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  • 38w, 15h
    A Timeline of MPLT's Equestria

    This is the general, personal canon timeline surrounding the stories of Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight, covering the past of Equestria. All years are given in BD (Before Discord) or AD (After Discord), given that Discord's reign over Equestria is one of, if not the defining moment that divides Equestria from being ruled by ponies to being ruled by the god-like Princesses. A general description of each era will be included.

    BD 1000(?)-600  - The Pre-Classical Era

    Though many documents have been lost to history, those that remain describe the early Pre-Classical Era as a harsh time, as the Three Tribes of pony-kind were greatly at odds with each other. Around the mid-point, however, the Time of Ice occurred, as the Windigos assaulted the old pony lands and froze them under a blanket of ever-lasting winter. This lead to the expeditions commonly depicted in Hearth's Warming Eve pageants, as well as the kindling of the Fire of Friendship and the subsequent banishment of the Windigos. Those that remained of the Three Tribes founded Equestria, carving out a country out of the bountiful, but untamed land they had discovered.

    BD 599-1 - The Classical Era

    The time before Discord's arrival saw the flowering of early pony society, as the three tribes were merged into a single conglomerate culture due to both proximity, intermarriage between the tribes and reaction to the events of the Time of Ice. The resulting mish-mash of Unicorn courtly culture, Pegasus military tradition, and Earth Pony agrarian aristocracy lead to a curious society that was simultaneously feudal but oddly egalitarian. Given that there was a great deal of land up for grabs, many would-be nobles could easily acquire large estates, provided one had enough followers to hold it.

    The major ruling organization of this time was the Equestrian Triune Council, a deliberative styled after the Pegasi Senate and the Earth Pony’s Field Congress, though only open to property holders as per Unicorn tradition. The Triune Council was where debates of policy were held and grievances could be aired in an open forum. Many prominent philosophers such as the pegasus brothers Socratic Question and Platonic Ideal became famous in this era. Meanwhile, brave adventurers and knights errant wandered the land and sky, establishing contact with numerous other civilizations such as the Gryphon Clans, the Minotaur Primarchy, the Zebrican Tribes, the Caliphates of Saddle Arabia and the (now long defunct) Diamond Dog Empire.

    Sadly, the later portions of the Classical Era were marked by increasing social stratification and infighting, as smaller nobles were integrated into larger dynasties by either force or marriage, the numerous bloodlines forming the basis for the Noble Houses of Equestria. By the arrival of Discord, thirty noble houses dominated the Triune Council, equally representing all three breeds of pony-kind.

    ??? - The Discordian Era

    Records of this time make it difficult to determine how long Discord’s reign actually lasted. What few intact records remain speak of the draconequus’ sudden appearance in central Equestria and subsequent domination of all those who dared oppose him. Those  who did not manage to flee the country or take refuge were left to Discord’s mad whims. The Era came to an end, however, by the equally sudden and miraculous appearance of Celestia and Luna, and the subsequent sealing away of Discord.

    AD 1-242/253 - Post-Discordian Era / The Early First Diarchic Period

    This time, formerly referred to as the Post-Discordian Era, was a time of strife and change. With the appearance of Celestia and Luna, pony society found itself beneath the hooves of a pair of powerful, but benevolent leaders. However, with enemies closing in on all sides and the population still wracked by Discord’s malfeasance, Equestria was forced to trust in the two alicorns. Thankfully, the two sisters quickly set about fixing the many problems besieging the land, eventually becoming recognized by the remaining Noble Houses and granted stewardship of the land. In addition, contact was made with the ponies of the Crystal Empire, whose patronage and alliance with Equestria helped to stabilize the healing country’s northern borders.

    Politically, however, the Noble Houses retained much of their power in day-to-day affairs. The nobles of the time often exploited their connection to and relations with the Princesses in order to expand and maintain their personal control over their domains. Pony society became increasingly stratified, forming a roughly pyramidal shape, with the Princesses at the top, followed by the nobles, and then the common pony-folk below. Contrary to common belief, not all of the commoners were Earth Ponies; unicorns born to laborer families and pegasi of lower status were also commonly exploited by the nobility of all breeds.

