• Member Since 23rd Nov, 2014
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Jesus christ, this stuff is SO MUCH WORSE than I remember.

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Alex Aldetoro was a fresh college graduate, who was failing to pay the bills on his apartment. Alex was about to give up, and beg his parents for help, when his life changed forever. Alex was transported into the middle of a tribe of talking bat ponies, and was now supposed to lead them! Good thing Alex is a "natural born leader..."

Fun fact, I didn't realize I was ripping off Assassin's creed when I named the protagonist here.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 16 )

The chapters are way too small and fast paced. You could do better than this. Also, you never mentioned why luna would know about humans. And on another note, the 'humans are monstrous killers' description is extremely overused. It would probably be fine if Luna and her subjects had no idea what he is.

Ah, the whole 'humans are a group of murdering bastards' thing. I wouldn't have minded it if Alex had shoot the idea down, but he basically agreed with the description with the amendment that not all humans were that way.

Really sad, I wish people would have more faith in their own species. I mean canonically ponies have had members who were bad examples too. Sombra, Nightmare Moon, Starlight Glimmer, and how the ponies treated each other before Hearthwarming.

I mean humanity has had its bad moments but the vast majority of people are citizens who live in peace and desire peace. We are more than killers and even then killers are a small minority.

I mean if Alex had said that he had never murdered anyone, that murder was both morally wrong and punished, nor did he know anyone who was a murderer or served in war, and almost all of humanity were just peaceful civilians trying to find their way through life like him, would he had been wrong?

Those word counts are truly ridiculous.

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I agree completely (notice how much emphasis I'm putting on that word). So, I'm trying to make the word counts higher in future chapters.

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Of course you can! I just have to get the chapter long enough for it to be acceptable.

Yeah, sorry, probably shouldn't have posted this, doesn't even feel like a chapter honestly

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(nervous gulp) hehehe...

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Sorry, dont mean to be rude, its just seeing a chapter thats a couple paragraphs long just bugs me

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It should, it really should

So... any updates for this story soon?

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(holds update on a plate for you)

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The opening words have inspired me to a (hopefully) satisfying character arc. Can't wait to write it.

It's a pity that this story was canceled... He had an interesting plot development...:ajsleepy:

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