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One Piece Fan


I like One Piece and I just got into highschool and my aunt works at/for Square Enix

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Chuggaaconroy bonus episode recording corrupted (big surprise) and he and his pokemon teams (emerald-XD since those are the only pokemon series I watched.) got transported to Equestria , because Arceus forbid on Chuggaaconroy actually posting bonus episodes correctly. Anyway he has to find his beloved pokemon (no this won't involve pokephilia) before the princess go all crazy (this is after Twilight gets her wings but before she gets her dumb crystal tree). Also his plusshes/figerns also turn into what they are in the game Manado, Wolf Link statue, etc. I will only put in Chuggaaconroy's merchandise if he did a let's play on the series it was from or if it was confirmed stuff he had from Stephenvlog

I am doing this because I am a huge fan of Emile and he was the 3rd person who get me into YouTube

Also this is my first story and I'm like 15 so criticism is welcome but not so harsh

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Comments ( 26 )

Seems like an interesting concept. Could use some proofreading though, I already see grammar mistakes. I will follow though, so keep trying to improve your writing.

Another thing I noticed is there is way to much dialogue. Your going to want to be more descriptive to immerse the reader into the setting. There is even more grammar mistakes in this one, and I see waaaaaaaaaaaaaaay too many references that will just distract the reader from the story.

Chuggaaconroy bonus episode recording corrupted (big surprise) and he and his pokemon teams (emerald-XD since those are the only pokemon series I watched.)

but what about methane? his shiny koffing :(

Also , why would chugga randomly attack the library for no reason? And what thought process would the guard have to have gone through to say its under arrest and proceed to stab it dead? It just doesn't make any sense.

Because it destroyed half of ponyville

Also i feel like i should put it into word and copy paste it because this only shows spelling errors

No. Stop this right now. Get a fucking editor. I'm tired of idiots like you thinking they can use the 'I'm 15' excuse or the 'it's my first story' excuse.

Yay a chugga story #TEAMCHUGGA

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I do believe that being 15 or having a story being your excuse for a story to be jack shit (which the first 2 chapters from this story are jack shit). Clearly you didn't read the description clear enough. Yes, I did put that I was 15 and this is my first chapter, but that was for less harsh criticism. And thanks for your comment fuck that shit.

It's good need better grammar but it's getting interesting hope there's more :)

5848186 Do you mind editing it? I have good ideas it gets gets blocked out by my grammar mistakes.

5851181 Sure but this will be my first time doing this so I will try my best.

5851287 this is my first story and 10 people hate it. It can't get much worse.

(please insert FNAF jump scare here)

5851309 Now you have jinxed yourself never say that or the universe will screw you over

5851323 I mean it already had so why not dig the ditch further.

5851354 if you dig to deep you will fall into lava or get turned into a character if you cosplay for some reason and go into a futa or shemale pony universe and I fined out I'm a say I told you not to screw with the universe

5851366 Thank you for the idea. Now if you excuse me I will have a story for you edit in about two weeks tops. *cough Altair cough Moegami cough Corona cough*.

5851420 wicked and blazikin is my favorite last evolution for fire types beside infrnape well I need me sleep so good night or day I dont know your time zone so bye for now

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