    The era’s boundaries with the following era are often debated by scholars. Some believe that the era came to a close after the signing of the Concordian Covenant and the establishment of the Common Laws. Others believe that the founding of the new capital at Canterlot marks the end of this era. The distinction is largely academic.

    AD 254-354 - The Concordian Era / The Late First Diarchic Period

    The relatively brief Concordian Era is viewed by romantics as a golden era in Equestrian history. With the many threats to Equestria banished, the lingering effects of Discord’s reign gone and much of Equestria’s territory tamed and managed, stability had finally reasserted itself. However, while the Concordian Era was a time of peace and safety, it was also a time of corruption and decadence, particularly amongst the ruling classes. With social classes becoming progressively more rigid, social mobility became something of an impossibility for the lower classes. Meanwhile, the nobility indulged in revelry and idleness, their lavish estates often the sites of many parties and fetes.

    Many traditions, particularly those surrounding modern holidays such as Nightmare Night and the Summer Sun Celebration can trace their roots back to this time, whether they be folk traditions of the peasantry or the more opulent festivals of the wealthy. However, it was also this era that saw the disappearance of the Crystal Empire, and the rise (and subsequent banishment) of Nightmare Moon. Though whether it was this event, or the later pronouncement by Princess Celestia to the public (commonly titled as ‘I, The Rising Sun,’ by historians) that lead to the end of the Concordian Era, pony-kind would soon find itself thrown into discord once more.

    AD 355-440 - The Interregnum

    The period known as the Interregnum was a time of strife not seen in Equestria for generations. Having been ousted from their positions of power, the Noble Houses of Equestria turned on Princess Celestia, attempting to regain their original statuses by force. Some attempted assassination, while others sought aid from forces outside of Equestria. No matter the source, Equestria found itself in a state of civil war.

    Unfortunately for the traitors, Princess Celestia was quite intent on keeping the country and the common ponies in one piece by any means necessary. By the end of the period, only a small hoof-full of ponies with noble blood remained; those who had turned traitor were either publicly executed or exiled in perpetuity, while Celestia beat back invasions and assaults with the raw power of the sun and a newly reformed Royal Guard. The scars of this period still remain in some places, and Celestia’s wrath fell quite harshly on some lands.

    By the end, however, Celestia stood supreme and unquestioned over a unified Equestria.

    AD 441-500 - The Early Solar Monarchy / The Solar Tyranny

    The transition from the Interregnum to the monarchy was difficult. Initially, Princess Celestia stood as the sole governing authority of Equestria. As absolute monarch, Celestia’s word was law, and with the fires of the civil war still fresh in the populace’s minds none dared oppose her or her forceful reforms. Many of the practices commonly exhibited by the common pony towards Celestia have their origin in this time period as a way of not offending the Sun Princess; an act that could have very well invited destruction upon a foolish pony at the time.

    Modern ponies unfamiliar with the history of their ruler would find Celestia’s practices of this time to be quite discomforting. Dictatorial control was the order of the day. Many historical documents were either heavily censored or archived away from the public eye. The punishment of criminals was often harsh and public, and often at Celestia’s own hoof. The Concordian Covenant was completely forgotten, and the Common Law was held at Celestia’s mercy. Over time, however, Celestia began to move away from these practices and towards the more merciful ruler we now know.

    AD 501-1000 - The Middle Solar Monarchy

    This era is what many ponies think of when one mentions Celestia’s reign. After the initial state of tyranny, Celestia began establishing many of the offices of the Royal Bureaucracy, many of which still exist today. Royal investitures into education allowed for the rapid spread of universal literacy and the establishment of schools and universities, including Celestia’s own School For Gifted Unicorns. Meanwhile, the re-development of the mercantile class laid the groundwork for the modern Equestrian middle class. Many national holidays and days of service, such as the Winter Wrap-Up and the Running of the Leaves were instituted in order to inspire a sense of civic duty and camaraderie between fellow ponies, with Celestia often leading by public example.

    AD 1001 - 1354 - The Late Solar Monarchy

    The most recent era (outside of the current era) still remains in living memory. With the development of new technology and advancements in magical research, many common chores and tasks became much easier to handle for the modern pony, particularly with the development of magically powered machinery. In addition, this time saw the founding of several settlements, such as Dodge City, Appleloosa, and (most notably) Ponyville.

