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Rainbow Dash shot up, gasping. She clutched for something—anything—and found a canvas blanket surrounding her. She hugged herself, shivering, under the shroud of fallen night. Her breaths slowly settled, as well as the frenetic beat of her heart. Sighing, she glanced down at her saddlebag and other belongings, dull shapes under the kiss of starlight. Leaves rustled overhead. The murmuring chirps of various nocturnal animals serenaded her from the apple trees bordering the glade.
It wasn't until five full minutes had passed that Rainbow Dash realized she was caressing the golden pendant about her neck. It felt heavier than ever. Gnashing her teeth, Rainbow seriously considered tossing the ruby-studded item away, but she knew better.
A cold wind blew through the shrouded valley. Rainbow Dash felt her mane kicking like a flag behind her head. She prayed that there'd be colors when the sun rose. Gazing skyward, she regarded the stars with jaded interest. Her afternoon “nap” had carried her well into the fall of evening, but now she had become completely restless. With a groan, she stood up, collected her blankets, her other belongings, and stuffed them into her saddlebag.
Last but not least, she found the crimson apple lying in the rass. She picked it up like an infant, cradling it. Another breath left her, only this time she managed a slight smile. Eventually, she pocketed this too away. Just as she snapped the saddlebag shut, her eyes lingered on the crescent-moon-shaped buttons to her pack. Thoughtfully, she looked up towards the night sky once more. A plume of pale clouds wafted far overhead. A dim glow suggested a waxing moon rising over the edge of the mountaintops.
Rainbow Dash rubbed a hoof over her pendant. She stood quiet and listened. Nothing happened; the golden necklace was just as quiet and dormant as ever. She knew better than to expect otherwise. After all, it wasn't a full moon yet. She was almost glad for the fact.
Wasting no more, time, Rainbow flapped her wings, ascended in a graceful spire, and bulleted her way eastward—away from the taller mountain ranges.
For hours, she glided under the glittering cosmos. The ivory band of the Milky Way stretched majestically above her, unimpeded by any stray lights or colors. Rainbow's nostrils flared as her goggled eyes took in the dull horizon looming beneath her, awash in the pale haze of celestial tranquility. She was alone in the sky, a single spot of warmth burning ever-eastward like a comet. At times, she closed her eyes and imagined she was one with the stars, beautiful and insignificant all at once. Her mind wandered to places as grand if not grander than the nightscape bowing beneath her, and she knew—secretly, she knew—that she was all that mattered in the grand silent dream of it all.
A dozen miles of flight later, Rainbow Dash descended. She was attracted by the sound of rippling water. In the starlight, she spotted a glittering sight below. Upon closer inspection, it turned out to be a babbling brook, cascading down lower and lower crags of justting rock. The water started as a trickle, combined to a rippling stream, then coalesced into a majestic waterfall that emptied into an elevated spring cradled by the convergence of several mountain ranges.
Landing beside this high altitude pool, Rainbow Dash raised her goggles and gazed with naked eyes. She produced a whistle of wonderment The water was so pure, that even in the dim starlight she could see three dozen feet straight down to the bottom of the spring. Smiling, she tilted down and gave the liquid a gentle lap with her tongue. Her upper body shuddered; it was the cleanest water she had drunk in all her adult life.
She drank liberally, like a foal lapping at delicious milk. Her body felt instantly refreshed. She forgot about the starlight, about the moon, about dreams. She was simply alive.
Rainbow Dash exhaled long and hard. She had to carry some of this beauty with her. Squatting down, she reached into her saddlebag and produced her empty canteen. Swiftly, she filled it to the brink, smiling victoriously at her acquisition. Just as she finished screwing the top back on, something bright and lavender darted on the edge of her peripheral vision.
Rainbow Dash gasped. She spun about, blinking. She was alone in the tiny spring clearing. The only moving shadows were those belonging to her. Nevertheless, that didn't calm her beating heart, nor did the blinding sensation that swiftly followed.
