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Rainbow Dash stopped staring at the ground, and the first thing she saw was Pinkie Pie's bright blue eyes. A breath escaped her lips as she saw her friend waving towards her from the front entrance to Sugarcube Corner. More bright colors joined the fray, with Rarity winking and Twilight giggling and Fluttershy and Applejack strolling around the bend.
Pinkie Pie cupped her hooves around her mouth and hollered something before motioning Rainbow Dash dramatically towards the group.
With a bright smile, Rainbow wasted no time. She blurred over the rooftops of Ponyville on sapphiric wings. Touching down in a billowing cloud of dust, she struck a heroic pose... only to blink confusedly at what she saw.
Pinkie Pie was making a strange face. Twilight Sparkle was squinting. Fluttershy and Rarity flinched in disgust while Applejack marched up and pointed worrisomely at Rainbow's face.
Rainbow Dash was confused. She turned to look in the windows of Sugarcube Corner. Her reflection glossed over. In a blink, her eyes morphed into red-on-yellow phantoms of their usual ruby luster. Before she had a chance to react to this, a lock of her mane fell limply from her head.
She fell on her haunches and raised two hooves in time to catch the limp hairs. When they fell in her grasp, they lost all of their color, turning to a pallid gray... along with the rest of her coat. She gasped, glancing at her limbs, trying to find where her bright blue hues had disappeared to. She heard a whimpering sound.
Spinning, Rainbow Dash glanced towards her friends, but they were gone. Sugarcube Corner had also vanished, and in its place was a dense wall of green foliage. Rainbow hyperventilated, finding herself surrounded by a labyrinth of emerald hedges. She flexed her wing muscles, but all her feathers were suddenly gone. Just as she felt the urge to scream, she heard the whimper again, only this time it was directly overhead.
She tried looking straight up, but her neck was being weighed down by a golden pendant. After much sweat and aching, she finally gazed skyward, only to be flooded with a wall of ash.
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The dream....there are subtle hints in there. She loses her hair, then her friends, and then her feathers. Then she is destroyed by ash....
I'm guessing she lost something. Maybe her friends. Perhaps the town was destroyed by some disastorous event and she's running away. I'm just taking guess.
Rather short chapter, but oh well. Nothing to really critique. So I guess I'll move on to the next chapter.
Okay, screw what I just said, she's guilty as all hell.
She is most likely running from something, or too something? Maybe she's looking for help, and she feels she's abandoning her friends? Maybe, possibly...
Dude, or ma'am, seriously, this is how you write a story. If you want readers, give them a mystery.
IIIIIIIIIIIIt's Dashie's evaluation time!
Okay, so so far we know that Dash is traveling somewhere, either towards or away from something. Her nightmare has her lose her color and become gray, as well as lose her wings. This is strikingly similar to the Discord incident, wherein she both lost her wings and was "discorded," turning her color to gray. We can also recall that Dash was the most difficult to "un-discordize." Perhaps in this fanfic's universe, she gave the mane six more trouble that they expected, and Dash got away. Now, since Dash lost her element of loyalty from being discorded, it would make sense if, in this fanfic, she was traveling away from her friends. That still doesn't explain, however, why she currently has the element of loyalty necklace. Regardless of how she has it, it seems that it is affecting her judgement in some way. Since it is the element of loyalty, it wants to be loyal. And assuming all if the above is true, assuming that she is discorded and running from her friends, the element of loyalty necklace is trying to make Dash go back to her friends, (perhaps by sending her dreams,) even though she doesn't want to. These are my thoughts so far.
-MASH
I was about to type "tell me whats going on" in angry font. but then I read this chapter and my hunger was saited... for now.
Great illistration, whenever I feel like I need to write a fanfic, I'll read yours to remind myself that there is no way I could pull it off. Descriptions like yours are just too dang good.
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POTENTIAL SPOILERS, I DON'T KNOW BUT COULD BE IF I'M ANY GOOD AT GUESSING
Okay here's what I think. Most people seem to have forgotten an extremely important detail from chapter 2, that map had a lunar seal on it. If I'm right, she's undergoing a mission under direct orders from the princesses to explore uncharted lands. Why, you ask? Well if this dream gives any insight, it appears something of the sort of a mass volcano probably now threatens to destroy the entire known map, and RD was picked for her speed. The reason her element continues to bear her down is still pretty vague, but maybe something to do with memories of home, and maybe there is some sort of effort underway to stop the volcano, and she feels like she's not being loyal by abandoning her friend for this mission. Maybe she never even got to say a proper goodbye, who knows. The book from chapter two almost definitely imo is something that reminds her too much of home, hence the avoidance. Just my opinion, and I know it sound stupid, but you never know. 
Image: http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_lycg7lMnDI1qd6e0i.jpgI'm currently caught up and to date with Innavedr, and coming back to this chapter, that last line was SO AWESOME. DAMN IC, YOU PLANNED THIS ONE GOOD.
She tried looking straight up, but her neck was being weighed down by a golden pendant. After much sweat and aching, she finally gazed skyward, only to be flooded with a wall of ash.spoiler alert further on
It's not just ashes, it's the ashes of all your dead friends 
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