    During this time, Celestia partially withdrew from the public eye, investing more power into her bureaucracy and serving (for a time) as a political leader only when necessary, focusing more on a long line of personal protégés culled from her School for Gifted Unicorns. Scholars now reason that this change in behavior was due to the approaching time of Nightmare Moon’s return from exile, a piece of knowledge that only Celestia was truly privy to. The waning years of the era saw the appearance of numerous unique events: the first recorded Sonic Rainboom, the appearance of a giant dragon in Canterlot Castle, and most importantly the return of Nightmare Moon and her subsequent defeat and redemption at the hooves of Twilight Sparkle and her friends.

    AD 1355 - Current Time (AD 1367) - The Second Diarchic Period

    The current era of Equestrian history has seen more than its fair share of world-shaking events. The sudden reappearance of the infamous Spirit of Chaos and Disharmony, Discord, was one such event, only rivaled in scope by his re-sealing and eventual rehabilitation at the hooves of the Elements of Harmony. The sudden reappearance of the long-lost Crystal Empire was the second, heralded by the appearance of the terrifying monster Sombra, who was defeated by the now Crystal Princess Mi Amore Cadenza.

    However, the third event is the one that many historians feel will mark the age; the arrival of and alliance with the extra-dimensional beings known as humans. The arrival of these strange creatures has already lead to massive changes throughout Equestria, not only economically and technologically, but culturally and socially as well. Some older ponies are worried about how this new species, lead by the Time-Space Administration Bureau, will change and influence their once-peaceful country. Others, however, are excited by these new opportunities and the possibility of leaving their own world for strange new lands. Whether for good or ill, Equestria will no longer be the same.

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  • 47w, 14h
    What's Canon in MPLT? (Updated)

    There's been some discussion and curiosity as to what episodes from FiM are canon in Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight. But fret not. Herein lies my 'word of god' from the series bible I have for this fic. Since this is an AU, some episodes will be considered non-canon for the purposes of this work. For now, here's the basic list.

    Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight: The first 'season' of the fic takes place between the events of The Best Night Ever and Return of Harmony. As such, the Jewel Seed Incident occurs before Discord's escape.

    Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight A's: The second 'season' occurs during Season 2, but before the events of A Canterlot Wedding. By the time the Wolkenritter attack, Discord is sealed away as a statue. Until A Canterlot Wedding, the episodes proceed as normal.

    After A's, the following changes are in effect.

    A Canterlot Wedding -Heavily Changed. There is no Changeling attack on Canterlot. The wedding goes off without a hitch.

    The Crystal Empire - Mostly unchanged, though Yuuno and Princess Luna are involved in the events in the Empire.

    Too Many Pinkie Pies - Mostly unchanged.

    One Bad Apple - No Change.

    Magic Duel - Non-Canon. The Alicorn Amulet is still at large, however.

    Sleepless in Ponyville - No Change

    Wonderbolt Academy - No Change

    Apple Family Reunion - No Change

    Spike at Your Service - Non-Canon. No real relation to MPLT, I just greatly dislike the episode.

    Games Ponies Play/Just For Sidekicks - No Change

    Keep Calm and Flutter On - No Change. Discord will likely show up later in StrikerS.

    Magical Mystery Cure - Non-Canon. This is primarily because of how alicorns work in the MPLT-verse. There will be no Twilacorn. The only reason Twilight is called 'The Alicorn Ace' in StrikerS is because her flight spell gives her magic wings, thus making her look like one of the alicorn princesses.

    Equestria Girls - Heavily Changed. Twilight may have experimented with being human, but not in high school. Sunset Shimmer is still around. She just didn't jump through a magic mirror into the human world...

    Princess Twilight Sparkle - Heavily Changed, though the Elements were still given up. They also receive the Mysterious Box of Harmony (tm).

    Castle Mane-ia - Mostly Unchanged.

    Daring Don't - Non-Canon. I'd prefer Daring Do to remain a fictional character.