She squinted. She gazed sideways towards a crest of jagged rock to her right. Murderous beams of gold were setting the air on fire as the first slivers of sunlight pierced the otherwise tranquil moment. A part of her shuddered, regretting the death of darkness.
With icy resolve, she picked herself up, pocketed the canteen away, and faced the burning dawn. Raising her hoof, she twisted the dial of her goggles and covered her ruby eyes with dark lenses. The pure taste of spring water was like an angelic song on the tip of her tongue. She savored it, as she did all pleasant flavors that still clung to her, and carried the weight of the pendant with her as she flew into the fire.
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Yet another very beautiful and descriptive chapter. I can imagine everything in it as crisply as if I was there.
That part about the pendant at the beginning is kind of ominous, so I can't wait to see the story behind that.
I hope she meets up with some intelligent life soon. I want some dialogue! Some explanations!
As convinced as I am that she's running away from something, that line about the pendant remaining dormant suggests that perhaps she's on a quest.
"Ivory band of the Milky Way"?
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Bronies! Begin working on the rocket!![]()
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Mayhaps RD sided with Luna in a luna vs celly fight while the rest of the elements went with Celestia?
Loving the story so far ![]()
Are you implying that she's a God damn werewolf?
I think you are.
New theory: She's running from everyone, and civilization -- including her friends -- because she is a werewolf. Something must have went down, and I suspect that her dream is when she first transformed.
Honestly, this is the thing that makes the most sense. She wants to go were no one will find her, so she wont hurt anyone. She misses her friends, she dearly does, but she has to do this...
But then what is the book for, and why the Lunar seal? Hmm... new theory is that she is going to find a cure, and they gave her supplies to do so...
So many ideas, just look at me toss them out there xD
IIIIIt's Dashie's evaluation time!
So in this chapter, we learn that something having to do with the element of loyalty necklace will happen on a full moon. Also, since Twilight is lavender, that flash that Dash saw could be her. Also, my previous theory that Dash was discorded seems to have been thwarted. If she had been discorded, she would not have cared for the element of loyalty necklace. So it seems she is normal right now. This story continues to immerse me...These are my thoughts.
-MASH
Listening to Kyne's Peace helps elevate the emotional levels of this story (at least in my opinion).
Despite all the evidence in the contrary, I still believe Dash is trying to fly towards the moon.
Also, how do they know the world is round if they havn't circumnavigated the world. I mean ponies have globes, so somehow they figured it out.
Finally, the plant of ponies is in the milky way too!!!!! Quick guys, build a rocket!!! If we are fast we can find equestrian by the time we have all transcended past the trivial concepts of space, time and physical existence.
So far this is brilliant. Starting off with just beautifully simplistic description with a little bit of mysterious foreshadowing, and now this!
What IS this? MLP+LoTR+Marabou Stork Nightmares-Scottish Phonetics?!?
Whatever it is, its exactly how I wish I could write. And your portrayal of Rainbow is Perfect; you have definetly gotten me worried for her though!
Only 135 more chapters to go, woohoo!
Also, I'm writing this at 1am and taking a shot for each time I complete a chapter. Wish me luck!
I dont even care what happens the next 169 chapters. These first five earn you a Fave, and massive props, and eternal and unending love. Thank you so much.
I love you for how you write Rainbow Dash.
Okay, so RD's either a werewolf or an Oozaru. Great chapter, btw. Only saw one mistake:
Last but not least, she found the crimson apple lying in the rass.
Did you mean grass?
The only reason I'm not favouriting this is because I don't want 195 unread chapters blaring at me. Consider it a spiritual favourite ![]()
Chp.5
"She produced a whistle of wonderment The water was so pure"
-lack of punctuation, or lack of punctuation as punctuation?
I'm an absolute idiot with my predictions, and I apologize if you read the one from last chapter.
Well, color me impressed. I'm really loving how this is worded and how the scenery is being described.







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