Lyra discovers a way to bring the dead back to life. Naturally, this leads to some... strange circumstances in the lives of her and her assistant Bon Bon.
Based off of H.P. Lovecraft's "Herbert West - Reanimator." No, you don't have to have read the original story to understand/enjoy this one.
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I gotta say... I really like this fic. Good job on it!
This was great, but I was quite startled when I saw "Dear Lyra Heartstrings," since that's my name on most MLP sites xD
Story was good.
>inb4 FeatureReally? 6 weeks and no feature? I am disappoint, feature system.I mention it in advance: I haven't read the original Lovecraft story.
Now this was interesting. I didn't find any grammar mistakes, which (truth to be told) is exceptionally rare
. In the following, however, I'd like to point out to some weaker points.
The tone of the fic seemed a bit dry, but it worked very well for the first half of the story: it was a documentary report about scientific measures, so this kind of atmosphere just made it all the more believable. Later, however, when it came down to the more personal events, it fitted the story less. By the end, it was almost 'by the way, Lyra has gone paranoid and / or mad, and we were fearing for our lives. Oh well.'
The comedy tag feels inadequate. The fic was interesting, yes, but not particularly funny.
Also, I would've liked to read more about the whole discovery: you just mention that Lyra developed a serum to resurrect dead, but no additional details on how (though I don't know, maybe the original work haven't mentioned any details either).
And lastly, maybe the more important aspect: I can't see why you've written specially this crossover. Though I may be wrong, since I haven't read the original, but to me, it feels like you just changed the names in a story to 'ponify' it, then posted it.
Please, don't take this for an attack: I'm trying to give you contructive criticism.
Lovecraft inspired fic? Now this I must read
Great story! But I feel like you used too much of the original story, especially in the beginning. You did a great job with your own material but I you could have expanded on the story a little more. Still it made me laugh like the original. Looking forward for future work!
Re-Animator - Rigor Mortis
What Bon-Bon, would you prefer that the undead legion try and eat you alive? I think them being freindly is much better than alot of alternatives coming to my head.
570556 Actually, in the original story, they just ripped apart Herbert (Lyra). They left the assistant alone.
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Very well adapted, and I really liked the twist at the end!
Well that was unexpected