    Flight to the Finish - No Change

    Power Ponies - No Change

    Bats! - No Change

    Rarity Takes Manehattan - No Change

    Pinkie Apple Pie - No Change

    Rainbow Falls - No Change.

    Three's a Crowd - No Change

    Pinkie Pride - No Change

    Simple Ways - No Change

    Filli Vanilli - No Change

    Twilight Time - Still Canon, but no Twilacorn.

    It Ain't Easy Being Breezies - Still Canon, but... ugh...

    Somepony to Watch Over Me - No Change

    Maud Pie - No Change

    Trade Ya - Still Canon, but no Twilacorn

    For Whom the Sweetie Belle Tolls - No Change

    Leap of Faith - No Change

    Testing, Testing, 1, 2, 3 - No Change

    Inspiration Manifestation - No Change

    Equestria Games - No Change

    Twilight's Kingdom - Pretty much non-canon. No Twilacorn as previously mentioned, and I'm not sure what to do with the Box of Harmony quite yet. However, Tirek's magic-eating does fit in with the Book of Darkness. As an aside, I'm pretty sure the Wolkenritter would try to kill Tirek almost immediately if they found him.

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  • 124w, 2d
    Chapter 5!

    Politics! Drama! Foreshadowing a-plenty!

    Finally, the owner of the Book of Darkness is revealed!

    All this and more in Chapter 5 of Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight A's; Shall We Take To The Stage?

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  • 133w, 6d
    Chapter 3 Updated

    Yaaaay New Chapter of A's! Yaaay!

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  • 137w, 2d
    Where's Chapter 3?

    I bet everypony is wondering where the next chapter of Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight A's is. Mea culpa. I haven't exacty been very creative recently. I'm also prepping for a presentation on the fandom that I'll be giving in two weeks. I haven't been in a writing mood, to say the least.

    I'll try to have MPLT A's up sometime soon, but I'm not sure when.

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What if Nanoha never became the White Devil?

Twilight Sparkle, as everypony knows, is a magical pony by nature and profession. However, even she is confused when she encounters a mysterious ferret and an equally mysterious jewel. Forced into conflict by a monster attack, Twilight releases the power of the jewel, summoning the device known as Raising Heart.

Tasked with the retreival of a set of mysterious artifacts known as the Jewel Seeds, Twilight and her friends face an entirely new set of challenges. Unbeknownst to them, however, forces outside of Equestria are moving to claim the very same artifacts they now hunt.

A crossover with Magical Girl Lyrical Nanoha, with an equine twist!

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A sequel has begun. Go Here For Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight A's

Magical Pony Lyrical Twilight by PurpleProse is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NonCommercial-ShareAlike 3.0 Unported License.

First Published
11th Nov 2011
Last Modified
21st Feb 2012

I've watched Nanoha (original, A's, Strikers) and read a few of the mangas.  This alternate crossover promises to be interesting.  Looking forward to more!

As an anime junkie I read the synopsis and had to click! I was not disappointed. A solid start and I'd like to see how it continues.

Twilight Sparkle is going to befriend the Hayfeathers out of the multiverse.

Add in what might as well be a lost Lugia under her control (elements of Harmony), I expect great, and TERRIBLE things to come from her.  

In short, Orbital Friendship Cannon, GO!?

>>29320

The Elements will be playing a role later on, though probably not the way you expect. :twilightsmile:

I love this!^_^

It's really great!^_^

A good fanfic!^_^

Just... please keep Yuno and Fate human. Don't turn them into ponies. It'd be more interesting that way, especially if it developed into Twilight/Fate there.

Oh, and since Twilight Sparkle is 17 or so, please make Fate the same age instead of a 9 year old little girl. Most definitely Fate should be her age if there's going to be a relationship then.

Since the Jewel Seeds didn't land on Earth, what happened to Nanoha in this universe? Did she live a normal life inheriting the cafe eventually getting married - having kids and dying of old age later on then? And does this mean that Hayate never encountered the Book of Darkness, but that it went to a pony somewhere on Equestria instead and will show up?

Oh, and Spike saw the Raising Heart gem and didn't try to eat it then?! That just doesn't seem like Spike much. Given how he's always looking for snacks.

