am reading today. At least, no dying from cancer in here. I hope.

>>11364391136439

I would like to, really. But I don't know if I can find one I like enough. If I had some computer edit, thingy, I might've done it myself.

Twilight, what have you done?..

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Awesome story, by the way.

(I'm so totally not picking on you for missing spaces in-between some words at least once in every chapter)

This is one of those stories I can say, "Yea there's some errors with spelling, grammar, formatting, etc. But I can look past those and see the awesome story that's being presented." Manly tears were almost shed at the end of chapter 11 but being distracted by checking on my laundry kept them at bay... just barely Keep up the good work and I can't wait to see more

So awesome. This story just keeps getting better and better.

The story was completely confusing and hard to follow at the beginning but as your writing has improved it's gotten a lot easier to read and follow,

Dammit Twilight! Go apologize to Rainbow this instant!

My breakin my heart here!

totaly pinched my story name.

>>11687751168775

Sorry, but I've never seen you story in my life.

I find the story to my liking... You should probably proofread it a couple times though as there are a few grammar mistakes... Also I feel like I'm reading cockney English when reading the Apple dialogue... Still, i ejoy the story as a whole.

Gah! need next chapter! Rainbow PLEASE GET HAPPIER!

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Wait what? I am not sure if I understand Rainbow Dash's outburst. Yeah you think Twilight called you unfit to be a mom, but wouldn't that make Rainbow determined to prove her wrong?

Dawwwww

Yeah, what the hell? Rainbow Dash just grabbed the idiot ball with all four hooves. It's not even out of character, it's just... bizarre. Like, "I can't be close to her so I'll tell her to get bent" might make sense for a jilted lover, but someone looking to adopt a kid? Is Rainbow Dash suddenly bipolar?

Plz I need MOAR

Twilight you're not helping, you need to tell Scootaloo what you told Rainbow Dash and then you need to go apologize or do I have to make you Pinkie Promise again?!

>>11688991168899 Yeah, but the only thing she's scared of is losing. that episode with the sonic rainboom, she was being all wimpy before because she didnt want to make a fool of herself and be wrong and whatnot. I think she's scared to make the effort, because what if she's a crappy mother? i mean, that's a shitty feeling, right? That's why she's all wumpis McGrumpis.... i think.

... This story.. I love it. I am so glad that it's still going. Here, have a Ditzy!

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>>602067602067 ... Dammit *Adds +1 to 'Fluttershy killed me' tally sheet*

>>732920732920 Go Gabe, go! Dance harder! Dance faster! WE WANT MOAR!!!

; ;

>>11765641176564

I've totally never seen this before.

Listening to this while reading... ; ; So many tears...

TWILIGHT?! You...

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... Since you give us sad Scoots n' Dashie, I give you sad Vinyl, bastard...

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>>11774931177493 Really? Have you seen this?

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