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Fluttershy be sad without critique. 
thank you! 
>>601480 This backup has a backup. The description of this story said EVERYTHING has a backup, so the backups need to have backups as well. The backups that backup the original backups also have backups. AND SO ON. A thing has infinite backups if everything has backups.
You have fantastic potential here. I didn't really notice much about the grammer or spelling, but I wasn't really looking
. Anyways, just remember not to make the characters flat and perfect. From what I understand (and NOT from first hand experience) That was the flaw behind the first generation of MLP. Make sure they have flaws you can exploit for the plot or for simple humor so we readers can laugh and enjoy them as we do with the Mane 6.
I am really looking forward to this story. Can't wait for the next update.
An interesting and somewhat original idea. It's definitely got potential.
There is a lack of detail (decryption of surroundings, what characters are feeling, etc) which I believe could make the story much more appealing to readers. Also, your use of punctuation, such as commas, full stops, and semi-colons (or lack of) needs attention.
Get a pre-reader and this story could be quite popular 
Okay, I haven't read this just yet but I am tracking.
I just need to know - is Lyra going to represent the Element of Magic? One of my own stories involves some... events... that take place and Lyra finds herself in that role. Because of this, I just had to check this story out.
Um... I'll be tracking for the concept, but, like someone else pointed out, your grammar is ... uh, to put it lightly, sub par. You should get a prereader or something, because you seriously need it. One of the errors in there is the lack of semicolons. Using commas instead of semicolons when semicolons are called for is bad. Another is just sentence structure in general. Many of your sentences come across as somewhat awkward, and they are written somewhat oddly. Just something to consider.
Of course, there are quite a few other things wrong with it, but I'm not going to pester you with all the minute details.
Anyway, moving away from grammar, the idea is different, and I'm curious as to where this will go. Unlike some people, I support C-Top being there instead of Doctor Whooves, mainly because C-Top is a mare, and the original Elements are all mares. It would make some sense for the backup to be at least somewhat simliar to the original, at least in my opinion.
Okay, before I even read the story, I'm going to go out on a limb and guess the ponies' elements.
Ditzy Doo = Laughter (course')
Vinyl Scratch = Loyalty (she seems the type)
Carrot Top = Honesty (farmers have to be honest, right?)
Octavia = Generosity (go watch epic wub time [I still cry every time 
])
Lyra = Magic or Friendship (she's the one that'd bring them together)
Bon Bon = Kindness (I ran out of characters okay? 
)
Now this is originality! Finally something new and fresh. I like the concept of the Elements having a back up and the characters you picked were perfect! *Is happy Lyra and Bon Bon are in this* My only complaint which isn't your fault. Is that Derpy is the only Pegasus in this group although that can't be helped since we don't have a popular background character who is a one in the show yet. However Derpy is Derpy so I could care less.
I can't wait to see how this turns out! *turns on tracking button*
-TheLoyalBrony
To all the Ones asking about Dr Whooves, I WAS thinking about the idea of putting him in, but I have never watched before Dr Who, so I really don't want to try my luck in unknown fields. 
Also the grammar, my keyboard is on the fritz, so when I do type something, it doesn't come out and I didn't notice it. Bleh
WHAT JUST HAPPENED THEY DONE GOT TELEPORTALED 
No but seriously, you've written this quite well. I like your take on all these characters' personalities. The little events you set up to show what element each of them will represent is really what has made the story for me so far. Of course, Derpy and muffins is a sure-win strategy at all times! 
I hope you continue to write this and continue to enjoy it! 
DUN DUN DUUUUUN
Let's see, what can I say about this one...?
OMIGOSH, why would you take Derpy from her muffins?!
Yo dawg, so I herd you liek empty lines at the end of your story.
If I had a dollar for every 
, 
, and I had reading this...
Now that I have that out of my system, I must make sure that you know how fan-*bleep*ing-tastic that was! If I could write half as well as you, I'd give Stephen King a run for his money...
I enjoy how each of these characters almost perfectly mirror a member of the mane 6. Kudos to you, my good sir, kudos to you!
don't kill me! (more of an important minor pony)
It's probably because she's often paired with Derpy/Ditzy just as how Vinyl is paired with Octavia and Lyra is paired with Bon-Bon.
True that Derpy/Ditzy is often paired with Doctor Whooves as well, but he already has an important status of being a Time Lord.
If you think About it, We have the seventh Element... Or thirteen, Actually....
Doctor Whooves: Element of Badassery.... Okay, No.
I just lawl'd at Lyra's so "meme Attitude", Wantind to be a biped, having Human action Figures, blah blah blah. Nice work, and Congratulations on getting to the Featured Box
I... Actually... I've never read a Derpy/Carrot Top fic before ._. But yeah, Actually, One could say that the Lyra/Bon Bon, Vinyl/Octavia (Kind of) and Derpy/Whooves are the most "Canon" Pairings of the series. Almost none fic (I've seen) Pairs them with Another Pony.
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