What will the TSAB do when they find out that almost every unicorn on Equestria can bind with an Intelligent Device of great power? Well, most unicorns would be D, C, and B ranks. Only the really rare ones like Twilight being able to be A and S rank. Celestia and Luna would blow the scale right out of the water. They have too much for an Intelligent Device to bond to them without exploding. Unless the sun and moon are their Intelligent Devices. Now that would explain much.

^_^

^_^

As a Nanoha fan, I am indeed interested in seeing how this goes...

I don't know how Yuuno will take to Owliscious (and vice-versa) though... ;)

I like how Spike was trying to get her to dismiss the importance of the Gem, probably so he could eat it.

that was a grid story more i like it  

this is brilliant hope you update soon

*re-checks previous chapter for something*

So... The Royal Sisters appear to have some past history with the TSAB, and the magic related to either Raising Heart or the Jewel Seeds has some sort of connection with Nightmare Moon.  Heck, it would not surprise me if Celestia and Luna turn out to be some form of Lost Logia or some other restricted/banned magic. :trixieshiftright:

Looking forward to more! :twilightsmile:

Okay, wonder how they're related to this Mid-Childa. I know nothing of Nanoha...:fluttershysad:

Interested in wanting more. Keep them coming!

>>38450

If you're not familiar with the show, you can find episodes on YouTube easily. Also, here's a link to the wiki.

http://nanoha.wikia.com/wiki/Magical_Girl_Lyrical_Nanoha_Wiki

I'm already working on Chapter Three, which will have a bit more backstory. I hope this helps. :twilightsmile:

While Twilight doesn't seem to stock combat magic, I would say she has seen combat, assuming that at least Season 1 is canon for this:

The manticore

Twilight vs. Nightmare Moon

Twilight vs. Hydra

Elements of Harmony zapping Discord (if we go season 2)

She just doesn't see it often and she's not geared towards it.  But she has seen enough danger/combat that she has experience of it.

Anyway, that's a small quibble.  I greatly enjoyed this.  

>>39948

Thanks fo the comment. I've made some slight amendments to Chapter 2.

Well lets see here... the Belkan Empire in MGLN collapsed roughly a hundred-fifty years before the Nanoha plot, with the TSAB formally established 75 years later. Given how old Celestia and Luna are, they might even be related to Al-Hazard...

I doubt they know that much about the TSAB though.

naturally, the well over a thousand year old princesses would be a wealth of information to a acheologist like Yuuno, if he ever realized they knew anything about the outside universe of course. :trollestia: Twilight might not be trained in combat magic, but she will likely drag barriers and healing (at least) out of Yuuno, and Rising Heart seems to be very proficent in teaching offensive spells. (Basic ones mind, but a solid foundation) However, Jewel Seeds in Equestria sounds like a recipe for disaster (and thrilling heroics!) I will be watching this with great enthusiasm! :twilightsmile:

If Twilight is nervous about combat magic and Twilight doesn't want to harm somepony then Yuno should just tell her that Midchildan magic can be set on "stun" or "kill" settings.

Oh lord Pony Tesstarosa is going to be so friggin adorable.

Glad to see a new chapter up, definitely interested to see how it goes- You've got a pretty solid handle on everypony, and every human for that matter, so far. :)

Loved the description of Fate, there. Also her thanking Missus Cake for the cookie.

Yuuno should probably mention dragons live in the TSAB's territory if not normally Mid-Childia itself, given that it is unlikely Caro is the only dragon summoner around.  (I don't know if you're familiar with season 3, Striker S.)

Good chapter.

>>59182

I'm familiar with StrikerS, but it's been a while since I've seen it. I just figured Yuuno wouldn't have a lot of experience with dragons. He's an archeologist, not a biologist after all.

I'll make some edits though.

>>58799

I figure it's less about 'stun and kill' and more about the idea of combat magic in general. Sure, she's fought before, but using her magic in an offensive capacity to actively harm is probably distasteful to her. Remember, most of her 'battles' have been won by reasonably pacifistic methods (i.e. curing Nightmare, re-sealing Discord, etc).

So will Pinkie Pie be throwing a party for Fate and Arf since they're new to Ponyville and all?  Nice touch with the visual for the Mid-style circle.

Just out of curiousity, should I keep adding images to the stories? I don't want to interrupt the flow too much, but it sometimes helps with the descriptions of the non-MLP characters.

>>69446 For anyone who hadn't seen the series your crossovering with like me then yes it's a good idea.

I want to see Fate meet the CMC.. That would be interesting to read.

>>69446

I'd say yes.

And wow, what an ending! Great finish, there. Awesome action, too.

Arf looks hot, I wanna f**k her.^_^

A promising story with an interesting concept... ruined horribly.

From a technical standpoint it is high quality. The style and pacing are good. As is the dialog. The action is decent.

Then you go and make all of it meaningless by nailing yourself to the canon plot. Following canon, almost to the point of lifting scenes wholesale, simply doesn’t work for a crossover like this.

Twilight is NOT Nanoha. Twilight’s friends are NOT helpless muggles. Events should NOT be playing out as they did on earth.

I had high hopes when Yuuno started getting a larger role. Then you decided to effectively ignore half the cast.

You are clearly a skilled writer and you have shown a good grasp of the characters. You can do better than a rehash of Nanoha season 1.

Pictures are fine. Be nice if we can get some fan art of Pony!Fate.

>>69446

Yeah, I think it's for the best-- Maybe even backtrack and put in one for Yuuno's first human appearance.

>>69880

To be fair, I'm not trying to completely rehash the plot of Nanoha season one. I just felt that I needed to hit a few key plot points from the canon before I started diverging from the series entirely, i.e. Raising Heart's acquisition, the first battle with Fate, et cetera.

I disagree with the whole "helpless muggles" bit. It's just that, aside from Rainbow Dash, the rest of the cast doesn't have the same level of firepower to throw around, especcially against someone like Fate. Rainbow would do well, but the second she gets hit with a solid binding spell it'd be game over. The other ponies will be playing a greater role in the upcoming chapters, though. I'm really not trying to ignore the cast, but it's a bit difficult giving everypony something to do while juggling the main plotline.

I don't mind the criticism. Expect to see something different in Chapter 5.

>>69880

On a further note, this is Season One Twilight. She hasn't quite developed the full-blown awesomeness of her powers like in Season Two.

>>69997

Capabilities matter little, Twilight’s friend would not have stood around while she got blasted. Applejack, Dash and Rarity all have ways they could have attempted to help. (Pinkie is harder to say.)

Why did Fluttershy not confront Arf about the Hydra? About trying to eat her friends?

You are railroading over the characters trying to force a plot built for vastly different circumstances.

It would probably annoy me less if you hadn’t already changed things to fit the setting, such as Twilight getting a royal mandate. Why does the first encounter need to go exactly like it did for Nanoha?

>>70333 No I'm not. Arf is a grown woman(familiar?) with really big boobs.^_^ If I was a complete and utter pervert I would have made that remark about Fate or Yuno or one of the ponies.

>>70567

Good point. I fell in the usual trap of trying to adhere too close to the episode. I'm in the process of rewriting chapter 4.

Thank you for your criticism.

Reuploaded Chapter 4. Tell me what you think, for good or ill.

>>71319 I love you had Fluttershy use The Stare on the wolf girl. Nice Touch. :scootangel:

If they can't get her to be firend, then maybe CMCs can pull that off. Apple Bloom is my favorite CMC.

Much, much better.

All the characters are portrayed well and totally in character, all of them are involved and you managed to give the same general outcome as canon with vastly different events. You were even able to maintain the ‘power/numbers vs experience’ dynamic.

Most impressive.

If I had to pick my favourite part... Rainbow Dash complaining about Fate’s quasi-Pegasus abilities. Although “SIT” comes a very close second.

I love how Fate notices how different this place is the her own with th whole kindness comment. That and It is a nive touvh bringing the diamond dogs and Zecora into this chapter. By any chance will you mention Hearth's Warming Eve at any point?

>>84408

Not quite yet. Zecora, however, will be playing a bigger role in the coming chapters.

I've only read the first chapter so far, but I figured I'd post here on the latest chapter, as you are more likely to notice it here. *added after I wrote the rest of the post* - Forgive the rant, it's nothing personal. I mean no offense. Just.. why Raising Heart, rather than Raging? GAH!!!!

I love Nanoha. It is one of my favorite anime of all time. I also love MLP, and think that this could have great promise.

That said.. by the time I got done reading Ch 1, I was just as irritated by your use of Raising Heart rather than Raging Heart as I was by the translators doing the exact same thing in Strikers, when it clearly is Raging Heart in Nanoha and Nanoha A.. and as it's rather difficult to hear exactly what she's saying at times amidst the Japanese.. arguably she's still calling it Raging Heart in Strikers and they just translated it as Raising Heart instead. Why this irritates me? Two reasons. One, they started off calling it one thing then change it to something else later? No, I'm sorry, Nanoha wouldn't have changed it's name in the 10ish years between A and Strikers, and it was clearly the same device, not a new one or anything. So it's consistency as much as anything.

The second reason (and arguably the better reason) is that Raging Heart is a much much much stronger name, and one that fits the device (and the activation chant) a hell of a lot better than Raising Heart. Hell, I don't even know what "raising heart" means... are you raising somepony named Heart or something? >.< Raging Heart on the other hand is a much better fit, especially with the activation command.. "The winds blow in the sky, the stars are in the heavens, and a resolute heart beats in my chest!"

(Granted, I still hear Nanoha in my head with her "Raging Heart, Onegai!" lol.)

>>84643

To be fair, I prefer Raging Heart myself, and I do agree with you as far as the anime is concerned. Raging Heart fits Nanoha better, considering her skill in battle and all-around fighty tendancies.

However, there's two reasons why I went with Raising Heart; first, it's the apparent canonical name according to the documents I've seen on the Nanoha Wiki.

And second...well, that's to be revealed later in the story. Suffice it to say that there's a reason why it's called Raising Heart. :twilightsmile:

>>84643 Rasing sounds better than Raging. Nanoha's device is not acting enraged at all in the series. But raising is what she does to Nanoha's levels(mana,control,accuracy)... those levels are raised. Also the raising can be implied to be something positive like raising(uplifting) one's heart(emotions) and sounds much better than something that puts rage in your heart then_ well in my opinion. So I like the Raising so much better than the Raging and think it's cool.

>>84706

Pretty much. Again, I like Raging, but I also don't mind Raising. I went with Raising Heart because it was the canon name and for...certain other reasons. I do think Raising fits Twilight better than it fits Nanoha in the context of the story and setting.

I see what you both are saying. When I see it with Nanoha... well, there are multiple forms of rage. No, the device isn't acting enraged at all... (though in Nanoha A it does ask for the cartridge load upgrade itself, as with Bardiche..) but I will put forth that Nanoha herself acts out of righteous fury and sheer indignation on more than a few occasions. The fight with Fate in Nanoha ep 11 for example, and then when they go and attack Precia's base... some of her fights against Vita-chan and later Reinforce / the Automated Defense Program or whatever it's called. And then I pose to you, Nightgazer, this question, the eternal question of mages: Does the wand actually raise / increase her power, or does it simply act as a focusing object, a medium for said power? The way it's described in the first episode, it seems more the latter.. a method to realize (make actual) magic ability, something which normally wouldn't be able to be used on this planet and this plane of existence. PurpleProse, I will keep reading, (tomorrow though, it's way past my bedtime tonight.. lol) and I look forward to seeing how it responds to Twilight, and how raising fits Twilight better.

A good chapter. Nice length.

Luna damn you and your cliff hangers!

Interesting about the flight spell. Makes sense though, those conjured wings have to be even more physics bending than regular Pegasus wings.

Raising Heart. Proof that good is not necessarily nice. Or gentle.

Excellent work on characterisation once again. Particularly Zecora. She gets far too little attention due to the difficulties of her rhyming dialog, which you have done commendably. (To my uncultured ears anyway.)

...Did Celestia just use sunlight to spy on Fate?

Yay. She thought tiredly. This was probably the first time she was overjoyed to get a B on a test..

You have progressed quite well in tactical flight, master. The Device noted in a neutral voice. It would be wise to continue training outside of the psychic link for this spell.’

Minor error with formatting there I think.

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